Passion For Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Nature's Band"Book 3 of assorted poems
5 total reviews
Comment from BermyBye50
Lea,
This is a beautifully written entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. The imagery from the opening line of the first stanza to the final line of the third stanza perfectly describes the artwork accompanying the write. The simplicity and truth in your words are a gift to each of us to enjoy. Every line is inspired and is a gift to the reader. The rhyming is excellent and flows smoothly from one stanza to the next.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2023
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Lea,
This is a beautifully written entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. The imagery from the opening line of the first stanza to the final line of the third stanza perfectly describes the artwork accompanying the write. The simplicity and truth in your words are a gift to each of us to enjoy. Every line is inspired and is a gift to the reader. The rhyming is excellent and flows smoothly from one stanza to the next.
All the best in the contest,
Eugene
Comment Written 01-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Aug-2023
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Thank you, Eugene, that's always going to happy to receive your review. Especially when you like something as much as this. I very much I'm honored and appreciated. I hope you are doing well and have a great day!
Comment from Isabel Fontes
Very beautiful poem, Lea.
Another beautiful description of how the being fights between lines and advances.
A beautiful description of nature and the maternal ties that bind her to a being who loses everything.
"never practiced ever unbound."
I really enjoyed travelling in your words.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2023
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Very beautiful poem, Lea.
Another beautiful description of how the being fights between lines and advances.
A beautiful description of nature and the maternal ties that bind her to a being who loses everything.
"never practiced ever unbound."
I really enjoyed travelling in your words.
Comment Written 31-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2023
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Thank you so much i'm So very honored by your words once again I really appreciate your kind review!
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You are most welcome, Lea.
I take so much from your writing, I should be the one to thank you!
Have you too a great day!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I want to give you twenty stars for this absolutely melodious creation here. I applaud you for not using cliches like "crashing waves" or "seagulls' cries." Your originality and artistry are on full display here.
I honestly love every word, but I think the standouts were:
ade sea lifts her watery skirt
tosses down a hot rock squirt
AND:
nature's band of beautific sounds
never practiced ever unbound
ebbs and flows through human souls
Your creative choices of verbiage never cease to make me shake my head. They are always so UNIQUE...but not "weird" or "affectations" offered up for the sake of just being 'unusual.' They are so extremely spot-on but --here's that word again!-- ARTISTIC. I absolutely love this!
I just have two little things that gave me pause:
1) I don't think that 'i' belongs in 'waiving branches.'
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2)sea lions clap their robust tune
barks a song a fluidic boon
Both lines are about the sea lionS (plural). So "clap" works because it modifies that plural noun, but "barks" doesn't because it would modify a singular noun.
Everything else? Symphonic perfection! Thank you for this TREMENDOUS reading experience today, you talented, talented writer! xo
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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I want to give you twenty stars for this absolutely melodious creation here. I applaud you for not using cliches like "crashing waves" or "seagulls' cries." Your originality and artistry are on full display here.
I honestly love every word, but I think the standouts were:
ade sea lifts her watery skirt
tosses down a hot rock squirt
AND:
nature's band of beautific sounds
never practiced ever unbound
ebbs and flows through human souls
Your creative choices of verbiage never cease to make me shake my head. They are always so UNIQUE...but not "weird" or "affectations" offered up for the sake of just being 'unusual.' They are so extremely spot-on but --here's that word again!-- ARTISTIC. I absolutely love this!
I just have two little things that gave me pause:
1) I don't think that 'i' belongs in 'waiving branches.'
and
2)sea lions clap their robust tune
barks a song a fluidic boon
Both lines are about the sea lionS (plural). So "clap" works because it modifies that plural noun, but "barks" doesn't because it would modify a singular noun.
Everything else? Symphonic perfection! Thank you for this TREMENDOUS reading experience today, you talented, talented writer! xo
Comment Written 30-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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Thank you again for this honor and for your detailed review I am humbled!
Comment from JSD
Excellent Lea. This is what you can do so well. The manipulation of imagery and language to convey the world of nature and our relationship to it. Wonderful. Well done. And good luck. x
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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Excellent Lea. This is what you can do so well. The manipulation of imagery and language to convey the world of nature and our relationship to it. Wonderful. Well done. And good luck. x
Comment Written 30-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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I'm always glad to hear that you like it. These things are so personal sometimes what we write and put out there. Leaves the feeling of vulnerability depending on what we write about. The freedom to write what we will should never be taken for granted. Poet and writers bloom in this environment. Your review is especially significant for me as you're so very accomplished writer and poet so thank you so much. I appreciate you and your time have a great day!
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Thanks Lea. Do check a recently posted baby photo! Front page. Hint. x
Comment from Lisasview
My dearest Lea,
This is probably the best poem of yours that i have read so far.
However, I would consider using punctuation to help the lines stand out...and not starting every line with a Capital...
Just food for thought.
Lisasview
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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My dearest Lea,
This is probably the best poem of yours that i have read so far.
However, I would consider using punctuation to help the lines stand out...and not starting every line with a Capital...
Just food for thought.
Lisasview
Comment Written 30-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jul-2023
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Thank you again, I appreciate your comments. Very refreshing and very helpful. I did remove the capitalization as that is as it should be. Thank you for noticing that. Punctuation as I understand it is not something we should use although you can if you need to. I opted to use it for the one line in punctuation. Hopefully, I've satisfied the rules for the contest and the general parameters in which we write that you have so kindly reminded me of again. Keep it coming, I appreciate it. You are the best have a great day!