I Choose Rainbows
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Comment from JSD
Excellent repetitive bit of free verse. We've all been there. Well done for voicing it so cleverly. Love it.
John
"Poetry is the space between words."
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Excellent repetitive bit of free verse. We've all been there. Well done for voicing it so cleverly. Love it.
John
"Poetry is the space between words."
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is an interesting poem. I like the repeat words - If I were. It adds rhythm here to the question of stupidity.
I think a slight tweak may be needed to the 7th line as there is a repeat of - wouldn't have wouldn't be.
Are you trying to say this...
If I were truly stupid, I wouldn't be able to accept logical criticism of the plan.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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This is an interesting poem. I like the repeat words - If I were. It adds rhythm here to the question of stupidity.
I think a slight tweak may be needed to the 7th line as there is a repeat of - wouldn't have wouldn't be.
Are you trying to say this...
If I were truly stupid, I wouldn't be able to accept logical criticism of the plan.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Yes. Thanks
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I have migraines and sometimes really goof the typing. Thanks