Pucker Up
An Even The Odds Poem13 total reviews
Comment from Heather Knight
No more sixes this week, but your poem deserves one.
The picture is priceless and you've described it with your usual sense of humor and a big dollop of tenderness.
I hope you're having a great holiday.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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No more sixes this week, but your poem deserves one.
The picture is priceless and you've described it with your usual sense of humor and a big dollop of tenderness.
I hope you're having a great holiday.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2023
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Ah, thanks so much, Maria :)
I appreciate your lovely comments.
With love, Debra x
Comment from jim vecchio
I see that wonderful pam(respa) has inspired and encouraged both of us to write this fascinating form. You aced it! And then you topped it with tht precious photo. Great work!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I see that wonderful pam(respa) has inspired and encouraged both of us to write this fascinating form. You aced it! And then you topped it with tht precious photo. Great work!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Jim, for your lovely feedback :)
I will have to check out your Even the Odds poem!
Best wishes, Debra
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You are welcome to visit my portfolio anytime. It's G-rated!
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I wonder what happened to ym roger. The picture is precious. It reminds me of my granddaughter who does the same pose. :)
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I wonder what happened to ym roger. The picture is precious. It reminds me of my granddaughter who does the same pose. :)
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Hi Gypsy,
I wonder the same... hope she's doing well.
Thanks for the read :)
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Val Crisson
What a difficult poetic form, and you do a fabulous job in mastering it. Love the subject matter, and those shades are a perfect choice for that pucker. "In style, she wore her messy waves of gold" - love this line. My granddaughter is a dram queen, also, so I get the point completely.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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What a difficult poetic form, and you do a fabulous job in mastering it. Love the subject matter, and those shades are a perfect choice for that pucker. "In style, she wore her messy waves of gold" - love this line. My granddaughter is a dram queen, also, so I get the point completely.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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Hi Val :)
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback. I'm glad you enjoyed the read.
Congrats on placing in the Lune contest - I knew yours was a definite contender ;)
Best wishes as always, Debra
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Thank you Debra
Comment from Barbara H.
Oh what a fun story to look back on. Little girls can have so much fun! Where exactly is Yorkshire? I would have put isn't she cute instead of wasn't she cute. But thats just my opinion. Barbara H
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reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Oh what a fun story to look back on. Little girls can have so much fun! Where exactly is Yorkshire? I would have put isn't she cute instead of wasn't she cute. But thats just my opinion. Barbara H
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Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Hi Barbara, Thank you for your feedback :) Yorkshire is a beautiful county in the north of England. I put 'wasn't', rather than 'isn't', because it is a historical photograph. She's almost thirteen now and would die of embarrassment if I called her cute!
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The picture alone would seal it for me. Remember, you created her too. You write well, keep it up. You used a light touch which melded perfectly with the picture. I bet she is amazing and creative too. Karen
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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The picture alone would seal it for me. Remember, you created her too. You write well, keep it up. You used a light touch which melded perfectly with the picture. I bet she is amazing and creative too. Karen
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Ah, thanks so much, Karen :) She is definitely amazing and creative. She's also intelligent, imaginative, sensitive, argumentative, tetchy and explosive - now twelve, she's a force of nature!
Best wishes, Debra
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OOOH! the teenage years! That's going to be fun. I had two boys. 48 and 44 now. How did that happen?
Karen
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Crazy isn't it?! I wish I knew where the time went...
Ben is 18, Katie is almost 16 and Rebecca will be 13 at Christmas - pubescent hormones are rife here, not to mention my peri-menopausal ones added to the mix!
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Take lots of pictures. And instead of buying lots of things, spend the money on family adventures. Take out a map close your eyes and point go there. When you have a kids a party have a treasure hunt. Costs nothing endlessly fun. Karen
Comment from Father Flaps
Very nice, Deb! I don't think I've run across this poetic form before, but you've done a great job with it. I especially like the synonyms, "pucker/pout", depending on Rebecca's mood. Love the name... does she get "Becky" at times? I always remember my first girlfriend, Becky Thatcher, from Mark Twain's story about Tom Sawyer.
Nice ending, too...
"with lips stuck out, in
comical
pout"
Thanks for sharing your memory!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Very nice, Deb! I don't think I've run across this poetic form before, but you've done a great job with it. I especially like the synonyms, "pucker/pout", depending on Rebecca's mood. Love the name... does she get "Becky" at times? I always remember my first girlfriend, Becky Thatcher, from Mark Twain's story about Tom Sawyer.
Nice ending, too...
"with lips stuck out, in
comical
pout"
Thanks for sharing your memory!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Hello Kimbob :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback. Glad you enjoyed the read!
Rebecca usually gets Becca or Bec, although If I'm hollering her from the kitchen, I don't holler 'Bec', as we also have a Ben and I end up with both of them hollering back at me! Not that I condone hollering, but sometimes it's unavoidable!
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a fun form and you made the most of every word to create this story about this fun loving girl in her sunglasses, you made me smile and I loved this photograph of Rebecca, she is very beautiful, a joy to read Debra, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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This is a fun form and you made the most of every word to create this story about this fun loving girl in her sunglasses, you made me smile and I loved this photograph of Rebecca, she is very beautiful, a joy to read Debra, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Dolly, for your lovely feedback :) I'm glad you enjoyed my poem! Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from lyenochka
Great job with your Even the Odds poem! Yvette would be proud that you used it! Rebecca is glamorous and knows how to "strike a pose." Are you all from Yorkshire and that is why she's a "Yorkshire rose"? Great rhymes!
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Great job with your Even the Odds poem! Yvette would be proud that you used it! Rebecca is glamorous and knows how to "strike a pose." Are you all from Yorkshire and that is why she's a "Yorkshire rose"? Great rhymes!
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Hi Helen :)
Thank you for your lovely feedback, I'm glad you enjoyed my Even the Odds poem and that you thought Yvette would like it too :)
Yes, we're all from Yorkshire (and proud of to be!)
Best wishes as always, Debra :) x
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Hooray for Yorkshire. We know an artist from Yorkshire. Do you know Andy Urwin? He makes raku style ceramic houses.
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No I don?t know him, but I just googled him and wow! His little houses are beautiful 😍
Comment from papa55mike
We also have a five-year-old that stays with us and her ability to strike a pose is amazing. It's usually mixed with pouty lips. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
miek
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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We also have a five-year-old that stays with us and her ability to strike a pose is amazing. It's usually mixed with pouty lips. What a wonderfully written poem. Best of luck with your writing!
Have a great day, and God bless.
miek
Comment Written 15-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Hi Mike :) Thank you so much for your lovely feedback - enjoy your five year old, they grow so quickly!
Best wishes, Debra
