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[relief for my feet]

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Comment from Andrea Kepple
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Your poem made me smile.
I love how the refrain "relief for my feet" fits every stanza.
I love how each stanza has a completely different image for the feet that need the relief.

 Comment Written 14-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 15-Aug-2023
    I appreciate your kind words.
Comment from Sanku
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This is a lovely suit of haikus .tis scenario is familiar to all of us. Tired legs doing umpteen chores asks for kindness.All the best for the contest .

 Comment Written 13-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
    Thank you so much.
Comment from Sarah Tummey
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Not only are these haiku related, you did well to get each final line the same. For me, the penultimate line seems a bit weird. Why would someone sit on the floor after chasing a toddler all day? What about "Bum hits couch" instead?

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
    Your suggestion is much better, I made the change. Thanks for the review.
reply by Sarah Tummey on 13-Aug-2023
    Oh, thanks. Hope you do well in the contest.
Comment from jim vecchio
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I enjoyed your take on the haiku suite. I can truly identify with this, and the illustration, as I have just gotten over a terrible foot infection. One question: In the last stanza, is that "bum" or "burn"?

 Comment Written 12-Aug-2023

reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
    Bum meaning buttocks. Thank you for your review.
reply by jim vecchio on 12-Aug-2023
    Okay, I thought so, but wasn't sure. You did a great job!