Beneath the Budding Cherry Tree
A trijan refrain for the Potlatch Club10 total reviews
Comment from kahpot
Wow! what a beautiful poem and read, a lifetime of love penned from the heart, loved the rhyme and flow and story within, very well written and presented****kahpot
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Wow! what a beautiful poem and read, a lifetime of love penned from the heart, loved the rhyme and flow and story within, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
Comment from Pearl Edwards
You've told this story of true love winning out in cherry blossom time beautifully, June. Your refrain phrases work well in this lovely presentation. Cheers
Valda
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You've told this story of true love winning out in cherry blossom time beautifully, June. Your refrain phrases work well in this lovely presentation. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
Comment from BethShelby
This is a neat poem. I like the format and rhythm. It seems to be about a prearranged marriage and the dilemma is whether to marry for love or to be to be scorned for breaking with tradition. Love wins out.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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This is a neat poem. I like the format and rhythm. It seems to be about a prearranged marriage and the dilemma is whether to marry for love or to be to be scorned for breaking with tradition. Love wins out.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Yes, it is a story about choosing love from the heart. I?m glad you enjoyed this unusual format. It was a challenge to write, but I learned a lot. Thank you for sharing your feedback!
Comment from Sugarray77
Well done, June!!! Your theme, delivery and wonderful writing really carried this piece in a lovely way. The story is relatable and gives the reader a happy ending, which we all like. A great interpretation of this form.
Melissa
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Well done, June!!! Your theme, delivery and wonderful writing really carried this piece in a lovely way. The story is relatable and gives the reader a happy ending, which we all like. A great interpretation of this form.
Melissa
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Yes, it is a story about choosing love from the heart. I?m glad you enjoyed this unusual format. It was a challenge to write, but I learned a lot. Thank you for sharing your feedback!
Comment from JSD
An intriguing and beautifully written poem, satisfying the criteria perfectly. The rather mournful repetition adds an evocative tone and this is really successful. Just checking, you did mean 'mourning' for the dove, not 'morning'?
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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An intriguing and beautifully written poem, satisfying the criteria perfectly. The rather mournful repetition adds an evocative tone and this is really successful. Just checking, you did mean 'mourning' for the dove, not 'morning'?
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Yes, it is a story about choosing love from the heart. I?m glad you enjoyed this unusual format. It was a challenge to write, but I learned a lot. Thank you for sharing your feedback!
Comment from lyenochka
I like how you told am entire story in your Trijan Refrain poem. It's good that the narrator could choose her true love instead of the one betrothed to her at birth.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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I like how you told am entire story in your Trijan Refrain poem. It's good that the narrator could choose her true love instead of the one betrothed to her at birth.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Yes, it is a story about choosing love from the heart. I?m glad you enjoyed this unusual format. It was a challenge to write, but I learned a lot. Thank you for sharing your feedback!
Comment from damommy
I pictured a handsome troubadour and a lovely maiden in this pretty poem, like an old world painting. This was very enjoyable to read, and you did a great job.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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I pictured a handsome troubadour and a lovely maiden in this pretty poem, like an old world painting. This was very enjoyable to read, and you did a great job.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Yes, it is a story about choosing love from the heart. I?m glad you enjoyed this unusual format. It was a challenge to write, but I learned a lot. Thank you for sharing your feedback!
Comment from tfawcus
I love the rhythm of this. You've really put the form to good use. The repetition in these lines is particularly effective because of its onomatopeic quality:
is cooing 'neath a cloudless sky.
Sweet mourning dove,
sweet mourning dove,
his precious love I can't deny.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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I love the rhythm of this. You've really put the form to good use. The repetition in these lines is particularly effective because of its onomatopeic quality:
is cooing 'neath a cloudless sky.
Sweet mourning dove,
sweet mourning dove,
his precious love I can't deny.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Yes, it is a story about choosing love from the heart. I?m glad you enjoyed this unusual format. It was a challenge to write, but I learned a lot. Thank you for sharing your feedback!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sweet romantic and charming post June and I loved the sentiments here and those repeated lines bring this lovers tale alive, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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This is a sweet romantic and charming post June and I loved the sentiments here and those repeated lines bring this lovers tale alive, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Yes, it is a story about choosing love from the heart. I?m glad you enjoyed this unusual format. It was a challenge to write, but I learned a lot. Thank you for sharing your feedback!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nice poem, written for the club event it flows well when it is read aloud, and you have presented it beautifully. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I am in rehab because I broke two bones. I broke a bone in my hip and also broke my pelvic bone. I will be in rehab for several days. I may do an occasional review, but as far as posting anything I probably won't go until I am well and out of the hospital. Have a good day and God bless. Patricia.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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This is a very nice poem, written for the club event it flows well when it is read aloud, and you have presented it beautifully. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I am in rehab because I broke two bones. I broke a bone in my hip and also broke my pelvic bone. I will be in rehab for several days. I may do an occasional review, but as far as posting anything I probably won't go until I am well and out of the hospital. Have a good day and God bless. Patricia.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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I am so sorry to hear of your accident. I wish you a speedy and full recovery! Yes, this was a story about choosing love from the heart. I?m glad you enjoyed this unusual format. It was a challenge to write, but I learned a lot. Thank you for sharing your feedback!