2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very well written Senyru you have penned about the widow at the food store. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from the picture of the family size box of Family size Cheerios. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Gypsy, This is a very well written Senyru you have penned about the widow at the food store. You used very good descriptive words and great imagery from the picture of the family size box of Family size Cheerios. Thanks for sharing. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
aw sad... but a different unique take on widows, empty-nesters, and grocery shopping... never though of it that way before... interesting!
a good senryu - nice imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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aw sad... but a different unique take on widows, empty-nesters, and grocery shopping... never though of it that way before... interesting!
a good senryu - nice imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words
Gypsy
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Gypsy
Yes a good senryu as both the image and words speak together snd portrays the sadness in the widow longing for her family
Cheers Chrisxx
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Hi Gypsy
Yes a good senryu as both the image and words speak together snd portrays the sadness in the widow longing for her family
Cheers Chrisxx
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad. The reduced income makes it harder to buy overpriced cereals like Cheerios. I stopped buying it since they don't use organic oats. Oats can retain the pesticides that is tied to blood cancers like the one my husband has. He used to eat Cheerios every single day for decades!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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That's so sad. The reduced income makes it harder to buy overpriced cereals like Cheerios. I stopped buying it since they don't use organic oats. Oats can retain the pesticides that is tied to blood cancers like the one my husband has. He used to eat Cheerios every single day for decades!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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The thing was that her husband died kids left the nest she didn't need 'family size'
I eat cereals once in a while. I didn't know they cause cancer. I like frosted mini wheats. It seems like everything causes cancer. It's pretty scary.
Thank you big sister.
Love
Marival
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I know! We do have to be careful and I tend to eat the same things over and over so I should be careful, too. Organic cereals are even more expensive!
Comment from aryr
This was a great senryu, Gypsy. The pictures were priceless- they showed the widowed woman looking longing at a family size cheerios. Very well done and sadly but greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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This was a great senryu, Gypsy. The pictures were priceless- they showed the widowed woman looking longing at a family size cheerios. Very well done and sadly but greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Blessed be.
Gypsy
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Wish I had the additional star to give. The picture you chose is perfection itself. Your poetry is simply the most perfect blend with the look on her face. And the photo of the hearts Cheerios, is the icing on the cake,
how did you get a picture there? Wonderful wonderful work. Karen
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Wish I had the additional star to give. The picture you chose is perfection itself. Your poetry is simply the most perfect blend with the look on her face. And the photo of the hearts Cheerios, is the icing on the cake,
how did you get a picture there? Wonderful wonderful work. Karen
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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I have a special computer program for the bottom pictures.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
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It was exquisite. Karen
Comment from GWHARGIS
Sad thing is, when she had the family to feed, she probably couldn't afford the big box of cereal. There are triggers for sadness and happiness everywhere we turn. Great job. Gretchen
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Sad thing is, when she had the family to feed, she probably couldn't afford the big box of cereal. There are triggers for sadness and happiness everywhere we turn. Great job. Gretchen
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Her husband died and children are no longer at home.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, and hunger is a sad fact in America that only one party is willing to try to do something about. It's a shameful fact the the Republicans are so callous, so useless
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, and hunger is a sad fact in America that only one party is willing to try to do something about. It's a shameful fact the the Republicans are so callous, so useless
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Senryu poem- good picture presentation of woman at the food store - widow- (husband died) family gone -all alone / yearning for the days when she purchased family sized Cheerios? Clever- perhaps in stead of widow- Grandma? Widows often have kids?Good job AP
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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I like your Senryu poem- good picture presentation of woman at the food store - widow- (husband died) family gone -all alone / yearning for the days when she purchased family sized Cheerios? Clever- perhaps in stead of widow- Grandma? Widows often have kids?Good job AP
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Widow gives the sense she is alone. It's what I wanted.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from judiverse
I'm there. I know what it's like. Although I enjoy cooking, everything I make is too much for one person. I wouldn't worry about the Cheerios, though, because they'll keep. You convey what the woman is going through. She misses her family, and buying things for one person is just a reminder of when the family was together. the woman in the picture looks sad, but she also has a determined expression in the set of her mouth.
Life goes on. judi
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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I'm there. I know what it's like. Although I enjoy cooking, everything I make is too much for one person. I wouldn't worry about the Cheerios, though, because they'll keep. You convey what the woman is going through. She misses her family, and buying things for one person is just a reminder of when the family was together. the woman in the picture looks sad, but she also has a determined expression in the set of her mouth.
Life goes on. judi
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Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Yes, Judi you got the meaning well.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
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You're very welcome. I could really relate to this. judi