Unwelcome visitor
Thanks for coming - not!30 total reviews
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi Wendy,
well, you got me!
I was waiting with a certain anticipation to who this unwanted acquaintance may have been. A real tangible entity... so kudos for the clever conclusion.
I guess the recurring bad dream is one's conscience that plays mind games... the one that lays mind-fields for us to trip upon?
Enjoyed reading this little vinaigrette... clever and seasoned just right!
Sorry about the contest!
With our thoughts we create...
an open door policy.
Kind regards,
James.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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Hi Wendy,
well, you got me!
I was waiting with a certain anticipation to who this unwanted acquaintance may have been. A real tangible entity... so kudos for the clever conclusion.
I guess the recurring bad dream is one's conscience that plays mind games... the one that lays mind-fields for us to trip upon?
Enjoyed reading this little vinaigrette... clever and seasoned just right!
Sorry about the contest!
With our thoughts we create...
an open door policy.
Kind regards,
James.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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Thank you very much James for this super review! I am glad you couldn?t guess the ending. Perhaps I have shamed her into not coming back.
Wendy
Comment from Bill Schott
This flash fiction story, Unwelcome Visitor, gives a name to that fiend that flushes up all of my self-loathing so I can bathe in it for a millennium at night. Down with RBD.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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This flash fiction story, Unwelcome Visitor, gives a name to that fiend that flushes up all of my self-loathing so I can bathe in it for a millennium at night. Down with RBD.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2023
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2023
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Yes, down with RBD. I hope I have publicly shamed her enough to make her clear off and leave me alone. Thanks for a super review. I am glad you enjoyed the ending.
Wendy
Comment from BethShelby
I have a few of those unwelcome visitors. This makes a neat flash becaues we don't know who is visitor his until the last line. I like the way the story leads you to believe it might be someone who knows a lot about you but makes you feel bad about yourself. It is hard to get rid of something that you can't control.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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I have a few of those unwelcome visitors. This makes a neat flash becaues we don't know who is visitor his until the last line. I like the way the story leads you to believe it might be someone who knows a lot about you but makes you feel bad about yourself. It is hard to get rid of something that you can't control.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thank you Beth. Great review. Exactly right. And I think you hit the nail on the head. They are out of my control - and I like to be in control eg well prepared, punctual ?.
Wendy
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A good teaser in this one Wendy as I tried to work out the emotions involved. Those recurring dreams seem to pop out when we least expect them to. Enjoyed this one, and no, I didn't guess. A good read, cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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A good teaser in this one Wendy as I tried to work out the emotions involved. Those recurring dreams seem to pop out when we least expect them to. Enjoyed this one, and no, I didn't guess. A good read, cheers
Valda
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2023
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Thanks so much Valda. Glad you enjoyed this one!
Wendy
Comment from LJbutterfly
I like the way you set this story up as a mystery, with little clues as we go along. I know all about recurring bad dreams. I wrote about mine in the Dream contest. We don't always know what causes them, but most of us have experienced them. This would have been a great contest entry.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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I like the way you set this story up as a mystery, with little clues as we go along. I know all about recurring bad dreams. I wrote about mine in the Dream contest. We don't always know what causes them, but most of us have experienced them. This would have been a great contest entry.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate your fine words! I voted for yours in the contest, as I thought it well written and met the brief perfectly. Wendy
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Thank you for your vote for my story in the contest.
Comment from Spitfire
So glad this if fiction. If nonfiction I would try to figure out the meaning of this recurring dream. But that's easy. The dreamer is also the visitor, I would guess.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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So glad this if fiction. If nonfiction I would try to figure out the meaning of this recurring dream. But that's easy. The dreamer is also the visitor, I would guess.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much. A thoughtful review. I think many or most of us have something similar in a dream which comes back in one form or another.
Wendy
Comment from Julie Lau
This is a well-written little essay, building up the tension - who IS this person? - to a gradual reveal. I wish for you that she would go away, but she really seems to be clinging on. As a very poor swimmer, I had a recurring dream of drowning until I actually did almost drown - then the dream left me. Strange, no? But at least Flash Fiction will often recur!. Julie L :-)
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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This is a well-written little essay, building up the tension - who IS this person? - to a gradual reveal. I wish for you that she would go away, but she really seems to be clinging on. As a very poor swimmer, I had a recurring dream of drowning until I actually did almost drown - then the dream left me. Strange, no? But at least Flash Fiction will often recur!. Julie L :-)
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thanks Julie. Great review. Maybe sharing about it publicly will bring it to a close. Lol.
Wendy
Comment from Anne Johnston
So sorry you missed the contest, Wendy, as this sounds like it would have been a perfect entry. I am sure that all of us can sympathize with you, about these dreams that seem to keep coming back.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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So sorry you missed the contest, Wendy, as this sounds like it would have been a perfect entry. I am sure that all of us can sympathize with you, about these dreams that seem to keep coming back.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thank you Anne. Lovely review. Yes, our subconscious can play weird tricks, and it seems that dreams are beyond our control.
Wendy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I am thankful that I don't have these dreams anymore Wendy, but I suffered with them up until I married and put up with it. Changing our lives drastically can chance our mindset and often make our sleep more restful. Anxiety can impact our sleep, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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I am thankful that I don't have these dreams anymore Wendy, but I suffered with them up until I married and put up with it. Changing our lives drastically can chance our mindset and often make our sleep more restful. Anxiety can impact our sleep, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much Dolly. I appreciate your words.
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
I knew you were personifying something but wasn't sure what it was. A recurring bad memory that preys on guilt came to mind. But yes, a bad dream could also. Sorry that you missed the deadline.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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I knew you were personifying something but wasn't sure what it was. A recurring bad memory that preys on guilt came to mind. But yes, a bad dream could also. Sorry that you missed the deadline.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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The weird thing is that none of the dream is based on fact. It?s always about not being prepared for or being late for my teaching, classes, lessons or kids in some way or another. I was always on time, well prepared, calm and confident, and had an excellent relationship with the kids. And I have been retired for seven years! Thanks so much for a great review.
Wendy
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Whew! You're so conscientious so the dreams are things you naturally work against in real life. 😊💞