2023 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "While you Sleep".
12 total reviews
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written, and presented free verse poetry. I enjoyed it very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a good day and God bless. Patricia
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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This is a very well written, and presented free verse poetry. I enjoyed it very much and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a good day and God bless. Patricia
Comment Written 24-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for taking the time to review my poem. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
You nailed it again. Very seductive, yet very innocent. That's a perfect combination, seductive, yet innocent. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem and beautiful package with us.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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You nailed it again. Very seductive, yet very innocent. That's a perfect combination, seductive, yet innocent. Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem and beautiful package with us.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. :) Be well.
Gypsy
Comment from karenina
Very seductive... While every line is innocently offered, the ending is suggestive of one craving a level of passion that may have once been...or is deeply desired. I quite steamy way to approach this ekphrastic poem.
(Oh my...or is it ME?)
Karenina
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Very seductive... While every line is innocently offered, the ending is suggestive of one craving a level of passion that may have once been...or is deeply desired. I quite steamy way to approach this ekphrastic poem.
(Oh my...or is it ME?)
Karenina
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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LoL yes, Karenina, it's you. LoL
Thank you very much for the detailed and kind review. Be well.
Gypsy
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Ooops. I ought to blush I suppose...but heck, I'm old enough to own it!
Comment from shelley kaye
cool ekphrastic free verse!
you described the picture well with good imagery, imagination, and smooth word flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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cool ekphrastic free verse!
you described the picture well with good imagery, imagination, and smooth word flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for the detailed and kind review. Be well.
Gypsy
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Gypsy,
What a wonderful poem and such a joy to read.
The presentation is breathtaking, and the poem is a work of magic and artistry.
Each cleverly crafted word finds a perfect place to add wonder to the final reveal.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Hi Gypsy,
What a wonderful poem and such a joy to read.
The presentation is breathtaking, and the poem is a work of magic and artistry.
Each cleverly crafted word finds a perfect place to add wonder to the final reveal.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for the detailed and kind review. Be well.
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
The narrative and the artwork connect nicely, and as always the presentation is a wonderfully done, and as an ekphrastic is an outstanding work, well done, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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The narrative and the artwork connect nicely, and as always the presentation is a wonderfully done, and as an ekphrastic is an outstanding work, well done, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for the detailed and kind review. Be well.
Gypsy
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Pleasure Gypsy
Comment from JSD
Another melancholy poem of loss and memory. Sweetly delineated and the usual lovely colours and art work to complement your gentle words. Well done.
John
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Another melancholy poem of loss and memory. Sweetly delineated and the usual lovely colours and art work to complement your gentle words. Well done.
John
Comment Written 23-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for the detailed and kind review. Be well.
Gypsy
Comment from Iza Deleanu
That could be very well an erotic poetry with all the elements presents, the creeping and the spying, the watching:""Bear meat! That's an endangered species."
"No, Hump bears are only endangered in Central Park, not Alaska. My special friend has just arrived. Talk to you guys later."
"I have to meet Paul and Edie."
"I'm gonna have about a dozen pigs in the blanket with Marilyn."
Jay signs off. "In your dreams. Hasta la vista, baby!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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That could be very well an erotic poetry with all the elements presents, the creeping and the spying, the watching:""Bear meat! That's an endangered species."
"No, Hump bears are only endangered in Central Park, not Alaska. My special friend has just arrived. Talk to you guys later."
"I have to meet Paul and Edie."
"I'm gonna have about a dozen pigs in the blanket with Marilyn."
Jay signs off. "In your dreams. Hasta la vista, baby!" Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Ekphrastic poem- excellent picture presentation- unassuming harp is good! -poem has excellent flow and paints a beautiful and peaceful picture with you metaphors- nice -soothing- only think to suggest- "in"
Your front porch - to 'on' ? English is weird- we can be in our room but not in our front porch - nice job - AP
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I like your Ekphrastic poem- excellent picture presentation- unassuming harp is good! -poem has excellent flow and paints a beautiful and peaceful picture with you metaphors- nice -soothing- only think to suggest- "in"
Your front porch - to 'on' ? English is weird- we can be in our room but not in our front porch - nice job - AP
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I appreciate your time and review, be well. It's fixed, thanks!
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
This is romantic and creepy at the same time! I think Dean would have loved this. I like the movement and the sounds and the gentle yearning to be with the one the narrator loves.
in your front porch (on)
and sways trees around (trees sway) sways isn't transitive but you could claim poetic license. ð???
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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This is romantic and creepy at the same time! I think Dean would have loved this. I like the movement and the sounds and the gentle yearning to be with the one the narrator loves.
in your front porch (on)
and sways trees around (trees sway) sways isn't transitive but you could claim poetic license. ð???
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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yes, I claim poetic license lol thank you big sister, i will correct it.
I like to think that Dean is around and had a laugh. He loved horror as much as me. Thank you, big sister.
love,
marival