Taste of My Reality
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing.
It's 3:57 and a ,New Day?" (now sure why the commas there)
It's a n"New Day?" (an 'New Day!')
and it only seems to me to be asAlways another s***** day? (as Always)
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thank you for sharing.
It's 3:57 and a ,New Day?" (now sure why the commas there)
It's a n"New Day?" (an 'New Day!')
and it only seems to me to be asAlways another s***** day? (as Always)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thanks Barb.
Working hard now that I'm married.
Doctor Ricky
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Ricky,
This seems to be from a very negative of depressed person or both. I don't consider this horror or thriller poetry. The artwork is apt as a metaphor for the darkness in this poem.
I think the forsake and break rhyme is forced because it should be God forsaken.
You doubled up the word Be in the second stanza. In the last stanza you don't need the second 'now'.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have great day.
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Hi Ricky,
This seems to be from a very negative of depressed person or both. I don't consider this horror or thriller poetry. The artwork is apt as a metaphor for the darkness in this poem.
I think the forsake and break rhyme is forced because it should be God forsaken.
You doubled up the word Be in the second stanza. In the last stanza you don't need the second 'now'.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have great day.
Joan
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2023
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Thanks Joan for you timely review and suggestions.
Doctor Ricky
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You are most welcome, Ricky.
Joan
Comment from JSD
Carefully constructed and cleverly researched poem which expresses your frustrations succinctly and effectively. Lovely word play too. Always like a pun or three.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Carefully constructed and cleverly researched poem which expresses your frustrations succinctly and effectively. Lovely word play too. Always like a pun or three.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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I kind of cheese my reviewer sometimes and confusion which just is my little bit of style.
Thanks again and have a blessed day.
Doctor Ricky
Comment from royowen
We've been talking about the biblical reference of proverb, the power of life and death are in the tongue, and those that love it, will suffer the consequences. Proverbs 18:21, so I think that's a good thing to follow Rick, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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We've been talking about the biblical reference of proverb, the power of life and death are in the tongue, and those that love it, will suffer the consequences. Proverbs 18:21, so I think that's a good thing to follow Rick, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2023
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Thanks Roy and Enjoy this New Day.
Doctor Ricky
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You too.
Comment from kahpot
Very well done, I like the way you have used "pray and prey" very clever, it must be hard waking everyday wondering how bad it might be, very well written and thanks for sharing****kahpot
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Very well done, I like the way you have used "pray and prey" very clever, it must be hard waking everyday wondering how bad it might be, very well written and thanks for sharing****kahpot
Comment Written 05-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2023
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Well I decided to seal the bond that 19 and a half years.
Thanks Kahoot.
Doctor Ricky