Sane Civilization & World
Hopefully, a sane world2 total reviews
Comment from Eleri
This paints a wonderful picture of what the world should be like but unfortunately isn't. The rhyming works but I don't quite get what you mean be sappy as I though that it meant over sentimental. Also, I would have said 'You get a decent life again' rather than 'to gain' but that is just personal preference.
Good luck with it
Eleri
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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This paints a wonderful picture of what the world should be like but unfortunately isn't. The rhyming works but I don't quite get what you mean be sappy as I though that it meant over sentimental. Also, I would have said 'You get a decent life again' rather than 'to gain' but that is just personal preference.
Good luck with it
Eleri
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Thank you!
Comment from Teri7
This is a very well written rhyming poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good and true words. I love the art work you chose and the color. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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This is a very well written rhyming poem you have penned for the writing prompt. You used very good and true words. I love the art work you chose and the color. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2023
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Thank you!