2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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12 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
What a wonderful Haiku! I love the image and the thought of a paper boat carrying the adventures of a kid's imagination to the sea.
Beautiful words wrapped up in a beautiful presentation.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
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What a wonderful Haiku! I love the image and the thought of a paper boat carrying the adventures of a kid's imagination to the sea.
Beautiful words wrapped up in a beautiful presentation.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 15-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind.
Gypsy hug
Comment from kahpot
Very well said, yes, a child's imagination can take them any and everywhere, just like the boat they can just drift, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
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Very well said, yes, a child's imagination can take them any and everywhere, just like the boat they can just drift, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind.
Gypsy hug
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Gypsy,
I like the theme of your poem: like a mother bird who encourages her young to fly, etc.
I feel like the creek is an incubator(we have lots of creeks in our county that eventually empty into the Mississippi). I like that your poems relate to the readers in symbolic fashion.
I hope this finds you well!
Keep writing.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Gypsy,
I like the theme of your poem: like a mother bird who encourages her young to fly, etc.
I feel like the creek is an incubator(we have lots of creeks in our county that eventually empty into the Mississippi). I like that your poems relate to the readers in symbolic fashion.
I hope this finds you well!
Keep writing.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words..
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Teri7
This is a really good 4-6-6 haiku you have penned about the paper boat. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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This is a really good 4-6-6 haiku you have penned about the paper boat. You used very good descriptive words and very nice imagery from the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Excellent entry for the Etheree Poem writing prompt contest.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
I enjoyed this Satori haiku and I see it is perfect for this fo, from your informative Author Notes. I particularly enjoyed the photo presentation because it brings up imagery of a happy childhood, and it acknowledges all of the imaginative play that the paper boat now carries as it floats. Love Alexan x :))
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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I enjoyed this Satori haiku and I see it is perfect for this fo, from your informative Author Notes. I particularly enjoyed the photo presentation because it brings up imagery of a happy childhood, and it acknowledges all of the imaginative play that the paper boat now carries as it floats. Love Alexan x :))
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Excellent entry for the Etheree Poem writing prompt contest.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment from barbara.wilkey
That paper boat if filled not only with kids adventures but also kids dreams. Thank you for sharing this complete package with us. Once again, you've done a great job.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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That paper boat if filled not only with kids adventures but also kids dreams. Thank you for sharing this complete package with us. Once again, you've done a great job.
Comment Written 14-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
This could have been the reader grabbing preface to a children's adventure book. I liked the progression from the creek to the sea. Starting off slow and then as the bodies of water grow it speeds up. Much like life. Great job on this. Gretchen
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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This could have been the reader grabbing preface to a children's adventure book. I liked the progression from the creek to the sea. Starting off slow and then as the bodies of water grow it speeds up. Much like life. Great job on this. Gretchen
Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
I like that quote! I think that's why we do what we do for our kids to improve our own childhood! Yes, that little paper boat will carry those childhood dreams of adventure to sea.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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I like that quote! I think that's why we do what we do for our kids to improve our own childhood! Yes, that little paper boat will carry those childhood dreams of adventure to sea.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much big sister.
Love
Marival
Comment from aryr
What a great haiku, Gypsy. I found the dual pictures enlightening, the first with the sail boat and the crescent moon and then the sail boat with the make believe anchor and the attached balloon. Your words were fulfilling. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2023
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What a great haiku, Gypsy. I found the dual pictures enlightening, the first with the sail boat and the crescent moon and then the sail boat with the make believe anchor and the attached balloon. Your words were fulfilling. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind feedback. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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You are so very welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from patcelaw
Enjoy this haiku very much and you have presented it beautifully. I'm kind of short on words, so I'm just gonna say I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I am in the hospital getting cared for because of two broken bones in my body, so I do well to review anything. Patricia.
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2023
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Enjoy this haiku very much and you have presented it beautifully. I'm kind of short on words, so I'm just gonna say I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I am in the hospital getting cared for because of two broken bones in my body, so I do well to review anything. Patricia.
Comment Written 13-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jul-2023
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oh no, I hope you heal quickly. Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind feedback.
Gypsy hugs