2023 Gypsy's Free Verse
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Your Body Next to Mine".
14 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
As ever, a very evocative verse, exploring all the senses and ending with this, the sweetest and most melancholic of stories about Nigel the gannet. A deeply emotional journey conveyed in exquisite words. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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As ever, a very evocative verse, exploring all the senses and ending with this, the sweetest and most melancholic of stories about Nigel the gannet. A deeply emotional journey conveyed in exquisite words. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 18-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 18-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy
Comment from LJbutterfly
You used magnificent, beautiful love language to describe a couple's appreciation of the moment facing them. This poem is tender, flowing, and filled with imagery. I wish you the best in the contest.
It was a sad love story of the gannet bird that never received love and affection from his chosen stone, fake partner. How lonely it must have felt to dream of love that never materialized.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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You used magnificent, beautiful love language to describe a couple's appreciation of the moment facing them. This poem is tender, flowing, and filled with imagery. I wish you the best in the contest.
It was a sad love story of the gannet bird that never received love and affection from his chosen stone, fake partner. How lonely it must have felt to dream of love that never materialized.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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thank you very much :)
Comment from patcelaw
This is an interesting form that you have written, and I enjoyed it very much. I can't imagine a bird that continually was enamored with a stone bird. I enjoyed your notes which helped with the understanding of what your phone was about.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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This is an interesting form that you have written, and I enjoyed it very much. I can't imagine a bird that continually was enamored with a stone bird. I enjoyed your notes which helped with the understanding of what your phone was about.
Comment Written 17-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you (*=*)
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Gypsy,
Your beautiful poem flows softly like the tender love you write about.
You use the senses, along with poignant images to give the reader a sense of a love so profound that the couple really dread separation.
I like the way your poem flows. Your photos are awesome too.
Good luck!
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Gypsy,
Your beautiful poem flows softly like the tender love you write about.
You use the senses, along with poignant images to give the reader a sense of a love so profound that the couple really dread separation.
I like the way your poem flows. Your photos are awesome too.
Good luck!
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Cindy
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your free verse poem- good picture presentation connecting to the poem- good reference to the bird Nigel- good story about his deep feelings of love persisting in spite of his circumstance- connecting to you poem - nice part about reflection of stars in his eyes - getting lost in his sky's- good job AP
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I like your free verse poem- good picture presentation connecting to the poem- good reference to the bird Nigel- good story about his deep feelings of love persisting in spite of his circumstance- connecting to you poem - nice part about reflection of stars in his eyes - getting lost in his sky's- good job AP
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----reminds me of my situation, trying to get some kind of reaction out of my wife, she was a stone statue. Now, everything makes sense, she wasn't hearing me because she had ears of stone. I feel so relieved it finally makes sense!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----reminds me of my situation, trying to get some kind of reaction out of my wife, she was a stone statue. Now, everything makes sense, she wasn't hearing me because she had ears of stone. I feel so relieved it finally makes sense!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Are you still married?
I know what you mean
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
This sounds like a romance that should never be, a stolen tryst that should f should not happen, but the resistance is futile, and overcome with desire, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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This sounds like a romance that should never be, a stolen tryst that should f should not happen, but the resistance is futile, and overcome with desire, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Roy,
thank you very much, my friend, I always appreciate your kind reviews. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy
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Bless you
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. This is very passionate, yet innocent. I covers the senses. I can feel the breeze, smell the jasmine, lavender, and lemon, taste the honey and almonds. I could go on, but I think you get the picture. Wonderful write. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. This is very passionate, yet innocent. I covers the senses. I can feel the breeze, smell the jasmine, lavender, and lemon, taste the honey and almonds. I could go on, but I think you get the picture. Wonderful write. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much, Barbara, may you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
Oh, dang, your author notes were so sad. Your poem was sad, but in a different way. There is still tonight and things in the future are not set in stone. Only the past cannot be changed. Great poem. Gretchen
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Oh, dang, your author notes were so sad. Your poem was sad, but in a different way. There is still tonight and things in the future are not set in stone. Only the past cannot be changed. Great poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Gretchen. Yes poor little negal.
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
awww omg that's so sad!!
birdie died of a broken heart :(
this was a great free verse poem for him
good images and smooth flow
the repeating line works well
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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awww omg that's so sad!!
birdie died of a broken heart :(
this was a great free verse poem for him
good images and smooth flow
the repeating line works well
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs