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Comment from Ricky1024
This lune was about the eating by the birds and sunflower seeds.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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This lune was about the eating by the birds and sunflower seeds.
Well written rich in Theme and Imagery.
It also, read well and Flowed well with no Grammar Issues.
Thanks for sharing this and good luck with your contest entry.
Doctor Ricky
Comment Written 21-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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Thank you for your encouragement. It was fun to try.
Comment from Paul Manton
A coal tit, if I am not mistaken! But to see that bird so tame is extraordinary - so this is a rare and wonderful photograph.
I am beginning to warm to 'Lunes', though I had never seen them before I joined FS. Your 5-3-5 count is exactly right, and you have incorporated both full and half rhyme.
Also a superb line of alliteration in 'Striped sunflower seeds', which is a great opener.
So, the picture, the poem and the sentiment (we love to feed the birds) make for an excellent poem. Thank you, Michelle.
Paul
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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A coal tit, if I am not mistaken! But to see that bird so tame is extraordinary - so this is a rare and wonderful photograph.
I am beginning to warm to 'Lunes', though I had never seen them before I joined FS. Your 5-3-5 count is exactly right, and you have incorporated both full and half rhyme.
Also a superb line of alliteration in 'Striped sunflower seeds', which is a great opener.
So, the picture, the poem and the sentiment (we love to feed the birds) make for an excellent poem. Thank you, Michelle.
Paul
Comment Written 21-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2023
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Thank you. This was my first attempt but it was fun. Thank you again.
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You're welcome, Michelle.