Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

This is stunning in both words and presentation. Beautiful tanka poem. The beauty of the bird enhances the beauty of your words.
I enjoyed reading.
Best wishes,
Mary

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for the exceptional five stars review and kind words.

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Comment from Jumbo J

Excellent

Hi MariVal,
a beautifully painted visual image. I'd say, 'one of my favorite birds'... but on reflection, I love them all... but there is a sweet calm-elegant shyness the Egret possesses and presents that warms my soul.

Yes, yet another stunning Tanka poem evoking so much more than words or feeling... this one brings forth a visual delight along with the sound of sunset lullabies.

With our thoughts we create...
a connection to nature.

Warm regards,
James.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023

Hello, James! I'm so happy to hear from you. I hope you are having a wonderful weekend.

Thank you for taking time to read and review my poem, you are very kind.

besitos y abrazos,

MariVal

Comment from aryr

Excellent

What a wonderful tanka, Gypsy. The picture of the egrets played a wonderful song, as the sun set they make music to my ears. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.

Gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 08-Jul-2023

Most welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your tanka poem- beautiful picture presentation- poem flows well- gives a nice picture of twilight across the moor-
Have suggestions- grammar- bare witness (of). -bare witness "to".
5/7/5/7/5? Good Job - bless AP

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and grammar edits!

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Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

i like the idea of their songs in each ray of sunset - brings a nice calming picture to mind...

a great tanka!
good visuals and smooth flow

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.

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Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

I love it! It's beautiful! The words and presentation go well together. I have one grammar suggestion. Bare 'witness of' (consider 'bare witness to' There are witnesses to crimes due instance. If I don't know what I'm saying because I'm not understanding the poetic part, I'll understand but I hope I helped. Love, Alexan

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback. I appreciate the grammar editing. :)

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Comment from JSD

Excellent

Another carefully crafted little gem. Like a diamond polished to sparkle. The mix of senses with the sound in the ray is wonderful. Now, you may have meant 'bare' as in naked, in which case I apologise, but I wonder if you actually wanted 'bear'. We bear witness because we carry it. John x

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023

Thank you very much for the exceptional five stars review and kind words. I corrected that word. Thank you for letting me know. I always appreciate help with grammar.

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

A lovely nature tanka! I really like the ending lines:
"and within each sunset ray
the birds' prayerful songs"
It combines the end of the day with the prayers of the egrets.

The first line "egrets bare witness" makes me think that "bear" would be more natural as we say "bear witness." Was there a pun intended?

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023

Thank you, big sister. I corrected that 'bear' word. I appreciate your kind review.

love,
marival