Comment from Lisasview

Excellent

Hi Lea,
Oh how I just love metaphors... Before reading your explanation I already knew the meaning behind your words.
I also really love the image you chose for your poem.
Good luck in the poem.
Lisa

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Aug-2023

I always knew you would get it. You liked metaphors and so some people didn't. So I had to put the slicing romantic part in there. You guys are going to be romantic when you're busy staring at an eclipse, you know, I'm saying of course you do. Thank you again for your wonderful review. I'm always appreciating you. Never forget that have a great day!

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Excellent Lea. It's a little that poem that rewards repeated readings, and I find it works perfectly up to the last line which I'm a little puzzled by. I get the moon, the eclipse, the magnetism of gravity and all that, and if the moon is sliced it reduces the romantic moment. But why 'freely hypnotised'. Sorry if I'm being stupid. John x

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2023

Yeah if you've planned a romantic night under the moon then an eclipse happens and your immediately distracted. Freely distracted is when an eclipse happens it is fascinating so you freely stop to watch no resistance. Hope that helps a thank you for your review I'm always happy to receive. Enjoy your day!

reply by JSD on 31-Jul-2023

Ah, ok. Thanks. Geddit now. x

reply by the author on 31-Jul-2023

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Comment from Eleri

Excellent

This description of an eclipse is intriguing and beautiful. However, the word 'slices' seems a little odd - it reminds me of bread not the moon and, as far I know, the moon does not have a magnetic field. Hence I do not quite get where the magnetic awe comes from. I am sure that I am missing something obvious as the imagery of this poem is beautiful - maybe I am just being too scientific in my approach.
Good luck with it
Eleri

 Comment Written 31-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Jul-2023

Hi Eleri! Thank you once again! I always appreciate your honesty and reviews! When I use the words "slices" in this case I mean to say that an eclipse event can be more distracting than a romantic evening under the moon. Magnetic I used as a metaphor for distracting person from their normal evening to watch the eclipse. Everyone stops to look so magnetic awe is an expression for that. I tend to write in abstract and metaphor as I like the opposition. I hope this helps and thank you again for your review I'm always happy to receive them. Thx!