2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "~ I will Follow you ~"-
8 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
am I losing it, or has this poem changed since I read it yesterday? Or was there another poem with Venus yesterday?
Today I'm recovering from a long drive and treatment... it's never a great day, the day after.
As you know, I love our Queen Venus;I wait for her every night to show herself on our
north-western skies.
The fact that so many other people may be doing the same lends thought to the connection we all are having through the same beauty.
The way in which this poem is composed and constructed allows for a very personal connection, as if like the poem was written for you... and that's a very special thing to be able to do.
Love the way this Gogyohka poem lingers... hanging in the sky of possibility.
Truly beautiful presentation... Stunning!
With our thoughts we create...
a pause in the middle of the air.
Warm regards,
James.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Hi MariVal,
am I losing it, or has this poem changed since I read it yesterday? Or was there another poem with Venus yesterday?
Today I'm recovering from a long drive and treatment... it's never a great day, the day after.
As you know, I love our Queen Venus;I wait for her every night to show herself on our
north-western skies.
The fact that so many other people may be doing the same lends thought to the connection we all are having through the same beauty.
The way in which this poem is composed and constructed allows for a very personal connection, as if like the poem was written for you... and that's a very special thing to be able to do.
Love the way this Gogyohka poem lingers... hanging in the sky of possibility.
Truly beautiful presentation... Stunning!
With our thoughts we create...
a pause in the middle of the air.
Warm regards,
James.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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I was thinking of a good friend who happens to love Venus, he looks for her in his paradise. I don't remember writing two venus poems but i write two poems a day so they all become one.
I am sorry to hear about your hard day. I am sending you healing thoughts and prayers.
All my poems are written for the one and only ONE. We are all connected, but you know that.
I am happy that you like it. It means a lot to me. Thank you for another exceptional and kind review.
abracitos y besitos, amigo mio
Marival
" We are not meant to be perfect, we are meant to be whole." - Oprah Winfrey
Comment from aryr
This was a great gogyohka, Gypsy. Fantastic pictures-first the young lady with her head tilted to the sky overhead, then the group of tulips. I was amazed by your choice of words. Great words, great job. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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This was a great gogyohka, Gypsy. Fantastic pictures-first the young lady with her head tilted to the sky overhead, then the group of tulips. I was amazed by your choice of words. Great words, great job. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.
Gypsy
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I'm not sure what Venus rays are but I can use my imagination and they are absolutely gorgeous being the brightest light in the sky and they are far reaching touching all that is good. I enjoyed reading your poem and the presentation.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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I'm not sure what Venus rays are but I can use my imagination and they are absolutely gorgeous being the brightest light in the sky and they are far reaching touching all that is good. I enjoyed reading your poem and the presentation.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Venus has tail rays that are made of water. But I was just using poetic license. LoL
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
fanstory gremlins have invaded your notes and left crumbs of question marks ;-)
great gogyohka suite. very dreamy and romantic
good imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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fanstory gremlins have invaded your notes and left crumbs of question marks ;-)
great gogyohka suite. very dreamy and romantic
good imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 21-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much, Shelley. Have a wonderful day.
I fixed the gremlins lol
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Wow. I like the assonants in the first stanza (sky, light and ride). It sounds like rhyming. It's too bad that they can't be together, just secretly follow each other.
Well done.
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Wow. I like the assonants in the first stanza (sky, light and ride). It sounds like rhyming. It's too bad that they can't be together, just secretly follow each other.
Well done.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2023
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Thank you! It's a treat to read your excellent review and encouraging words. Thank you for reading my poem.
Gypsy
"To the world you may be just one person, but to one person you may be the world."--Dr Seuss
Comment from GWHARGIS
I know nothing about the planets but I like the reference to the solar system as the two lovers. Very mysterious and dark. Great poem. Thanks for sharing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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I know nothing about the planets but I like the reference to the solar system as the two lovers. Very mysterious and dark. Great poem. Thanks for sharing. Gretchen
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much, Gretchen. I appreciate your time and kind review.
Gypsy
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your Gogyohka poem -good picture presentation- Poem flows well - good idea - outside the box - Venus looking down - I will follow you reminds of the words to a very popular song - "I will follow you where you may go- no mountain too high - no river too deep- good job- AP
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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I like your Gogyohka poem -good picture presentation- Poem flows well - good idea - outside the box - Venus looking down - I will follow you reminds of the words to a very popular song - "I will follow you where you may go- no mountain too high - no river too deep- good job- AP
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much, . AP, I appreciate your time and kind review.
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
Enjoyed your fun poem of dedicated love. Your gogyohka poem reminded me of two oldies songs with "I will follow you" and "I'm your Venus." I think the other lines also bring to mind those old songs.
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Enjoyed your fun poem of dedicated love. Your gogyohka poem reminded me of two oldies songs with "I will follow you" and "I'm your Venus." I think the other lines also bring to mind those old songs.
Comment Written 20-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much,, Big sister. I appreciate your time and kind review.
Love
Marival