A Boy's Dilemma
Hoping you will understand ...15 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Okay this was witty and excitingly interesting. I really had no idea where you were goi g with this until the ending.
Here is another fifteenth review for you my friend!
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reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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Okay this was witty and excitingly interesting. I really had no idea where you were goi g with this until the ending.
Here is another fifteenth review for you my friend!
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Comment Written 09-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 09-Dec-2023
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My, that was released some time ago
How did you come to resurface it
Anyhow, thank you
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is a sweet narrative poem. I liked reading it very much, due to the great end rhymes and the natural flow of language in general.
Little fix:
Then it dawned on him, "let's try one on."
I would say:
Then it dawned on him: "Let's try one on."
Or possibly italicize Let's try one one. without any quotation marks.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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This is a sweet narrative poem. I liked reading it very much, due to the great end rhymes and the natural flow of language in general.
Little fix:
Then it dawned on him, "let's try one on."
I would say:
Then it dawned on him: "Let's try one on."
Or possibly italicize Let's try one one. without any quotation marks.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Good suggestion. I will make the fix. Thanks. I am glad you enjoyed it. 🌹
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A fun and delightful read. It is truly a wonderful story. This is a testament to your creativity and imagination to take a simple yet complicated task for a young boy and write a great story.
Sounds familiar. I seemed to remember frequently walk around with my shoes on the wrong feet.
best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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A fun and delightful read. It is truly a wonderful story. This is a testament to your creativity and imagination to take a simple yet complicated task for a young boy and write a great story.
Sounds familiar. I seemed to remember frequently walk around with my shoes on the wrong feet.
best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 19-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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As to your closing remark, haven ? t we all. The next question is when we will again? Appreciatively yours.
Comment from w.j.debi
What a thoughtful boy. He didn't want to wake his mommy, but he was facing such a dilemma while trying to dress himself. Mom does come to the rescue. Next time, he will be able to do it himself.
Great storytelling. Excellent picture to go with the story.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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What a thoughtful boy. He didn't want to wake his mommy, but he was facing such a dilemma while trying to dress himself. Mom does come to the rescue. Next time, he will be able to do it himself.
Great storytelling. Excellent picture to go with the story.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from kahpot
Very well written with your natural sense of humor, a story that will bring back memories for many, I remember standing in front of the mirror, trying to comb my hair to the left, ****kahpot
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Very well written with your natural sense of humor, a story that will bring back memories for many, I remember standing in front of the mirror, trying to comb my hair to the left, ****kahpot
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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That image of combing is another funny story. It never happened if I get your drift seeing how images are reversed in a reflection.
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You might be right
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well, if I am, right, it would be coincidental as it has been a long, long, very long time since the last time i was ... right.
Comment from damommy
Mother saved the day. What a clever idea to right the letters on his hands. I first thought they should have been on his feet, but the socks would have covered them. Very cute story.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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Mother saved the day. What a clever idea to right the letters on his hands. I first thought they should have been on his feet, but the socks would have covered them. Very cute story.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2023
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That part of imprinting the hand was true for me.
Comment from royowen
What an absolutely wonderful story, I was that little boy wondering what was L and what R, and I've relived that through my grandsons and granddaughter, (who can read time digitally) but not with a clock with fingers, that was my big breakthrough as a boy, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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What an absolutely wonderful story, I was that little boy wondering what was L and what R, and I've relived that through my grandsons and granddaughter, (who can read time digitally) but not with a clock with fingers, that was my big breakthrough as a boy, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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:-) Thanks, ROy.
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My pleasure
Comment from GWHARGIS
This was very fun to read. Love that the mom came to the rescue with out being woken. This was a rhythmic poem that let's everyone know that sometimes it's okay to ask for help. Very cute. Gretchen
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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This was very fun to read. Love that the mom came to the rescue with out being woken. This was a rhythmic poem that let's everyone know that sometimes it's okay to ask for help. Very cute. Gretchen
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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:-) Thank you
Comment from Wendy G
A fun poem and children do go through that stage where they want to do everything by themselves. Those are doubtless the thoughts children experience in this perplexing situation. Well told story in a poem.
Wendy
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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A fun poem and children do go through that stage where they want to do everything by themselves. Those are doubtless the thoughts children experience in this perplexing situation. Well told story in a poem.
Wendy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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:-) Thank You.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, you made me smile with this poem Tom and this was indeed a dilemma, but I doubt kids are bothered about the shoes being on the wrong feet until they try and run! Ha ha ha, an endearing post, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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Ha ha ha, you made me smile with this poem Tom and this was indeed a dilemma, but I doubt kids are bothered about the shoes being on the wrong feet until they try and run! Ha ha ha, an endearing post, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 18-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023
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A smile a day keeps the doctor away, or is that an apple?