2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "I'll Miss You The Most"-
10 total reviews
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This is stunning both in words and presentation.
It is towards twilight when our busy day has ended and as we begin to rest, our thoughts turn to what and who we miss.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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This is stunning both in words and presentation.
It is towards twilight when our busy day has ended and as we begin to rest, our thoughts turn to what and who we miss.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Fei Ma
I think it is very proper to write this poem for the scene of the picture. When dusk comes, and if I am away from home, I would miss home and want go home shortly. A very nice poem for the picture.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I think it is very proper to write this poem for the scene of the picture. When dusk comes, and if I am away from home, I would miss home and want go home shortly. A very nice poem for the picture.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your exceptional six stars review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from aryr
This was a fantastic tanka, Gypsy. I really liked the picture of the long grass with dew on it. Your words definitely held majik in them. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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This was a fantastic tanka, Gypsy. I really liked the picture of the long grass with dew on it. Your words definitely held majik in them. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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You are most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from lyenochka
That time when days disappear, we feel the passage of time even more and we feel the loss of time and the dreams and relationships that didn't work out come to mind. Well said and illustrated!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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That time when days disappear, we feel the passage of time even more and we feel the loss of time and the dreams and relationships that didn't work out come to mind. Well said and illustrated!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister. You always get my poems. I wish I was as good at it as you.
Love.
Marival
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I think we're on the same page most of the time. But you're more romantic than I am. I don't get those poems. 😊💖
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
Extraordinary writing!
Very beautiful meaningful words too! I love it and I especially love to read your poems because your Authors notes are like a very good lesson a out whichever form of poem you are presenting. We're fortunate to have you here on FS because you teach us and also model the forms for us through your own work. :)) Alexan hugs
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Extraordinary writing!
Very beautiful meaningful words too! I love it and I especially love to read your poems because your Authors notes are like a very good lesson a out whichever form of poem you are presenting. We're fortunate to have you here on FS because you teach us and also model the forms for us through your own work. :)) Alexan hugs
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thank you, Alexan, I appreciate your review and kind words. Have a great weekend.
Gypsy hugs
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Thank you, Gypsy! Have a good weekend, too! Hugs, Alexan :)
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your tanka poem - nice picture presentation- excellent flow - reeds, gently and balancing between give it a nice rhyming quality - well done- balancing between day and night - nice- Good Job- AP
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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I like your tanka poem - nice picture presentation- excellent flow - reeds, gently and balancing between give it a nice rhyming quality - well done- balancing between day and night - nice- Good Job- AP
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
reading this it sounds as though it may refer to a loss of another person... the losses we reflect upon in the quiet times.
Me: I read this a few times... and each time read, it magnified my perception... my interpretation... and I guess it's the grass that triggered the thought of...
I'll miss you the most
When dusk descends upon the reeds--
It made me feel a loss, a reflection on losing the younger self... more so having it stolen away. In the quiet times only thoughts reach in a tug away at the years that can't be replaced.
Yes, maybe I read to much into single words that trigger emotions that trigger my own thoughts of loss to come to these conclusions... but hey(((((((((... isn't that's what poetry should do? Reach in and drag out the emotions of the reader in whichever way they interpret the words?
No matter, the actual Tanka poem is..., that it allows the reader to ponder, to engage in a deeper level of thought, not just a read and then move on.
So for you to have created something so tangible in such a short format shows just how skilled you are at not only the connecting to your audience, your construction, your presentation... and the way in which it is composed to evoke.
Stunning!
With our thoughts we create...
internal dialogue.
Warm regards,
James.
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Hi MariVal,
reading this it sounds as though it may refer to a loss of another person... the losses we reflect upon in the quiet times.
Me: I read this a few times... and each time read, it magnified my perception... my interpretation... and I guess it's the grass that triggered the thought of...
I'll miss you the most
When dusk descends upon the reeds--
It made me feel a loss, a reflection on losing the younger self... more so having it stolen away. In the quiet times only thoughts reach in a tug away at the years that can't be replaced.
Yes, maybe I read to much into single words that trigger emotions that trigger my own thoughts of loss to come to these conclusions... but hey(((((((((... isn't that's what poetry should do? Reach in and drag out the emotions of the reader in whichever way they interpret the words?
No matter, the actual Tanka poem is..., that it allows the reader to ponder, to engage in a deeper level of thought, not just a read and then move on.
So for you to have created something so tangible in such a short format shows just how skilled you are at not only the connecting to your audience, your construction, your presentation... and the way in which it is composed to evoke.
Stunning!
With our thoughts we create...
internal dialogue.
Warm regards,
James.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Hello, James,
Thank you very much for the perceptive review. I am doing a lot of soul searching and inner child work these days so I think it pours over my writing. I didn't give it a lot of thought... most of the time I write intuitively. Other times, I intend to write about emotions that come up. So many emotions ... so much to write... for me it's a great way to process. Thank you for taking the time to read and review my work with so much detail and insightful feedback.
besitos y abrazos :)
MariVal
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I know exactly where your head and heart is at... writing is a great pressure valve... and sometimes it makes it too real... so it's a real balancing act at times... especially the prose. But I am truly glad you are finally working on repairing your relationship with your inner child... it hurts my heart to think of what she went through.
Jumbo hugs!
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Huge hugs. My friend. :)
Comment from GWHARGIS
It's funny haw beautiful scenery and unhurriedness lends itself to thinking about lost friends and lost loves. The mood of this makes me think of dusk when the day let's go and time seems to slow down. Gretchen
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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It's funny haw beautiful scenery and unhurriedness lends itself to thinking about lost friends and lost loves. The mood of this makes me think of dusk when the day let's go and time seems to slow down. Gretchen
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A romantic and ambient write as the changes in twilight gives a moment to reflect and think of those who are missing from our lives, I know those feelings, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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A romantic and ambient write as the changes in twilight gives a moment to reflect and think of those who are missing from our lives, I know those feelings, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
i like that misty picture - grows perfectly with the poem and its twilight mist
love that second line dusk descending on the reeds...
nice work!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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i like that misty picture - grows perfectly with the poem and its twilight mist
love that second line dusk descending on the reeds...
nice work!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.
Gypsy hugs