Moonlight Walk
A Rhyming Wave poem for Potlatch Poetry23 total reviews
Comment from eliz100
I enjoyed reading your poem. Poetry is not my forte, but I know what I like. God bless you for keeping all the rules of this poem. Your words took me into the woods on a moonlit night. I do not see any room for improvement.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Poetry is not my forte, but I know what I like. God bless you for keeping all the rules of this poem. Your words took me into the woods on a moonlit night. I do not see any room for improvement.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you. I'm glad you could take this walk with me.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wow this seems like a hard challenge with all those repeated lines, but yours works well Yvonne. It flows nicely and sets a tranquil night scene. Love the artwork,
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Wow this seems like a hard challenge with all those repeated lines, but yours works well Yvonne. It flows nicely and sets a tranquil night scene. Love the artwork,
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 27-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. It's not as hard as it looks. I know you will do a great job with it.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are calming and serene. I thought about the author's
words on quietness and identified with these words. As for me I find
God in the silence. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is
perfect and compliments the theme and words of this poem.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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The author's words are calming and serene. I thought about the author's
words on quietness and identified with these words. As for me I find
God in the silence. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork is
perfect and compliments the theme and words of this poem.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you. Walking in nature anytime helps me feel closer to God.
Comment from JSD
An interesting piece which only just avoids becoming a little repetitive, but I know that is the point by reading the prompt notes. I worry that the constraints of the form sometimes hamper the writer, but you certainly make some thoughtful points with effective metaphor.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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An interesting piece which only just avoids becoming a little repetitive, but I know that is the point by reading the prompt notes. I worry that the constraints of the form sometimes hamper the writer, but you certainly make some thoughtful points with effective metaphor.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
Comment from Wendy G
That's an excellent response to the prompt. I enjoyed it a lot and you have met the requirements. The tone is happy, the flow, metre and rhyme are all just right. Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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That's an excellent response to the prompt. I enjoyed it a lot and you have met the requirements. The tone is happy, the flow, metre and rhyme are all just right. Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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Thank you. It's fun form.
Comment from w.j.debi
This sounds like a wonderful stroll through the moonlight. You've done a great job with this form. The refrain words add to the message and set a nice pace for the stroll the character is taking.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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This sounds like a wonderful stroll through the moonlight. You've done a great job with this form. The refrain words add to the message and set a nice pace for the stroll the character is taking.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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It's lovely walking in the calmness of night. Thanks for reviewing.
Comment from Sugarray77
How interesting, Yvonne. This new form (at least new to me) did have a rolling feel to it. Well done and so clever and creative. I enjoyed reading it. :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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How interesting, Yvonne. This new form (at least new to me) did have a rolling feel to it. Well done and so clever and creative. I enjoyed reading it. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2023
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I'm so glad. Thanks for taking the time.
Comment from lyenochka
What a challenging form! My eyes crossed trying to figure out the rules of repetition. I did like your meter and the feeling embracing the nighttime ambiance with the stars and moon.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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What a challenging form! My eyes crossed trying to figure out the rules of repetition. I did like your meter and the feeling embracing the nighttime ambiance with the stars and moon.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you. Looking forward to reading yours.
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I don't think I will try. Too busy! Heading to our new location tomorrow! Perhaps Patch will write a complaint soon.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this rhyming club entry with us. This poem is definitely rhyming and none of them are forced. This was a fun poem to read. A stary moonlight night is a fun thing to write about.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you for sharing this rhyming club entry with us. This poem is definitely rhyming and none of them are forced. This was a fun poem to read. A stary moonlight night is a fun thing to write about.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you. Sadly, these days, I don't do any nighttime walking.
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it's not safe
Comment from Ulla
That's an an amazing form, Yvonne. I liked it very much and you seem to master with no effort.. Of course, I've never heard about the form, but that is not so strange as you well know. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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That's an an amazing form, Yvonne. I liked it very much and you seem to master with no effort.. Of course, I've never heard about the form, but that is not so strange as you well know. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the lovely comments. It was fun to do. I wish I could write outstanding stories l like you do.
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Aw, you are too kind to me :)))
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It's the truth.
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xxx