I Choose Rainbows
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Comment from dellsworthpoet
An interesting list poem. It touches many things. The flow is good. The images are clear. The stanzas are singular in idea, but cohesive as a whole. The language is varied.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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An interesting list poem. It touches many things. The flow is good. The images are clear. The stanzas are singular in idea, but cohesive as a whole. The language is varied.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2023
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I thank you!
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Sholessjo,
Really enjoyed all the connection and deep thinking in this composition.
I'm hoping that you and this poem have the opportunity to a full and attentive reading, as it is a clever construction.
Yes, we must survive through all of these connections... well done!
Where boys
Meer(meet) girls...
Fat fingers methinks to this slight slip:))
It is the survival
Of the fittest
Thst(that) freaks...okay, now I know it fat-finger syndrome:))
Our souls
With our thoughts we create...
a need to be.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Hi Sholessjo,
Really enjoyed all the connection and deep thinking in this composition.
I'm hoping that you and this poem have the opportunity to a full and attentive reading, as it is a clever construction.
Yes, we must survive through all of these connections... well done!
Where boys
Meer(meet) girls...
Fat fingers methinks to this slight slip:))
It is the survival
Of the fittest
Thst(that) freaks...okay, now I know it fat-finger syndrome:))
Our souls
With our thoughts we create...
a need to be.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2023
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Thanks James. It?s still a work in progress.