Saving Mr. Calvin
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Comment from lyenochka
I may have skipped over this one as I'm getting to the older posts I missed. I see they have created a water hazard - oh no! Glad that Lotte is really getting into the game, too!
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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I may have skipped over this one as I'm getting to the older posts I missed. I see they have created a water hazard - oh no! Glad that Lotte is really getting into the game, too!
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2023
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That hole looms large in the final match as you will soon see. Yep, Lotte becomes the original golf course architect.
Comment from lancellot
A good chapter, well written. It shows how different course at different locations were made, and how that made the game more interesting. The good nature of your main characters and most of the people who are helping and housing them will go over well with the FanStory readers.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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A good chapter, well written. It shows how different course at different locations were made, and how that made the game more interesting. The good nature of your main characters and most of the people who are helping and housing them will go over well with the FanStory readers.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Thanksellot. We get the birth of golf course architecture too as the game develops.
Comment from w.j.debi
Hi Jim,
You've been reviewing my work so I thought I'd drop in on your novel.
The dialogue is well done and seems natural. The descriptions of the landscape are also well done. I love that the goats and sheep must crop the grass to prepare it for the game.
Forgive me since I am jumping in mid-story. I am confused by the term 'kolfer'. I tried googling it but didn't come up with anything. Is it like golf? I don't know much about golf, but the terminology such as 'greens' and 'holes' leads me in that direction.
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Hi Jim,
You've been reviewing my work so I thought I'd drop in on your novel.
The dialogue is well done and seems natural. The descriptions of the landscape are also well done. I love that the goats and sheep must crop the grass to prepare it for the game.
Forgive me since I am jumping in mid-story. I am confused by the term 'kolfer'. I tried googling it but didn't come up with anything. Is it like golf? I don't know much about golf, but the terminology such as 'greens' and 'holes' leads me in that direction.
Comment Written 12-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 13-Aug-2023
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Welcome aboard, debi. This story is about the origin of the game of golf, the first semblance of which happened in Holland in the 13th century as opposed to Scotland in the 15th century as many believe. The word "kolf" meant club in old Dutch, and the verb form was "kolven" which meant clubbing or hitting. They also gave that to the name of the game. A kolfer is thus a golfer. I use kolf and its various forms throughout Part 1 which we are about 2/3 of the way through now (but the best part is coming up.)
This is a time travel story, which begins in the year 2032 in Santa Barbara, California with a foursome of golfers playing golf one day when one of them steps under an old railroad trestle to retrieve a ball hit out of bounds, and suddenly he is in Holland in the year 1247.
You don't need to know much about golf to get into this story because this is the very beginning of golf and the characters are inventing it as they go. Don't hesitate to ask any questions if you don't understand something that's happened so far. I'll be happy to answer them.
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Time travel. This sounds fun!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Regardless of the hard work, sheep and goats were a lot easier to use than push mowers over all that pasture. Lotte certainly came up with the most difficult hole and the water hazard.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Regardless of the hard work, sheep and goats were a lot easier to use than push mowers over all that pasture. Lotte certainly came up with the most difficult hole and the water hazard.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Sheep and goats had their own built-in method of fertilization too!
That hole will play a pivotal role in the upcoming matches as you've probably guessed.
Comment from Jay Squires
You have an uncanny ability to make the description of laying out the holes fun for the reader. Another way of saying that is you make engineering a romantic and exciting venture.
If it were me ... I would have one of my precocious characters develop the idea for a lawn mower. You are such a good writer that we can accept the romantic notion of sheep cutting the approach to a hole in nice, smooth swaths ... and without leaving globs of poop-droppings as hazards. I think Lotte's mind would work in that direction, don't you? Just something to consider for later drafts.
"Let's hope they don't feel his prick!" I said, and Lars cracked up. [Haw-haw! You might need to go back and add the "language warning", bordering on the "sexual content". Along with Lars and Killian, himself, I cracked up!!]
