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2023 Gypsy's Haiku

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Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
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Gypsy, this is a lovely poem. The "flowers full of night" is a truly inspired line. You have a special skill for making a memorable description in just a few words.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Thank you very much for your kind feedback and review.

    Be well,

    Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I like the idea of a 'basket full of night'. I enjoyed reading this contest entry. You are the queen of these short poems. I doubt there is anyone better. Good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    a basket full of night, is a zen concept :) i like it too

    Thank you very much for taking the time to review my poem. May you have a wonderful day.

    Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
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"basket full of night" - love that image!

cool haiku about a guy who sells flowers on the side of the road

great imagery - i could see him walking home...
smooth flow of words

thank you for sharing
shelley :)


 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Thank you very much for taking the time to review my poem. May you have a wonderful day.

    Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
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Even though the flower vendor is tired, she can walk home in the company of the rare blue moon, )which is coming next Monday!) and because the full moon is so bright, it fills up her basket.

 Comment Written 24-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
    Yes, that's right. Thank you very much, big sister. It's always good to hear from you.

    Love,

    Marival
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your haiku poem - excellent picture presentation and flow - good syllable count and connection between lines - clever message about the flower vender walking with the the blue moon- nice satori - basket full of night - Good job AP

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Well I shall look out for that blue moon as I've never seen one, thank you. I can understand though why you would want it to be the subject in this particular verse form. Your words convey so well the magic of this little story and the "basket full of night" is a joy to read, producing a lovely sense of calm and peace. Thanks for sharing, Debbie

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. :) Be well.

    Gypsy
Comment from GWHARGIS
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I'm glad you included that tidbit of information about the blue moon. Love to find out where sayings came from. The image of the seller with the empty basket, filled with moonbeam was lively. Gretchen

 Comment Written 23-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
    Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. :) Be well.

    Gypsy