2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Gypsy,
Nice way to portray falling blossoms, using action.
Your 5-7-5 poem elicits beautiful images of a natural wonder. Great presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Gypsy,
Nice way to portray falling blossoms, using action.
Your 5-7-5 poem elicits beautiful images of a natural wonder. Great presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Cindy, I appreciate your kind review and good luck wishes. Have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
What an excellent 5-7-5 poem, I get the image of winds blowing and scattering the blossoms into the river, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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What an excellent 5-7-5 poem, I get the image of winds blowing and scattering the blossoms into the river, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This poem is beautifully written. I like the idea of being torn from outstretched limb, much like when we fall in love, torn from the security of ourselves. We may then fall into a dangerous rapid river, or a relationship. Hmm, maybe reading too much into it. Again, your talent shines brightly.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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This poem is beautifully written. I like the idea of being torn from outstretched limb, much like when we fall in love, torn from the security of ourselves. We may then fall into a dangerous rapid river, or a relationship. Hmm, maybe reading too much into it. Again, your talent shines brightly.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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No, you are not reading too much into it. You understand the meaning.
Thank you very much for the exceptional five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mark D. R.
Very nice presentation for this contest entry Gypsy! The selected artwork is exceptional. Color scheme works in sync with your verse. I wish the syllable requirement was 5-5-7, then for me, lines two and three would be switched. LOL
Mark
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Very nice presentation for this contest entry Gypsy! The selected artwork is exceptional. Color scheme works in sync with your verse. I wish the syllable requirement was 5-5-7, then for me, lines two and three would be switched. LOL
Mark
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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LoL
Thank you very much for the exceptional five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
love that second picture with the petals falling
matches the poems perfectly!
like the dark to light colours - goes well with the well-chosen words
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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love that second picture with the petals falling
matches the poems perfectly!
like the dark to light colours - goes well with the well-chosen words
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for the exceptional five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. The dual pictures of the fallen branch says so much. Your words show that they speak the truth. Fallen branches say so much. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Gypsy. The dual pictures of the fallen branch says so much. Your words show that they speak the truth. Fallen branches say so much. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for the exceptional five stars review. May you have a wonderful day. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
this 5-7-5 had me staring, thinking, imagining the different metaphor usage... and of course the actual words.
The wind gusting through taking with it the plum blossoms. I love the thought of the movement you evoked. Hmmmm, not only falling, but into a fast flowing river... the blossoms yet on another journey and destination.
Guess that equates perfectly with life and how at any time anyone of us could be just as the plum blossom... being torn from our daily routine, our home, the people we love, the life we know. One gust of sudden change in climate. One variation and we may be on a different path. Something that may alter our own perception on the destination we may have thought we were headed toward. The cycle of impermanence that rules all nature and everything within it.
Yes, this 5-7-5 poem gave me a lot to ponder on.
How does something so limited in words evoke so much thought?
A wordsmith and her craft methinks!
Your presentation, the composition, presentation, your accompanying images and colour scheme... stunningly-beautiful!
All the very best in this contest MariVal.
With our thoughts we create...
constant change.
Warm regards,
James.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Hi MariVal,
this 5-7-5 had me staring, thinking, imagining the different metaphor usage... and of course the actual words.
The wind gusting through taking with it the plum blossoms. I love the thought of the movement you evoked. Hmmmm, not only falling, but into a fast flowing river... the blossoms yet on another journey and destination.
Guess that equates perfectly with life and how at any time anyone of us could be just as the plum blossom... being torn from our daily routine, our home, the people we love, the life we know. One gust of sudden change in climate. One variation and we may be on a different path. Something that may alter our own perception on the destination we may have thought we were headed toward. The cycle of impermanence that rules all nature and everything within it.
Yes, this 5-7-5 poem gave me a lot to ponder on.
How does something so limited in words evoke so much thought?
A wordsmith and her craft methinks!
Your presentation, the composition, presentation, your accompanying images and colour scheme... stunningly-beautiful!
All the very best in this contest MariVal.
With our thoughts we create...
constant change.
Warm regards,
James.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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"The cycle of impermanence that rules all nature and everything within it." so well said. Yes, this is what my poem is about.
James, you give the best reviews. They are so detailed and insightful. I really appreciate that you take the time so generously.
Thank you very much for the exceptional six stars review. May you have a wonderful day, my friend.
Besitos y abrazos,
MariVal
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For you, I am grateful.
You compose the most exquisite haikus, tankas 5-7-5's... I could keep the list going... each one has the component to reach in and create an inner dialogue with the reader... that's if the reader is someone who likes the 'deep dive', which I do. It's why I'm here on this site... to enrich my senses and be with 'my tribe'.
As I said... truly grateful! vx's.
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Thank you, James. I'm happy to be part of your tribe. :)
Have a wonderful day.
Besitos y abrazos
Marival
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation, Gypsy.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective nature imagery describing
the limbs, river, and blossoms.
-You create a vivid word picture of the scene
as the blossoms "dive into rapid river."
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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-Very nice artwork and presentation, Gypsy.
-A well written poem with a good topic.
-Effective nature imagery describing
the limbs, river, and blossoms.
-You create a vivid word picture of the scene
as the blossoms "dive into rapid river."
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for the exceptional five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
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You are very welcome, Gypsy, and have a good rest of your day!
Comment from JSD
Love the 5-7-5 beauty you have conveyed here. The first line is immaculate. I possibly would have a softer verb as I think 'dive' is not quite right for blossom, but I wish you all the best in the competition.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Love the 5-7-5 beauty you have conveyed here. The first line is immaculate. I possibly would have a softer verb as I think 'dive' is not quite right for blossom, but I wish you all the best in the competition.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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The Dive is part of the personification I gave the plum blossoms. Thank you very much for the exceptional five stars review. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from tfawcus
Both beautiful and tragic. How like the outcome of passion. There's a subtle double meaning here that I very much enjoyed. You really are a mistress of this form!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Both beautiful and tragic. How like the outcome of passion. There's a subtle double meaning here that I very much enjoyed. You really are a mistress of this form!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for the exceptional six stars review and kind words. May you have a wonderful day.
Gypsy hugs