Coffee With Iris
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Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Gretchen, I am doing a little snooping in your portfolio but fell in love with this piece. This is powerful and is so very meaningful to me, as it reminds me of when my brother was killed in a car accident. The state trooper who was on the scene of the accident first said that my brother had told him that for the first time in years, he had no pain. However he then said that he was holding my mother's hand and she was there to help him make the transition. Which seems to be so much of what you are writing about here. This is awesome, and yes I can see why you have such an attachment to your characters. This was perfectly awesome. Thank you so much.
I do have a silly question for you. I am taking it that your last name is Hargis? Do you by any chance happen to have a relative who works as a comedian in Branson? There is a guy named Hargis, who is hilarious. And not sure if that is his first or last, or maybe even stage name, but just had to ask.
Thanks again for the wonderfully enlightening read!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Gretchen, I am doing a little snooping in your portfolio but fell in love with this piece. This is powerful and is so very meaningful to me, as it reminds me of when my brother was killed in a car accident. The state trooper who was on the scene of the accident first said that my brother had told him that for the first time in years, he had no pain. However he then said that he was holding my mother's hand and she was there to help him make the transition. Which seems to be so much of what you are writing about here. This is awesome, and yes I can see why you have such an attachment to your characters. This was perfectly awesome. Thank you so much.
I do have a silly question for you. I am taking it that your last name is Hargis? Do you by any chance happen to have a relative who works as a comedian in Branson? There is a guy named Hargis, who is hilarious. And not sure if that is his first or last, or maybe even stage name, but just had to ask.
Thanks again for the wonderfully enlightening read!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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I believe there were two branches of Hargis families. I'm not familiar with anyone there but who knows. Somewhere down the line, we are all related, aren't we?
I've heard too many transition stories about departed loved ones coming to the dying ones for it not to be true. Makes the sting of death just a little less painful to hear those things. I'm excited for Sunday. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from papa55mike
No, it's not syrupy at all. Death is nothing but going to sleep, and then opening your eyes in a different place. What a wonderfully written chapter. Is this the final chapter?
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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No, it's not syrupy at all. Death is nothing but going to sleep, and then opening your eyes in a different place. What a wonderfully written chapter. Is this the final chapter?
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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One more chapter then it's done. Thank you for this awesome review. Gretchen
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
You describe the moment of death so well. The imagery of the scene you set up is so clear and emotional. You made me cry again. I like how you describe that moment when you have to let go of the present so you can be with the people you love as they wait for you. I like this imagery....a distant beach close but pulling her away from the.
Does this mean we don't know what happens to Jameson after Iris dies? I hope not. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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You describe the moment of death so well. The imagery of the scene you set up is so clear and emotional. You made me cry again. I like how you describe that moment when you have to let go of the present so you can be with the people you love as they wait for you. I like this imagery....a distant beach close but pulling her away from the.
Does this mean we don't know what happens to Jameson after Iris dies? I hope not. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 29-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Jameson will have the final chapter in this. I'm sorry to make you cry but just know I cried while posting it. Thank you for this wonderful review and the extra star. Gretchen
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I don't feel bad for crying...it's a good cry and it's the sign of a well written story...you make people FEEL
Comment from Ric Myworld
I think one of the most important thing to those of us who lose someone we love is knowing they are no longer in pain and are in a better place. I don't know why I never have a six when I want one most. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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I think one of the most important thing to those of us who lose someone we love is knowing they are no longer in pain and are in a better place. I don't know why I never have a six when I want one most. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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I'm out of sixes as well. Lot of great writing on Sunday. Lol. Thanks for this awesome review. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
No, you did a good job describing Iris's last moments. Jamison is in pain, but Yes, Iris is in a much better place. I hope we get to help Jamison move on.
I'm in limbo , if you will. (comma next to 'limbo' and delete extra space)
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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No, you did a good job describing Iris's last moments. Jamison is in pain, but Yes, Iris is in a much better place. I hope we get to help Jamison move on.
I'm in limbo , if you will. (comma next to 'limbo' and delete extra space)
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Thanks for this. Jameson has one more chapter. Then Coffee With Iris is done. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Ahhhh, we have finally come to the end. Will there be more of Jameson or is he finished, here, too? You probably have some more mileage in this if you want to? It has been a great story anyway.
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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Ahhhh, we have finally come to the end. Will there be more of Jameson or is he finished, here, too? You probably have some more mileage in this if you want to? It has been a great story anyway.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2023
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One final chapter for Jameson. Then it's done. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from damommy
I'm glad she's reunited with Lou, but of course, I feel so sorry for Jameson. He had such a short time with Iris. I have learned that we grieve for ourselves, not the one passing.
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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I'm glad she's reunited with Lou, but of course, I feel so sorry for Jameson. He had such a short time with Iris. I have learned that we grieve for ourselves, not the one passing.
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Yes. That is true about grief. We are left empty armed. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
Oh No ,it is not syrupy .You have written it very well .My eyes were moist as I read this. We don't know what happens when people die ..but she disappearing in a mist touched me deeply ...thank you for this
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Oh No ,it is not syrupy .You have written it very well .My eyes were moist as I read this. We don't know what happens when people die ..but she disappearing in a mist touched me deeply ...thank you for this
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed this. Thank you for the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from jmdg1954
Gretchen,
So peaceful snd calm as Iris slowly drifts with Lou, her husband and friend for so many years. As Daniel awaits, Iris releases Jamesons hand and drifts upward towards heaven.
This was warm and so life like. Excellent closure with Iris.
John
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Gretchen,
So peaceful snd calm as Iris slowly drifts with Lou, her husband and friend for so many years. As Daniel awaits, Iris releases Jamesons hand and drifts upward towards heaven.
This was warm and so life like. Excellent closure with Iris.
John
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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One more chapter and this novella is done. I'm glad you enjoyed it and felt it read authentically. Gretchen
Comment from JSD
Not syrupy. Not contrived. Consoling. Sad. Happy. A brilliant projection of what it might be like. The emotional impact is heightened by our familiarity with the characters, who have become old friends for each other and for us. The sounds are great. The limbo excellent. And then the dancing lines going flat. Assured and excellent. X
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Not syrupy. Not contrived. Consoling. Sad. Happy. A brilliant projection of what it might be like. The emotional impact is heightened by our familiarity with the characters, who have become old friends for each other and for us. The sounds are great. The limbo excellent. And then the dancing lines going flat. Assured and excellent. X
Comment Written 28-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 28-Aug-2023
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Thanks so much. I appreciate you telling me what resonated and the extra star. Gretchen