I really am enjoying this, Jim!
Jay
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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You have an uncanny ability to make the description of laying out the holes fun for the reader. Another way of saying that is you make engineering a romantic and exciting venture.
If it were me ... I would have one of my precocious characters develop the idea for a lawn mower. You are such a good writer that we can accept the romantic notion of sheep cutting the approach to a hole in nice, smooth swaths ... and without leaving globs of poop-droppings as hazards. I think Lotte's mind would work in that direction, don't you? Just something to consider for later drafts.
"Let's hope they don't feel his prick!" I said, and Lars cracked up. [Haw-haw! You might need to go back and add the "language warning", bordering on the "sexual content". Along with Lars and Killian, himself, I cracked up!!]
I really am enjoying this, Jim!
Jay
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2023
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Now don't diminish the role of the poop-dropping. It was a great, natural method of fertilization!
You're right, I completely forgot to set the language warning for that crack. I will go back and do it. Thanks for your great comments, Jay.
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Well, I thought I was kidding about the language warning. I think Killian gave us a delightful pun!
Jay
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Just in case people don't take it that way. Probably unnecessary.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I took a lot of work and energy to get this course laid out. I can't wait to see the outcome. I am sure it will be really good. That one hole seems very difficult to make. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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I took a lot of work and energy to get this course laid out. I can't wait to see the outcome. I am sure it will be really good. That one hole seems very difficult to make. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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I hope it will be as exciting to read as it was to write.
Comment from JSD
The mowing process remains so funny. They ought to put reins on and go up and down in stripes! And now we have a water barrier. Marvellous. Well done.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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The mowing process remains so funny. They ought to put reins on and go up and down in stripes! And now we have a water barrier. Marvellous. Well done.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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My son and I thought of that (harnessing the sheep together) when I told him about the story. Great minds think alike! Now we just need bunkers.
Comment from royowen
I like your sense of humour, but I'm glad you made it, heh heh. Yes the developing ofbthe game and establishing and ratifying the way they mow down the grass on the greens would have been quite difficult and hard work, relying on the animals for nice flat greens. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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I like your sense of humour, but I'm glad you made it, heh heh. Yes the developing ofbthe game and establishing and ratifying the way they mow down the grass on the greens would have been quite difficult and hard work, relying on the animals for nice flat greens. Beautifully written Jim, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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I'm pretty sure those early greens were not quite as smooth as today's by quite a long shot, but they had fun on them anyway. I guess it's all in what you get used to. Perhaps the holes were larger to give them a little more leeway.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Their course is beginning to sound more and more like a PGA tournament course. Well, except for the fact that the PGA uses lawnmowers to cut their grass:-)
Fair, round 2, will be interesting. Now we get to see teams playing for the first time.
Thanks for another good chapter, Jim!
Pam
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Their course is beginning to sound more and more like a PGA tournament course. Well, except for the fact that the PGA uses lawnmowers to cut their grass:-)
Fair, round 2, will be interesting. Now we get to see teams playing for the first time.
Thanks for another good chapter, Jim!
Pam
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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I was joking with my son about harnessing a line of them together and leading them down the fairway to cut a nice swath. I don't think it happened like that, though!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Who is Tante Ellie?
Once a golfer, always a golfer, even if only in your head.
and I see your carnality showing herein, as usual.
"Let's hope they don't feel his prick!?" Really?
You are a Robin Williams type of guy.
Be well.
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reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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Who is Tante Ellie?
Once a golfer, always a golfer, even if only in your head.
and I see your carnality showing herein, as usual.
"Let's hope they don't feel his prick!?" Really?
You are a Robin Williams type of guy.
Be well.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2023
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She was Oom Gerrit's wife (Arie and Lotte's aunt) who had died about 3 or 4 years ago. Her death was briefly mentioned the first time we met Oom Gerrit. Robin Williams, eh? I'll take that as a compliment.