One Man's Calling
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Comment from lyenochka
Great job with this chapter! You really had me wondering if Hanna would be also called into Ben's ministry. But it turns out that she had another fellow in mind. Now we'll get to witness a baseball game that long ago. Interesting! I guess Angelo will be fighting crime instead of doing crime! Yay!
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Great job with this chapter! You really had me wondering if Hanna would be also called into Ben's ministry. But it turns out that she had another fellow in mind. Now we'll get to witness a baseball game that long ago. Interesting! I guess Angelo will be fighting crime instead of doing crime! Yay!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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smiley face here
Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from BethShelby
I see Ben feels he never feel right about choosing to marry rather than listen for the the Lord calling, but it worked out because the girl was already in love with someone else. The young man is who is Ben helper must have been relieved when Ben tells he is going to have an important job. I like tha Ben takes time to let he watch a ball game.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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I see Ben feels he never feel right about choosing to marry rather than listen for the the Lord calling, but it worked out because the girl was already in love with someone else. The young man is who is Ben helper must have been relieved when Ben tells he is going to have an important job. I like tha Ben takes time to let he watch a ball game.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thank you. I try to make Ben human.
Comment from royowen
Yep, when the calling of God rests on you, you don't have a choice but follow Him, we you do, but when the hand is put to the plough and looking back we aren't fit for Him, of Paul says, if we burn with passion, we should marry, but only if God removes the passion, can we. It's very difficult, Hanna would need to be willing to follow Ben, beautifully written Wayne, blessings Roy,
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Yep, when the calling of God rests on you, you don't have a choice but follow Him, we you do, but when the hand is put to the plough and looking back we aren't fit for Him, of Paul says, if we burn with passion, we should marry, but only if God removes the passion, can we. It's very difficult, Hanna would need to be willing to follow Ben, beautifully written Wayne, blessings Roy,
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate your review.
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A pleasure
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another well expressed story with plenty of dialogue to enrich the characters and pace to move the plot. Ben is having to face quite a challenge here and, although sorely tempted to take the easier path, he resists. He is becoming very clear-sighted and confident now on his journey. Thanks for sharing, Wayne. Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Another well expressed story with plenty of dialogue to enrich the characters and pace to move the plot. Ben is having to face quite a challenge here and, although sorely tempted to take the easier path, he resists. He is becoming very clear-sighted and confident now on his journey. Thanks for sharing, Wayne. Debbie
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate your review.
Comment from Wendy G
Most interesting, and you explained well Ben's situation and his choice to follow his calling although love and marriage are not wrong. It is nice to see that he is very human and that he is taking the boy for a special treat to watch the baseball. Lovely story.
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Most interesting, and you explained well Ben's situation and his choice to follow his calling although love and marriage are not wrong. It is nice to see that he is very human and that he is taking the boy for a special treat to watch the baseball. Lovely story.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023
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Thank you. I believe all ministers of the gospel are mere humans, regardless of their calling, and have choices in life that are probably far more difficult.
Comment from Jay Squires
Gah! Your prose is so effortless! I could do worse by not following your example. I just adore reading your stories! Such as: "he felt as if he'd cracked open a watermelon and was merely licking at the edges, the sweet heart beyond his reach." [Perhaps you should learn from Ben: he uses great similes.] Here are a few other things I noticed:
Hanna was at the doorway as Ben prepared to give she and her grandmother their privacy ["... as Ben prepared to give HER and her grandmother their privacy." 'She' would be the 'doer'; 'her' is one 'something is done to'. ]
At the Harrison Street Bridge Street corner [The second 'street' shouldn't be capped.]
The next time I see you, you will in a beautiful uniform with a shiny badge." [... you will BE (?) in a beautiful uniform ...]
"Waters to swim in. [WATER'S to swim in (a contraction of water + is) ]
Normally, I don't suggest changing dialogue. It's too personal. But in the above case, using the correct word-choice doesn't interfere with characterization.
Jay
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Gah! Your prose is so effortless! I could do worse by not following your example. I just adore reading your stories! Such as: "he felt as if he'd cracked open a watermelon and was merely licking at the edges, the sweet heart beyond his reach." [Perhaps you should learn from Ben: he uses great similes.] Here are a few other things I noticed:
Hanna was at the doorway as Ben prepared to give she and her grandmother their privacy ["... as Ben prepared to give HER and her grandmother their privacy." 'She' would be the 'doer'; 'her' is one 'something is done to'. ]
At the Harrison Street Bridge Street corner [The second 'street' shouldn't be capped.]
The next time I see you, you will in a beautiful uniform with a shiny badge." [... you will BE (?) in a beautiful uniform ...]
"Waters to swim in. [WATER'S to swim in (a contraction of water + is) ]
Normally, I don't suggest changing dialogue. It's too personal. But in the above case, using the correct word-choice doesn't interfere with characterization.
Jay
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you.
You called it effortless. But if I'd applied a little effort...
You are right about water's, but in this case the Bible uses waters as if plural in that there is deep water, lots of water. I think it's a sort of colloquialism.
Thanks again.
Comment from eliz100
This is an excellent chapter. I enjoyed the way you handled Hanna and Ben's feelings. I believe in callings so Ben's relationship with God is believable. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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This is an excellent chapter. I enjoyed the way you handled Hanna and Ben's feelings. I believe in callings so Ben's relationship with God is believable. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Ben's calling seems to be leading him and Tony to places they will enjoy being. Hanna was a delightful temptation for Ben, but it worked out for both of them as Hanna had to courage to tell her grandmother she has picked the man she intends to marry, and it isn't Ben.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Ben's calling seems to be leading him and Tony to places they will enjoy being. Hanna was a delightful temptation for Ben, but it worked out for both of them as Hanna had to courage to tell her grandmother she has picked the man she intends to marry, and it isn't Ben.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Yay for women's right!
And thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
A very engaging chapter. I found it particularly interesting that both Ben and Hanna were being pushed towards each other against their own wishes - this was well-carried out. kay
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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A very engaging chapter. I found it particularly interesting that both Ben and Hanna were being pushed towards each other against their own wishes - this was well-carried out. kay
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you. My attempt is to make people as real as possible, Ben despite his calling.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
It was a big decision to turn away from the beautiful Hannah and continue to follow His calling. I wonder what sort of devil he will be confronting at the Ball Game. Baseball was and is a big thing back east. Well done Wayne. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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It was a big decision to turn away from the beautiful Hannah and continue to follow His calling. I wonder what sort of devil he will be confronting at the Ball Game. Baseball was and is a big thing back east. Well done Wayne. Nancy:)
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you. Yes, Ben is just a man, after all.