Comment from karenina

Excellent

I couldn't help but summon up a little melody to softly sing this to...

(No worries, everyone is asleep, and no eardrums were harmed in this process!)

I agree! "So long" seems temporary... As all romantics would want a separation to be!

You've engaged my senses here. I can smell those pine trees!

Beautiful presentation, as well, Craig!

Karenina

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023

Thanks, Karenina. So glad you liked it :)

reply by karenina on 01-Sep-2023

I'd love to hear what melody you could put to it! That would been awesome!

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

Congrats on placing in the contest, my friend. This made me smile because it reminds me of an interesting thing about the Indian language, Malayalam, which I used to speak while living in India. They never say 'see you later' but rather politely ask: SHALL I GO AND COME? They even mash up the two verbs, go and come, into one word. It means: I am going, but I'll come back.

The poem is sweet, tender, well rhymed and true to form. Lovely presentation too! All the alliteration augments the artistic awesomeness.

Best Smiles,
rd

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2023

That sounds like a good way to express it to me, RD. It also sounds a bit Schwarzeneggeresque... "I'll be back"! I'm most grateful for your lovely comments. Craig

reply by rama devi on 29-Jun-2023

Thanks, dear C. Your coining of Schwarzeneggeresque made me chuckle. :-))

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi CD,
I like this poem that seems to talk of a long marriage that is coming to a close because of death. This is a point when goodbye is usually considered appropriate. But maybe so long works too because with faith it is believed we will see them again. I agree the 'so long' seems less final.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Enjoy your weekend.
Joan

 Comment Written 23-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 23-Jun-2023

Thank you so much for the thoughtful comments and good wishes, Joan. You have a great weekend too. Craig

reply by dragonpoet on 23-Jun-2023

Don't mention it, Craig.
Joan

Comment from Sugarray77

Excellent

I enjoyed this lovely, and well-written 3-6-9!! You did a stellar job on the rhyme sequence and the soft, rhythmic anapest meter. I enjoyed it immensely!

Melissa

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Thanks so much, Melissa. Lovely to hear from you :) Craig

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

Lovely sentiments in your 3-6-9 poem Craig and, I tend to agree about goodbye. I tend to say 'see you later' it's almost a promise that we will meet again. Good luck in the contest, I really enjoyed it.cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023

Thanks for the kind comments and the good wishes, Valda. I appreciate both very much. Craig

Comment from strandregs

Excellent

I like it
Softness is the theme,
Good memories
Devotion and acceptance sweeten the the long final separation.
So long is good.
Cause heaven is where you are... Jolly. :-))Z.

 Comment Written 19-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023

Thanks, Z :)
I don't get the Jolly reference - is it a song?

reply by strandregs on 19-Jun-2023

I couldn't remember which song it was from
No wonder
It's been 50 years. ;-))Z.

Climb up, way up high
Climb up, way up high
Climb up, way up high

Well a, well a, well a, heavenly angel
I want you for my girl
When I kissed your sweet, sweet lips
I knew that you were out of this world

I'll build a stairway to heaven
I'll climb to the highest star
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are

Well a, well a, well a, over the rainbow
That's where I'm gonna climb
Way up high where the bluebirds fly
I'm gonna love you all the time

I'll build a stairway to heaven
I'll climb to the highest star
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are

I'll build a stairway to heaven
I'll climb to the highest star
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are

Well a, well a, well a, I gotta be going
Gonna leave the world behind
Every day in a heavenly way
You're gonna drive me outta my mind

I'll build a stairway to heaven
I'll climb to the highest star
I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are

I'll build a stairway to heaven
Cause heaven is where you are

Clim up, way up high
Clim up, way up high
Clim up, way up high...
Writer/s: Jimmy Page, Robert Plant
Publisher: Sony/ATV Music Publishing LLC, Warner Chappell Music, Inc.
Lyrics licensed and provided by LyricFind

And if you want to hear it

https://www.songfacts.com/lyrics/neil-sedaka/stairway-to-heaven

reply by the author on 19-Jun-2023

Haha, cool!

Songfact screwed up though... this is not the Stairway to Heaven written by Page&Plant. That's an entirely different beast. Elsewhere on their own site, they say Sedaka wrote it :)

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

It is a bit like Goodbye and au revoir, as Goodbye does sound so final, so I understood your sentiment here and I wish you luck with the contest, an emotional write, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023

Thanks for the kind wishes, Dolly. It was prompted by a reaction to losing one of our four-legged family. Cheers, Craig.

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This 3-6-9, Be with Me, has the proper formatting and sends the message that someone is wanted near, whenever it is possible, and especially when it is necessary.

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023

Yep, that is it in a nutshell. Thanks Bill.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I'm glad you used "so long" - there's something optimistic and comforting about that - reuniting even after one is no longer "drawing breath." Enjoyed the structure of your poem with the short verb-with-me first lines and rhyming last lines. Hope this does well in the contest!

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023

Thanks so much, Helen. I didn't find it an easy style. I appreciate your kind comments. Craig

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Graig, I couldn't agree more. Goodbye is such a definite word. In this context, it spells the end with no future as opposed to 'so long'. Such a wonderful declaration of love in this short poem. All the best of luck. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 18-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2023

Hi Ulla,
Sorry to hear via Pam's poem about your brother's heart trouble. I hope all goes smoothly when he has his surgery. Thanks for the kind words and good wishes :) Craig

reply by Ulla on 19-Jun-2023

Thank you so much, Craig. He's only 52. 52. It is such a big worry. :)