Tanka Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 177 "Blazing Sunset"Romantic Tanka Poems
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Comment from aryr
What a great tanka, dual tanka at that, Gypsy. The dual pictures carry some sadness in that they are from the military and carry 'death notices'. Your words provide the message in the first tanka of all the love and joy where as the second provides devastation and aloneness. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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What a great tanka, dual tanka at that, Gypsy. The dual pictures carry some sadness in that they are from the military and carry 'death notices'. Your words provide the message in the first tanka of all the love and joy where as the second provides devastation and aloneness. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, Aryr. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy----and getting news like that has to be a terrible shock----just glad that for the most part, we don't have much war to necessitate news such as that
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Another fine poem, Gypsy----and getting news like that has to be a terrible shock----just glad that for the most part, we don't have much war to necessitate news such as that
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, Mike.
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Comment from AP Apgar
I Like your tanka suite- nice picture presentation- story paints a good picture of her swinging in the swing on the porch sadly waiting for her man- syllables a bit confusing- may want to double check them? I see 5/6/6/6/5
And 10/6/6/6 could be wrong- good job - AP
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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I Like your tanka suite- nice picture presentation- story paints a good picture of her swinging in the swing on the porch sadly waiting for her man- syllables a bit confusing- may want to double check them? I see 5/6/6/6/5
And 10/6/6/6 could be wrong- good job - AP
Comment Written 19-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, AP. Tanka is 5 lines so that is why you are confused with the second one. No/ti/fi/er in first line.
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Comment from GWHARGIS
Your poem set such a scene. I loved the tone.it was such an emptiness she must have felt. The use of melancholic sky was perfect. Those are words that no one wants to hear. "I regret to inform you ..." so sad. Gretchen
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Your poem set such a scene. I loved the tone.it was such an emptiness she must have felt. The use of melancholic sky was perfect. Those are words that no one wants to hear. "I regret to inform you ..." so sad. Gretchen
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, Gretchen I am sorry I got serious on you.
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Don't apologize. It was a fabulous poem. Gretchen
Comment from lyenochka
That's so sad. The first stanza shows us the wife waiting for her husband's return. The second stanza reveals that he is not returning and the sunset symbolizes the death that was announced.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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That's so sad. The first stanza shows us the wife waiting for her husband's return. The second stanza reveals that he is not returning and the sunset symbolizes the death that was announced.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Yes! Thank you very much, big sister
Love,
marival
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Comment from shelley kaye
wow this was a great tanka suite
thought-provoking and heartbreaking
good sunset and soldier picture choices
smooth flow with nice imagery
i could totally see the porch swing rocking...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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wow this was a great tanka suite
thought-provoking and heartbreaking
good sunset and soldier picture choices
smooth flow with nice imagery
i could totally see the porch swing rocking...
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, Shelley. :)
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Comment from JSD
Really effective and beautiful writing in this tight form. You pack so much in and move with your economy of expression. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Really effective and beautiful writing in this tight form. You pack so much in and move with your economy of expression. Thank you for sharing this lovely poem.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, jsd. :)
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
Ouch!!! This poem hurts to read it. Many family members have wait patiently for their loved ones to return, yet they don't. I often wonder if the governments who send these people off to war understand the ramifications. I doubt they do. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Ouch!!! This poem hurts to read it. Many family members have wait patiently for their loved ones to return, yet they don't. I often wonder if the governments who send these people off to war understand the ramifications. I doubt they do. Thank you for sharing this poem with us.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much, Barbara. :)
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