Day and Night
The battle continues between ...12 total reviews
Comment from Andrea Kepple
Your word choices are strong. Gave me clear, strong images in my mind's eye. I appreciate the comparison with a cat sliding off a bed and doing it's best to get a grip to either not fall at all or to slow the progression for a soft landing.
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Your word choices are strong. Gave me clear, strong images in my mind's eye. I appreciate the comparison with a cat sliding off a bed and doing it's best to get a grip to either not fall at all or to slow the progression for a soft landing.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
Comment from jim vecchio
God has given you several talents. That was a simply beautiful photo and your words highlighted God's ordinances of night and day and the visual experiences He grants us with each.
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God has given you several talents. That was a simply beautiful photo and your words highlighted God's ordinances of night and day and the visual experiences He grants us with each.
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
Comment from royowen
This universe, when one analyses it, apart from the observational skills of astronomers, but like evolutionists, they are simply trying to make sense out of a universe without God, it's simply easier to leave it in God's amazing, awesome hands, beautifully written Tom, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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This universe, when one analyses it, apart from the observational skills of astronomers, but like evolutionists, they are simply trying to make sense out of a universe without God, it's simply easier to leave it in God's amazing, awesome hands, beautifully written Tom, blessings Roy
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thanks Roy
Gif has done quite well since earth?s creation
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Yep
Comment from Ric Myworld
Wow, you sure take some fantastic pictures. I'm sure I could spend hours just scanning over your albums and enjoy every minute. If you aren't selling some of your photos, you sure should be. I could see of six-footer of this piece on my wall. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Wow, you sure take some fantastic pictures. I'm sure I could spend hours just scanning over your albums and enjoy every minute. If you aren't selling some of your photos, you sure should be. I could see of six-footer of this piece on my wall. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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You made me blush
I actually dreamt last night to uncover my Nikons and photograph our latest calves arrivals
They are adorable and my model has ? let?s say retired. 😇
Comment from Terry Broxson
Tom, this is a very nice, what I would call a freestyle poem. I think you captured the battle very nicely. I loved the reference to Venetian blinds, very creative, and Superman's cape, also creative. Well done, good luck in the contest. Terry.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Tom, this is a very nice, what I would call a freestyle poem. I think you captured the battle very nicely. I loved the reference to Venetian blinds, very creative, and Superman's cape, also creative. Well done, good luck in the contest. Terry.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Did I enter a contest
My bad
Thanks
Comment from Liz O'Neill
It is good to see that you use the literally technique of juxtaposition to be the crux of your poem. This invites the reader to see the contrast in day and night and also the metaphor of light and darkness. Just as we cannot control the Sun the Moon the morning the night we cannot control the darkness that surrounds us. We can only light the dark moments of our day and other people's too.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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It is good to see that you use the literally technique of juxtaposition to be the crux of your poem. This invites the reader to see the contrast in day and night and also the metaphor of light and darkness. Just as we cannot control the Sun the Moon the morning the night we cannot control the darkness that surrounds us. We can only light the dark moments of our day and other people's too.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Ok. That is good to know - juxtaposition. I did not know I did, I looked it up. You are right as night and likely day, too. Thanks for the comment.
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I was an English and writng teacher. This is how I reviewed my students' writing too. I have my favorite links for the literary techniques if you are interested.
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I appreciate the invite but at 76 with sixty years experience I?m ok being ? well, me.
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I also am 76. I put (trombones) after the number so I can remember. Next year, it will be Sunset Strip...lol
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Kookie burns and Efron Z
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You've got it...707
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Comment from CrystieCookie999
I enjoyed reading this prosy poem. Or maybe it's poetic prose. Favorite lines:
Golden rays splay over and under
clouds at rest, cleaving as would
a cat falling off a bedspread,
doing its best not to plummet
I have a suggestion to add a comma
after this line:
labors to maintain a position,
I might suggest alternative punctuation in this area:
Ol' Sol is a mightier power;
but no more than the night
I think I might say:
Ol' Sol is a mightier power,
but no more than the night,
Good job in this contest.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I enjoyed reading this prosy poem. Or maybe it's poetic prose. Favorite lines:
Golden rays splay over and under
clouds at rest, cleaving as would
a cat falling off a bedspread,
doing its best not to plummet
I have a suggestion to add a comma
after this line:
labors to maintain a position,
I might suggest alternative punctuation in this area:
Ol' Sol is a mightier power;
but no more than the night
I think I might say:
Ol' Sol is a mightier power,
but no more than the night,
Good job in this contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I changed the colonesque mark to comma. Grammarly didn't warn i was wrong but I have a fetish for semi-colons and elipsises! Tom H
Comment from GWHARGIS
I love your poetry, but this has to be my all time favorite one. I love the flowing lyrical feel to this. You never cease to amaze me. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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I love your poetry, but this has to be my all time favorite one. I love the flowing lyrical feel to this. You never cease to amaze me. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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And you are unmatched in your flattery 😍
Keep it up
😊
Comment from Mary Vigasin
First, I have to say that photo is breathtaking, but it does not take away from the beautiful, brilliant and creative imagery of your words.
"a cat falling off a bedspread,"
"Nature's Venetian blinds." and the calmness and beauty of the last stanza:
"Just as seasons have a reason
night and day share a purpose
patented by God alone."
Perfection!
Best wishes in the contest.
Mary
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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First, I have to say that photo is breathtaking, but it does not take away from the beautiful, brilliant and creative imagery of your words.
"a cat falling off a bedspread,"
"Nature's Venetian blinds." and the calmness and beauty of the last stanza:
"Just as seasons have a reason
night and day share a purpose
patented by God alone."
Perfection!
Best wishes in the contest.
Mary
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you. There are spots within that may need some change, but you highlighted some good lines that made my day.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine free-write and it seems like the sun is peeping through those blinds again here Tom, ha ha ha, I enjoyed your fine words, lovely picture too, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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A fine free-write and it seems like the sun is peeping through those blinds again here Tom, ha ha ha, I enjoyed your fine words, lovely picture too, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you. There are spots within that may need some change, but you highlighted some good lines that made my day.