Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your Tanka poem - excellent picture presentation!! - Good syllable count and connecting thought - poem paints a nice picture - now or never - poem begins the story in what is called, "first person singular" ME /MY - Suggest carrying this into your third line replacing "the" with MY-( 'back to my dream world') for consistency?

tangled (there) in thoughts of you - (there in the dream world)
and what (might) have been? See what you think.
Good Job Hug - Alan

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023

Thank you, Alan. It's all fixed!

Thank you very much for the kind and helpful review.

Gypsy

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

This is sensual and steamy!! Yet, innocent. It's amazing what can be done with sensual, yet innocent. You are a master of that. This is another great job of writing. Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023

Thank you very much for the kind and helpful review.

Gypsy

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hi Gypsy, this is what I call an ooh-la-la poem. Your poem is filled with high sensory appeal. Of special note:

at dawn I'll be gone
back to the dream world
tangled in thoughts of you

(Whew! This is steamy. Sometimes the dream world is better than the real world.)

Beautiful presentation. Well done. Keep the blue waters flowing.
Xo. M

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023

LoL.

Thank you very much for the kind and helpful review.

Gypsy

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

very lovingly romantic and dreamy
love the red to yellow colours to match the top and bottom pics
nice imagery and smooth flow

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 27-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023

Thank you, Shelley., you are very kind. I appreciate your excellent review.

Gypsy

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Such an emotional poem. The pure abandon in this is through and through. This is sensual and timeless. Thank you for sharing this. It was a pleasure to read. Gretchen

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023

Thank you, Gretchen I appreciate your kind review.

Gypsy

Comment from kahpot

Exceptional

Maybe this one relates to me more as I had just finished reading another one of dreaming for love, to me this one is filled with more hope than dream, another excellent tanka, very well presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 26-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023

Thank you, kym I appreciate your exceptional six stars review, it means a lot to me.

Gypsy