One Man's Calling
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Comment from JSD
Once again your writing is so impressive. You seem to have a depth of knowledge that fuels the narrative. All this train stuff seems so authentic and the reader is absolutely with you as this accident occurs. Brilliant!
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Once again your writing is so impressive. You seem to have a depth of knowledge that fuels the narrative. All this train stuff seems so authentic and the reader is absolutely with you as this accident occurs. Brilliant!
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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You make me smile.
Thank you for your kindness.
Comment from Jim Wile
Very promising start to Ben's next adventure, Wayne. It was neat learning about old fashioned steam locomotives and some of their problems. You did your research well, as it was very realistically written.
I guess there's never an easy path for Ben. There's always trouble of one kind or another to challenge him on his mission. But that's what keeps it interesting. Well done. - Jim
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Very promising start to Ben's next adventure, Wayne. It was neat learning about old fashioned steam locomotives and some of their problems. You did your research well, as it was very realistically written.
I guess there's never an easy path for Ben. There's always trouble of one kind or another to challenge him on his mission. But that's what keeps it interesting. Well done. - Jim
Comment Written 10-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2023
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Thank you. (Wouldn't be much of a calling to just sit and scratch the cat.) smiley face here
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Ben is always getting himself into messes it seems to me. I think it would improve this if you concentrated more now on describing these, and less on repeating Ben has a calling (we got that message and it's wearing a bit thin) kay
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Ben is always getting himself into messes it seems to me. I think it would improve this if you concentrated more now on describing these, and less on repeating Ben has a calling (we got that message and it's wearing a bit thin) kay
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Hmmm. Hadn't thought of that. Thank you.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
When the time comes for a hero, Ben is sure to apply. The train disaster is something he can do because he knows he will be safe. But best of all he could give the engineer a good send off to heaven.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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When the time comes for a hero, Ben is sure to apply. The train disaster is something he can do because he knows he will be safe. But best of all he could give the engineer a good send off to heaven.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Ben needed an issue that wasn't as personal as has been the case.
Comment from Teri7
Wayne, This is another very good chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Wayne, This is another very good chapter you have penned. You used very good descriptive words and very good dialogue. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This is an interesting turn of events Ben isn't going to get to California right away after all. I guess he is doing what needs to done and he was there to make sure Clay was assured of a future with God.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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This is an interesting turn of events Ben isn't going to get to California right away after all. I guess he is doing what needs to done and he was there to make sure Clay was assured of a future with God.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you for a very kind review.
I'm trying real hard not to be predictable.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Your last line is not gray; did it fix itself, I wonder? I'm slowly learning how to deal with some of these issues. If it happens again, I would highlight the text, then go to font color and check "black".
I'm not sure why Ben was wondering if he should visit his old flame, as the train has passed on that relationship (yes, pun intended).
This was action-packed, and I enjoyed seeing references to Donner Pass, Truckee, and the Sierras, as these are areas I've been researching for Dolly for the last month. I'm not sure what year this takes place in, but if it's before 1846 it was not called Donner Pass.
Good read, Wayne. I feel like Ben is a time traveler of sorts.
Pam
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Your last line is not gray; did it fix itself, I wonder? I'm slowly learning how to deal with some of these issues. If it happens again, I would highlight the text, then go to font color and check "black".
I'm not sure why Ben was wondering if he should visit his old flame, as the train has passed on that relationship (yes, pun intended).
This was action-packed, and I enjoyed seeing references to Donner Pass, Truckee, and the Sierras, as these are areas I've been researching for Dolly for the last month. I'm not sure what year this takes place in, but if it's before 1846 it was not called Donner Pass.
Good read, Wayne. I feel like Ben is a time traveler of sorts.
Pam
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you. 1880s
I thought of you when I posted this, as I thought of this chapter (already written) when I read your Donner Pass post.
I did what you suggested, but it still appeared gray. As it still does when I open it. Weird.
Thank you for your very kind review.
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That's odd, because I don't see gray.
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maybe it's just me, but scrolling, it's still gray. My computer, maybe.
The same thing has happened before, but only a few times.
Comment from Wendy G
Wow. That is very dramatic and you led into it very well. There's no end to the experiences of all kinds for Ben. Very well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Wow. That is very dramatic and you led into it very well. There's no end to the experiences of all kinds for Ben. Very well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Yeah, if you sign on to following God...
Comment from lyenochka
There are always some mysteries about fanstory editing, I guess. I've often wondered why some text appears in different colors or appears highlighted. Another moving chapter especially with that prayer before death. Hope Ben is up to that long trek!
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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There are always some mysteries about fanstory editing, I guess. I've often wondered why some text appears in different colors or appears highlighted. Another moving chapter especially with that prayer before death. Hope Ben is up to that long trek!
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Ben has proven to be a pretty capable dude. (with God's help he can do a lot.) smiley face here
Thank you for the review.
Comment from Jay Squires
You must have fixed the last line. It isn't gray any more. But if it were peach or puce, no matter. The story was glittering gold. I'm just happy I still have a six to give it. Some mighty fine writing, Wayne!
Jay
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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You must have fixed the last line. It isn't gray any more. But if it were peach or puce, no matter. The story was glittering gold. I'm just happy I still have a six to give it. Some mighty fine writing, Wayne!
Jay
Comment Written 09-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023
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Thank you. I really appreciate it.
Maybe FS got wind. Because after my attempt to fix it, there was no change.
