Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your modern haiku poem- nice picture presentation- good syllable count and flow- story appears to be of sadness over a lost love - brought to mind the question- how many men stand on the beach and cry about lost love - poor women Arn't the only ones - probably to out of character for a poem- good job - AP

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2023

Thank you very much, my friend. You are right, men hurt too but I am writing from a woman point of view.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

Heart break is the same no matter where you are, what stage on life you are or how much money you make. You grieve the loss and move through it in staged. This was a beautiful backdrop for such grief. Gretchen

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your kind review. I appreciate that you take the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you like it. May you have an awesome day.

Gypsy

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I am hoping this man died. If he left her, he doesn't deserve her tears. He's a jerk. I enjoyed reading this emotional poem. Once again you continue to reign as the Queen of Haiku.

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your kind review. I appreciate that you take the time to read and review my poem. I am glad you like it. May you have an awesome day.

Gypsy

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

hmm... maybe do a four-liner?
since he left --
she cries every night
neath the moon
watching the waves go

eh just a thought was thinking the "neath the moon" could be "neath the line where she cries"...

still a great haiku - so sad she can't see the caves coming in...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you very much, Shelley. Good fix suggestion. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

gypsy hugs

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

Gypsy,
An excellent Haiku. I've felt this way about lost love a few times in life--from teen crushes to adult break-ups.
I've learned, things get better, though.
Great ambiance photo.
Good luck with all your writing, Gypsy.'blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

gypsy hugs

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

We do tend to take notice of things going when we are grieving the departure of a lost loved one, an excellent haiku, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

gypsy hugs

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

This is a sad one. How about the waves coming and going? I guess the leaving of the waves stayed in her mind and constantly reminding her of her lover.

Well done.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

gypsy hugs

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I guess "watching the waves go" reminds her of how he had left. But the waves return and I hope that doesn't give her hope for his return as she can't trust such an uncommitted lover.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you very much, big sister. She only notices the tide going because he goes away too. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

love,
marival

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

If the waves truly just went, the ocean would be dry with no water. The waves leave and tide comes back in, just like with life.

I enjoyed your beautiful poem and complete presentation. Better days are ahead. Sometimes God washes someone away and sends a new tide of blessings to replace what wasn't good, love, Alexan

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you very much, Alexan. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

gypsy hugs

reply by the author on 17-Jul-2023

Thank you, Alexan, you are very kind,

love,
marival

reply by Alexandra Trovato on 17-Jul-2023

Well-deserved!

Love,
Alexan

reply by Alexandra Trovato on 17-Jul-2023

You're welcome, Gypsy!

love

Alexan :))

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is a beautiful haiku satori and I enjoyed listening to it very much. I wish you the very best for the upcoming week. Continue to write continue share with us. Patricia.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs