Comment from kahpot

Excellent

So sad, this is a very imaginative form of poetry for the reader, and the four lines make the words needed to have a greater impact, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

Thank you very much, kym. It's always so good to read your reviews. You are very kind.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Been there, done that. My third son never made it out of the hospital. He spent over a month there and ended up dying during heart surgery. It is heart breaking and your poem relays that emotion.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

I'm sorry for your loss, Barbara.

Thank you very much. It's so good to read your review. You are very kind.

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Comment from Mike Stevens

Excellent

Another fine poem, Gypsy----captures the devastation couple's feel whe their child is taken from them; from elation to devestation, sad reality of sudden death

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

Thank you very much. It's so good to read your review. You are very kind.

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Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

a scifiaiku? hmm intersting...

this was a sad but great poem!

but if it's a ride home - shouldn't it be a baby car seat or baby carrier? idk it could be just me LOL!

excellent emotional poem
thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

They had bought the baby carriage that would not be used. It was kind of ephrastic. I fell in love with the picture lol

Comment from Ricky1024

Excellent

Thanks for sharing this gypsy. This was another well written but short entry rich and theme and imagery.
And also read well and flowed well with no grammar issues. Have a great day. Dr. Ricky 10:24

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

Thank you very much. It's so good to read your review. You are very kind.

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Comment from JSD

Excellent

Oh. This is horrid. Stuff the form, the language that so succinctly conveys tragedy is stark and painful. I can't say more. X John. "Seeing through a glass darkly".

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

Lol

Thank you very much. It's so good to read your review. You are very kind.

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Because the ride is from the hospital, I'm guessing that the baby didn't survive so the baby stroller is empty of the baby but full of grief. Spooky illustration to go with your SciFaiku poem!

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

Yes, it's sad, I'm sorry. I found the picture and fell in love with it. The poem came after.

Thank you big sis

Love

Marival

Comment from AP Apgar

Excellent

I like your SiFiauki poem- clever- 3/5/(3)7? - excellent picture presentation of the stroller- tying in with the poem- scary tale of woe- baby stroller full of grief- lesser of two evils- the baby missing? Either one sounds devastating- good job AP

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

I don't know why I counted quiet as one syllable. Thanks!

Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.

Comment from aryr

Excellent

A great SciFaiku, Gypsy. The picture was priceless in that it was the raven and the carriage. Your words showed the heart break involved with the sorrow. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback. Blessed be.

reply by aryr on 28-Jun-2023

Most welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was sad. The short verse gave us just enough information to assume someone lost a child. How and why are questions that beg for answers. Great poem. Gretchen

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

Yes, you are right.

Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.