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2023 Gypsy's Haiku

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Comment from GWHARGIS
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I could feel the ambiance of the campfire. The cover of darkness that flickers across the bodies, locked in an embrace. Very suggestive and real. Great poem. Thank you for posting. Gretchen

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2023

reply by the author on 16-Jul-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
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What a fantastic haiku, Gypsy. Your words held the majik of the moment, they portrayed the happiness and joy. The pictures were of a masterpiece. Blessed be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind. Blessed be.

    Gypsy hug
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Great metaphor with a campfire and passion. Once again, you've proven why you're the Queen of Haiku. Not only do your poems always impress me, but the complete package.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind.

    Gypsy hug
Comment from shelley kaye
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too bad you couldn't get the fire pic down to the very bottom of the poem box...

anyway, a great burning sunset haiku with great imagery and smooth flow of words

thank you for sharing
shelley :)



 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind.

    Gypsy hug
Comment from AP Apgar
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I like your haiku poem - good picture presentation of the campfire- good syllable count and flow- A nice fire at sunset -looks like a romantic night ahead -good Job AP

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind.

    Gypsy hug
Comment from kiwisteveh
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Ooh-Ah! Hope they brought a blanket. In my humble opinion, the beach and the woods are the most uncomfortable places for making love.

Thought this might be yours from the sub-title - you are the only member here brave enough to post haiku that are not strictly 5-7-5! This is a nice one, helped by the brilliant pic and the slightly suggestive double meaning in the final line.

Steve

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2023

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Thank you, Steve. It has taken me a while and two clubs to make the FS members accept the syllable count and the myth of 5-7-5. I always add the rules of haiku in my author notes.

    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind.

    Gypsy hug
Comment from lyenochka
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Good use of the metaphor of the physical fire for the fire of passion, and also the "sunset aflame" for the passion awakened by touching skin to skin. Great use of alliteration, too.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2023

reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
    Yes, that's what it is about. Thank you very much big sister for your excellent review and kind words.

    Love you

    Marival