Comment from Jumbo J

Exceptional

Hi Gypsy Queen,
this beautifully crafted haiku says so much within such a limited use of words... a whole story told with ten words... fifteen syllables.
True mastery of one's craft!

How connected? I just mentioned Venus in my last review... and here she is in her full glory. Love simpatico!

My mind goes into an automatic feeling soaking in these words and meaning. They are stunning in every aspect.

Venus, as you know now, does flirt with me most nights, and me with her... I wait for her to bat her eyelashes and sparkle her glow just to feel a sense of knowing and belonging... much like the limited friendships I create, in my life.

'Kisses rivers full of stars'... what a truly beautiful verse as I relate to the actual sight of all the stars following her into the night. Definitely a match made in heaven!

Stunning presentation, as always!

With our thoughts we create...
an appreciation of correlation.

Warm regards,
James.

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023

Thank you, James. What an awesome review. I appreciate the six shiny stars. You must have fished them out of the river. :)

I was insecure about this one because i had mixed reviews, especially a religious reviewer. I guess because I mentioned heaven and not in connection to God.

I'm glad you like it and know what's about.

Besitos y abrazos

Marival

reply by Jumbo J on 08-Aug-2023

I think we all get a little insecure when it comes to reviews that aren't seeing, or feeling where the composer is coming from. But you know, that is all that counts.
I have even steered away from my more cryptic free verses, because not many people get them... not even Jade, until I explain the whole thing... and as a poet, that's really the last thing you want to be doing. For me every writer, style and format has its own flavour... and it's up to the reader to dive in and connect to how they react, or feel about what they read. It shouldn't be up to the composer of said work.

I really connected to it for a few reasons. Some obvious, and then how I felt on a personal level towards it.
But Like I said... true mastery of one's craft for me all the way!

reply by the author on 09-Aug-2023

Is Jade a poet too?

I don't like hard to understand. That's why I like Japanese... it's written for the masses, educated and uneducated. Some people review them to feel smart. Anyway... as you can tell how see I feel. :)

reply by Jumbo J on 09-Aug-2023

Jade wrote some good poetry when she was younger, that I have read... and even though I have tried to encourage her to resume, I fear it's not her thing.
As you can tell... I am who I am and what I see, smell and feel drives me forward.
Your passion, your truth, your authenticity, your intent, your talent allows you to create the magic you post. All the art you compose is for you first... your reader, admires and fans get to appreciate it second within their own interpretation.
You always do you!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I guess the planet named for the goddess of love, Venus/Aphrodite, could be quite the coquette. That Venus is close to Earth and sends her kisses that affect Earth, they are a match "made in heaven."

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023

I'm not happy with this one. I tried to make it better.

Thank you very much, big sister.

Love xoxo

Marival

Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your zen haiku - excellent picture presentation- connects with the poem- good word count - Venus kisses earths river reflecting stars -making a connection- Venus/ Earth -made in Heaven- Good Job AP

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsu hugs

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was a great zen haiku, Gypsy. I loved your words because they absolutely to the truth. I adored your picture because it showed a young woman caressing a planet. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.

Gypsu hugs

reply by aryr on 07-Aug-2023

Most welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

way cool... like the imagery of a flirty venus kissing rivers streaming...

smooth flow with nice word choices
and cool pics

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsu hugs

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Quite a unique poem. I did like the imagery of the planet Venus as a female figure, bestowing a kiss on the surface of the water. Lovey. Thank you for sharing. Gretchen

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsu hugs

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I must admit this one has me stumped, it's a little vague for me Gypsy, Venus and Earth have little in common, but all the planets have the stars in common, of course the original Goddess would be a little flirtatious with men, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023

This haiku is a zen haiku, zen philosophy is that everything in nature is connected, including human nature. The stars are reflected in the rivers so I wrote it using poetic devices like personification. The juxtaposition between Venus, Earth, rivers, and the sky is that they are all in the universe (heaven).

Thank you very much. I appreciate your kind and helpful review.

Gypsy hugs
"Learn the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist." - Picasso

reply by royowen on 06-Aug-2023

Comment from karenina

Excellent

Oh my. I feel I haven't reviewed your lovely posts in forever. Forgive my lapses. Sometimes they can't be helped. THIS...this is elegant in form and presentation and imagery. (As ever!)

Love the idea of "coquette Venus" --

(They say "Men are from Mars, Women are from Venus!)

I also love that you continually educate us that Haiku does not have to be 5-7-5 (as we were stubbornly taught in school!)--

Nice quote in your author's notes! (I'm used to the Basho quote)

"Learn all the rules like a pro, so you can break them like an artist." - Picasso

Indeed! We must s-t-r-e-t-c-h the boundaries to grow!

Karenina

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023

Hey, Sis, how are you today? I am happy you got the meaning of this poem, like Helen did. Not everybody does. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my haiku.

Love, xoxox

MariVal

reply by karenina on 06-Aug-2023

Hmmm. Well, I'd say great minds think alike...but that would apply to you and Helen and I'd be the outlier! LOL----

reply by the author on 07-Aug-2023

LoL. No you and Helen are the smart ones.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I guess Venus could kiss's Earth's river of stars. Why not in my imagination could really happen and would be great. Your presentation is beautiful and caused me to smile.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023

Thank you very much, Barbara, I appreciate your kind and helpful review.

Gypsy hugs