2023 Gypsy's Haiku
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Stroll beneath the Crescent Moon"x
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Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nicely penned, modern haiku that you have been here. It is very well presented, and it looks well on the page. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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This is a very nicely penned, modern haiku that you have been here. It is very well presented, and it looks well on the page. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Always a pleasure seeing your work. I have written some Haiku, and am getting better at it, but still have to refer to the rules now and then. When I have aced it, I graduate to Tanka. I appreciate your writing out information so we can more fully understand the foundation of the work. You are a fine teacher. Keep writing, I will keep reading. Karen
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Always a pleasure seeing your work. I have written some Haiku, and am getting better at it, but still have to refer to the rules now and then. When I have aced it, I graduate to Tanka. I appreciate your writing out information so we can more fully understand the foundation of the work. You are a fine teacher. Keep writing, I will keep reading. Karen
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
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When I grow up I wanna be you! Hell, I'll never grow up!
Karen
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Hahaha....thank you
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I feel the same way...I don't want to grow up
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Poetry is misunderstood, and hard work. Karen
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I got to fan two people today, that is all. Karen
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Don't worry you have time to fan more. You're doing great.
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Use the Force Luke? :)
Your notes remind me of the concept of the Jedi belief in "the force"
I studied this in a philosophy of science fiction class I took in college. I was addicted.
This is so very lovely and I love its brevity. I need to write more modern haiku but the spirit of my FanStory haiku teacher AlvinTEthington is haunting me. He was such a stickler and a haiku purest but I kind of loved him for it. It's hard to shake some of the stuff he pounded into us. I need to set aside some time to peruse your portfolio.
Luv&stuff
Katiemaedead
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Use the Force Luke? :)
Your notes remind me of the concept of the Jedi belief in "the force"
I studied this in a philosophy of science fiction class I took in college. I was addicted.
This is so very lovely and I love its brevity. I need to write more modern haiku but the spirit of my FanStory haiku teacher AlvinTEthington is haunting me. He was such a stickler and a haiku purest but I kind of loved him for it. It's hard to shake some of the stuff he pounded into us. I need to set aside some time to peruse your portfolio.
Luv&stuff
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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LoL I believe in the force. Yoda is a little zen master :) you are wise to make that connection. Well you took a class so you know. We and nature are connected... the night in the tree, the stars in the water.
I have fought my way to where I am today. In the beginning I found a lot of resistance and that is why I always add links to all the great haiku sites... the most reputable sites ... HaikuAssociationOfAmerica.org, HaikuFoundation.org, modernhaiku.org, etc ...
Then I started teaching haiku in fanstory and some took me more seriously. Then i started a haiku club and peoplestarted writing more haiku.
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There's nothing wrong with writing 5-7-5 Haiku the same as There's nothing wrong with writing 17 syllables or less haiku in any combination of syllables in three lines.. The point of haiku is to write it as succinct as you can, no filler unnecessary words. What happens sometimes is that the poet is so set on the 5-7-5 rule that they forget the essence of haiku. In Japan they have a rule, you should be able to recite a haiku in one breath.
Anyway....don't get me started ... lol
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can see the clear night in trees. I am pretty sure I need to do some research on 'zen' since I know absolutely nothing about it, but do hear the work often. I am off to research.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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I can see the clear night in trees. I am pretty sure I need to do some research on 'zen' since I know absolutely nothing about it, but do hear the work often. I am off to research.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Zen is a Buddhist philosophy that all things and people are connected. So you can see the night in the tree or the stars inside the water....etc...
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from karenina
Every time you post your presentation, images, font colors, and words all come together to create your own zen experience. I never leave your work without a bit more serenity. So wonderfully phrased, Gypsy!
Karenina
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Every time you post your presentation, images, font colors, and words all come together to create your own zen experience. I never leave your work without a bit more serenity. So wonderfully phrased, Gypsy!
Karenina
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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I love your reviwes, they are always kind and insightful.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy xoxox
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Oh, my---did your replies disappear with the glitch last night? Mine did! A few reviews too! Thanks for replying---again! :)
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Shelley told me I wrote two reviews for same post. Today the SOCIAL and CLUB icon were not working. I sent a message to Tom he said it should be fixed but I'm still having problems. It happens to the best of us. Hopefully it will be fixed tomorrow. I'm posting the last Women Writers club event. Pray for me. LoL
Comment from aryr
This was a great modern haiku, Gypsy. The picture was beautiful, the crescent moon and the tree. It makes sense to me that the words were perfect. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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This was a great modern haiku, Gypsy. The picture was beautiful, the crescent moon and the tree. It makes sense to me that the words were perfect. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.
Gypsy
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Not sure where you obtain your lovely pictures but this scene is magical, I loved your accompanying words as we view this scene through the bare branches of a tree, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Not sure where you obtain your lovely pictures but this scene is magical, I loved your accompanying words as we view this scene through the bare branches of a tree, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from JSD
Lovely imagery again. I like the twist of metaphor that sees night in the trees. It introduces lots of thoughts about light, here moonlight, and its effects on the landscape. Lovely.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Lovely imagery again. I like the twist of metaphor that sees night in the trees. It introduces lots of thoughts about light, here moonlight, and its effects on the landscape. Lovely.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your modern haiku- nice picture presentation- good syllable count and connection- painting a good picture of a stroll under the harvest moon- can picture moonlight between the branches- nice job - AP
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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I like your modern haiku- nice picture presentation- good syllable count and connection- painting a good picture of a stroll under the harvest moon- can picture moonlight between the branches- nice job - AP
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. I hope you have a wonderful week ahead.
Gypsy
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and well written Modern haiku you have penned. You used great descriptive words, very amazing imagery and all the colors you used went together really well. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Gypsy, This is a very beautiful and well written Modern haiku you have penned. You used great descriptive words, very amazing imagery and all the colors you used went together really well. Thanks for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words. I hope you have a wonderful week ahead.
Gypsy