Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hi Jan, this poem is most heartfelt. I can feel your yearning. Of special note:

a need tangled in love poems

(G, we all need to feel close to our loved ones, and poetry is just one way to make that happen.)

" Shades of love hides within the poet's heart ~ LateBloomer" Xo. M

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2023

Thank you very much, Margaret. I appreciate your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

A stunning Tanka both in image and words. You draw your reader in with the presentation and the emotion of loss and death.
Beautifully written.
Best wishes,
Mary

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi MariVal,
I love movement... so the image just sets the words up to something special.
The movement into the strong emotion of 'yearning' for you.
Where the sun meets the sea... hmmmmm, el encuentro del sol con el aguas es una ilusión, una meta que nunca puede ser otra cosa que la necesidad de aguantar donde las llamas ya no existen.
I hope that made sense?

A stunning tanka, impeccable presentation... something written with dead cinders could never read this well... I'm thinking maybe, just maybe there's an ember still smouldering?

With our thoughts we create...
a passion for hope.

Warm regards,
James.

 Comment Written 25-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 25-Jul-2023

Your Spanish is very good. :)

Thank you very much for the intuitive and insightful review.

This one has a lot of nature personification that not everyone gets. I'm glad you do but is not a surprise. You never disappoint.

I hope you and Jade had a fruitful week and a better one ahead.

Abracitos y besitos

Marival

"The course of true love never did run smooth."
-- William Shakespeare

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

really cool pic
the sea seems angry
lol
interesting comparisons
good imagery and smooth flow

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 24-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2023

Thank you very much, Shelley. :)

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Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

These love poems are very moving. I can see you really have someone in mind and the burning desire is very real. The best writing comes from these real and raw feeling of us. I believe.

Well done.

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Sometimes are real but most of my poems are fiction.

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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reply by Jasmine Girl on 24-Jul-2023

You did a great job to make them believable.

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Exceptional

This is an extraordinary tanka poem. Beautiful presentation also and emotional too. I had other writing to do and now I hope to catch up with poetry club (s) events. Thank you for always providing a full and instructive Author Bore too.

Alexan ;))

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Alexan

Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.

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Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your Tanka Poem - VERY СOOL Picture presentation - Poem tell the familiar story of lost love - 'needs tangled in poems' - nice - written with dead embers - no life or desire burning inside - also carbon like in a pencil- clever - Take a look at your syllable count, I get 4/7/3/7/6 ? may be wrong - also " yearning.. waits ?" maybe something like ' waiting where the sun meets sea' ? (7) Good Job AP

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2023

I like it the way it is. My yearning waiting.... is a poetic device called personification. Thank you.

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lots of imagery and theme echoing death in this tanka. The sun meets the sea at night which is the "death" of day and the "dead cinders" of the lost love relationship becomes the fuel for the love poems. Well expressed in this well presented poem!

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Thank you very much, big sister. You always get my poems meaning.

Love xoxo

Marival

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This had stunning imagery. The cinders made me think of the sun, a fire ball, put out as its doused in the water. As a child we used to listen to hear the sun going down over the river. We would listen for the hissing of it. Lol. Great poem. Gretchen

 Comment Written 23-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jul-2023

Haha. I can visualize little Gretchen listening to the sun... so adorable.

Thank you, my friend. I appreciate your kind words and review.

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