2023 Gypsy's Tanka
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10 total reviews
Comment from aryr
This was a fantastic tanka, Gypsy. I love the rain and the freshness it brings. The picture of the gobble street and the houses were phenomenal. This was very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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This was a fantastic tanka, Gypsy. I love the rain and the freshness it brings. The picture of the gobble street and the houses were phenomenal. This was very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for the kind review. Blessed be.
gypsy
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You are most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
There's always a thought of old-time thoughts with cobblestone streets. Thoughts of love long ago. Along with the rain, on cobblestones leaving tears of a lost love. Great poem and great metaphors.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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There's always a thought of old-time thoughts with cobblestone streets. Thoughts of love long ago. Along with the rain, on cobblestones leaving tears of a lost love. Great poem and great metaphors.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Barbara, when it rains over cobbleston there is a reflection of above the street on the street, it looks like you are standing on the reflection of the street... houses... sky.
Thank you very much, Barbara!
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
What a great quote from Dr. Seuss! And your poem describes the feeling well. The rain is like heaven shedding tears but the narrator is standing on those memories of the past relationship.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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What a great quote from Dr. Seuss! And your poem describes the feeling well. The rain is like heaven shedding tears but the narrator is standing on those memories of the past relationship.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister!
Love,
Marival
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
your words took me on a journey... how can so few words do that? Ah... a wordsmith at play methinks.
The composition matched with the image, allowed the reflection of the rain soaked cobblestones... the little café, possibly where love and you blossomed.... hmmmm, the restaurant, sitting across from each other, eyes locked, laughing... enjoying good food and even better anticipation for what desert was going to served up.
Yes, I can see you arm-in-arm with your lover walking, loving life, full of joy.
But that was before, now only a glimmer of memories floating down the street with the rain... washing away the tangibility of connection... a sad love story indeed.
As always Gitana Regina, your ability to create something meaningful within such a limited format and word count is a testament to the dedication to your art... bravo!
With our thoughts we create...
drowning impressions.
Warm regards,
James.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Hi MariVal,
your words took me on a journey... how can so few words do that? Ah... a wordsmith at play methinks.
The composition matched with the image, allowed the reflection of the rain soaked cobblestones... the little café, possibly where love and you blossomed.... hmmmm, the restaurant, sitting across from each other, eyes locked, laughing... enjoying good food and even better anticipation for what desert was going to served up.
Yes, I can see you arm-in-arm with your lover walking, loving life, full of joy.
But that was before, now only a glimmer of memories floating down the street with the rain... washing away the tangibility of connection... a sad love story indeed.
As always Gitana Regina, your ability to create something meaningful within such a limited format and word count is a testament to the dedication to your art... bravo!
With our thoughts we create...
drowning impressions.
Warm regards,
James.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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James, I'm so glad to find you. I hope you are well.
You amaze me. It's like you crawl inside my head and know exactly what I mean in my poems. It's the sign of an excellent reviewer and friend.
Gypsy super hugs
"I have to face life with passion. I must rediscover the irresistible will to live and to love." - unknown
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It goes double from me dear friend.
Comment from shelley kaye
and now i have "after the rain" by nelson playing through my head LOL
love the middle line in yellow and the others in orange - like a street light in the fall...
great tanka!
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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and now i have "after the rain" by nelson playing through my head LOL
love the middle line in yellow and the others in orange - like a street light in the fall...
great tanka!
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
Cobblestone scream history. The fact that couple walked their and one returns to remember. Very clever line. The wet cobblestones wet with tears? Who knows. It's where my thoughts went. Gretchen
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Cobblestone scream history. The fact that couple walked their and one returns to remember. Very clever line. The wet cobblestones wet with tears? Who knows. It's where my thoughts went. Gretchen
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for your time, kind review, and helpfull feedback.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your tanka poem - Excellent picture- goes well with the theme of your poem. (Cobblestone Streets) Poem flows extremely well - single pointed and clear to the reader. Easy to read! Not over weighted with metaphors - nice - good satori - (love) standing the past - nice - Good Job. AP
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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I like your tanka poem - Excellent picture- goes well with the theme of your poem. (Cobblestone Streets) Poem flows extremely well - single pointed and clear to the reader. Easy to read! Not over weighted with metaphors - nice - good satori - (love) standing the past - nice - Good Job. AP
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, AP :)
gypsy hugs
Comment from Sugarray77
You always do such great work and flavor your writing with an intensity that you support with the use of colored fonts. So clever of you. I enjoyed reading this fine piece, Gypsy!!
Melissa
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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You always do such great work and flavor your writing with an intensity that you support with the use of colored fonts. So clever of you. I enjoyed reading this fine piece, Gypsy!!
Melissa
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Melissa, I appreciate your kind review.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from JSD
With perfect little nuggets like this I wish we could just write 'perfect' and leave it at that but 150 characters are required. I suppose I could write perfect about twenty times. You have a tenderness of touch with words which is gorgeous. I can't approximate to it. But I'll keep trying.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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With perfect little nuggets like this I wish we could just write 'perfect' and leave it at that but 150 characters are required. I suppose I could write perfect about twenty times. You have a tenderness of touch with words which is gorgeous. I can't approximate to it. But I'll keep trying.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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hehe ... I know what you mean. Some reviews are long and some are short. I have created a signature and quote for those occasions, it fills the room in a nice way. People actually like the quotes. ... just a thought.
Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Gypsy hugs
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I'll look out for the quotes. Hadn't noticed, I'm afraid. Signature is sweet tho. Please have a look at my new post if you get a chance. Trying for lightness of touch with airy prompt. X
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Sometime love does not last forever for whatever reason, your ambient write here just remembers the good times, much enjoyed, a poignant write, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Sometime love does not last forever for whatever reason, your ambient write here just remembers the good times, much enjoyed, a poignant write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing my poem, Dolly.
Gypsy hugs