Passion For Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "The Mountain is She"Book 3 of assorted poems
7 total reviews
Comment from thoughtgame2
very nicely done. I believe this is the first time I have ever read these many lines of your work at one time. wonderfully done if I may add. especially the part about the lifting of the hem??? very well placed. thank you. good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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very nicely done. I believe this is the first time I have ever read these many lines of your work at one time. wonderfully done if I may add. especially the part about the lifting of the hem??? very well placed. thank you. good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, I'm really glad you like this. Yes, I've got a few long ones in there. In fact, I really like your opinion on one in my profile. Its a first. It's called Troy, it's in my profile. I have a peak if you would you Like it's got it's surprises in it too! Thank you again!
Comment from Lisasview
Hi Lea,
Interesting thoughts prevail throughout your poem but because there is absolutely no punctuation the words and lines more or less run into each other.. The poem looks good but could really be so much stronger.
Lisa
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Hi Lea,
Interesting thoughts prevail throughout your poem but because there is absolutely no punctuation the words and lines more or less run into each other.. The poem looks good but could really be so much stronger.
Lisa
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Good morning thank you for your review nice to see you for your thoughts. I have been told many times not to use punctuation or capitalization unless it is for a name or place. so Ive had poems excluded because of that. This poem is also free verse. Because you have mentioned it a couple of times i'm going to send a letter to the committee and ask specifically in case i'm wrong because i'm not always right you obviously but you've mentioned it so i'm gonna find out for sure. Thank you again I always appreciate your reviews and your thoughts Because they are honest and you actually read what I write. That is what I appreciate most about you. So thank you so much!
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Of course all writers have the right to use punctuation or not and I am quite sure that the committee doesn't care one way or another.
I suggest you go into Google and find out for yourself.
Lisa
Comment from Isabel Fontes
As I read this poem, I could sense the crispness of the mountain air and feel the chill of a cold morning. Lea, your description is truly beautiful and has elevated this poem to a sublime level.
The words flow smoothly and transport the reader to a vivid imagination of a painting crafted by a skilled artist.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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As I read this poem, I could sense the crispness of the mountain air and feel the chill of a cold morning. Lea, your description is truly beautiful and has elevated this poem to a sublime level.
The words flow smoothly and transport the reader to a vivid imagination of a painting crafted by a skilled artist.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece and wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 06-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Isabel, for your kind review. I'm truly honored, I'm absolutely humbled by your review and your rating. It's very kind of you, thank you. Made my day I hope you have a great day too thank you!
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Lovely poem, It's as refreshing as a gentle breeze.
Well done, Lea!
You are most welcome, and I wish you good luck.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Such skilful and evocative description here of the mountain and the chill of the air, Lea. You know just how to transport the reader to the place you want them to be. Your skirts and manicure are divine. This is really great and a virtual six from me. Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023
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Such skilful and evocative description here of the mountain and the chill of the air, Lea. You know just how to transport the reader to the place you want them to be. Your skirts and manicure are divine. This is really great and a virtual six from me. Debbie
Comment Written 05-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much debbie I very much appreciate it considering 6 months ago I didn't know I could write anything today...well...its changed a bit, and I have you and others to thank for that. I'm always happy to receive your review And any in all comments you make is welcome by me thank you so much!
Comment from jim vecchio
I envy you, and wish I could paint such a portrait of landscape as you did. Your wonderful descriptions caused us to feel the cold and freeze. The contest is "no rules", but you applied strong discipline in your words.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023
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I envy you, and wish I could paint such a portrait of landscape as you did. Your wonderful descriptions caused us to feel the cold and freeze. The contest is "no rules", but you applied strong discipline in your words.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2023
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Thank you jim I appreciate your kind words and your Review i'm really glad you like this i'm glad that It touches someone. I appreciate your insight as well. So thank you again and I hope you have a great evening!
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And i appreciate your writing!
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Thank you!
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Thank you, also, for posting this!
Comment from Eleri
This represents a great idea for a poem - depicting the mountain as a woman is good but I wish that you had stuck to that throughout and not included some pastoral images too. It is almost as though you could not make up your mind whether to use a natural image, ie with the dandelion seeds etc, or a woman-based image. The latter is better and I think the poem would have been more intriguing if you had stuck to that. Having said that I did enjoy reading the poem so good luck with it in the contest
Eleri
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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This represents a great idea for a poem - depicting the mountain as a woman is good but I wish that you had stuck to that throughout and not included some pastoral images too. It is almost as though you could not make up your mind whether to use a natural image, ie with the dandelion seeds etc, or a woman-based image. The latter is better and I think the poem would have been more intriguing if you had stuck to that. Having said that I did enjoy reading the poem so good luck with it in the contest
Eleri
Comment Written 04-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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Thank you Eleri for your review and feedback. I'm not sure what you mean by a change. It's been "she" throughout. I write alot of abstract poetry IE: dandelion seed representing snow. Thank you so much for your kind comments and review! I hope your day is good!
Comment from JSD
Wonderful extended metaphor for the snowy mountain. Just amazing use of imagery. The manicure for granite toes! The skirts and hem! And then the throne. Maybe 'She' is the queen? (Still think 'chemise' might be cuter, but that is a tiny thing.) This is great.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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Wonderful extended metaphor for the snowy mountain. Just amazing use of imagery. The manicure for granite toes! The skirts and hem! And then the throne. Maybe 'She' is the queen? (Still think 'chemise' might be cuter, but that is a tiny thing.) This is great.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2023
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Thank you again! I am honored!