Silence
20 syllable poem for the contest7 total reviews
Comment from Caroline M England
Fabulous imagery and emotions you conjure up in your tiny poem with so few words. It's very powerfully expressed and clever and made me smile despite the pain which seeps through the words. Beautiful. Thank you for sharing and congratulations on your 3rd place.
Best wishes
Caroline
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Fabulous imagery and emotions you conjure up in your tiny poem with so few words. It's very powerfully expressed and clever and made me smile despite the pain which seeps through the words. Beautiful. Thank you for sharing and congratulations on your 3rd place.
Best wishes
Caroline
Comment Written 10-Feb-2024
Comment from Ginda Simpson
That is the kind of silence that does hurt one's ears, because words would have been less cruel. This is a well constructed poem for the twenty syllable contest. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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That is the kind of silence that does hurt one's ears, because words would have been less cruel. This is a well constructed poem for the twenty syllable contest. Best of luck.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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You are so right. The cruelty of than indifference pierces the heart more deeply than harsh words. I?m glad you understood the pain captured in this short piece. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from kahpot
Yes, that moment of silence can be so loud, in twenty syllables you have said so much, that so many will and can relate to, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Yes, that moment of silence can be so loud, in twenty syllables you have said so much, that so many will and can relate to, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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You are so right. The cruelty of silent indifference pierces the heart more deeply than harsh words. I?m glad you understood the pain captured in this short piece. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from Sugarray77
Awesome work, June. What a great poem that is so powerful... it reminds me creating a floral design... the empty spaces are just as important as the filled spaces. That is what I thought as I read your verse. Well done.
Melissa
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Awesome work, June. What a great poem that is so powerful... it reminds me creating a floral design... the empty spaces are just as important as the filled spaces. That is what I thought as I read your verse. Well done.
Melissa
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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You are so right. The cruelty of sulent indifference pierces the heart more deeply than harsh words. I?m glad you understood the pain captured in this short piece. Thank you for sharing your thoughts. And the generous stars!
Comment from Paul Manton
Hello June. This is a perfect example of a twenty syllable poem, with a really clever and heartfelt message.
The opening two lines form a kind of question which needs to evoke a response; when it comes, we are surprised because lines three and four appear to contain an oxymoron: You covered your ears because of the lack of sound? Illogical? No - you covered your ears at the horror of the situation. Who wants to hear rejection from the beloved? Desolation!
The poem works brilliantly. Thank you.
Paul
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Hello June. This is a perfect example of a twenty syllable poem, with a really clever and heartfelt message.
The opening two lines form a kind of question which needs to evoke a response; when it comes, we are surprised because lines three and four appear to contain an oxymoron: You covered your ears because of the lack of sound? Illogical? No - you covered your ears at the horror of the situation. Who wants to hear rejection from the beloved? Desolation!
The poem works brilliantly. Thank you.
Paul
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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You are so right. The cruelty of silent indifference pierces the heart more deeply than harsh words. I?m glad you understood the pain captured in this short piece. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
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You're welcome, June
Paul
Comment from JSD
A clever way to fill the twenty syllables. The contrast between silence and deafening is striking and this is thus most effective and engaging. Good luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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A clever way to fill the twenty syllables. The contrast between silence and deafening is striking and this is thus most effective and engaging. Good luck in the competition.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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You are so right. The cruelty of than indifference pierces the heart more deeply than harsh words. I?m glad you understood the pain captured in this short piece. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A poignant write and if we have to ask then there is no love there, your words speak volumes here June, a fine post for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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A poignant write and if we have to ask then there is no love there, your words speak volumes here June, a fine post for the contest, I wish you luck, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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You are so right. The cruelty of silent indifference pierces the heart more deeply than harsh words. I?m glad you understood the pain captured in this short piece. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.