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Viewing comments for Chapter 17 "One Hot Summer Night in Texas"A Memoir and Love Story
12 total reviews
Comment from JSD
Proper ending that makes me want more. Well done. Great, real characters and lovely setting of the scene at the start. A really successful piece. Thank you.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Proper ending that makes me want more. Well done. Great, real characters and lovely setting of the scene at the start. A really successful piece. Thank you.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2023
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Thanks. Appreciate your insight and encouragement.
Comment from lyenochka
Wow, what a love that family had. Mary's whole family loved you so much. I'm so sorry that you were afraid of that love and missed out. But I'm sure you'll tell us more about what the Lord did for you and for Mary.
Loves not just something you say. (Love's)
her parent's told me the news. (parents)
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Wow, what a love that family had. Mary's whole family loved you so much. I'm so sorry that you were afraid of that love and missed out. But I'm sure you'll tell us more about what the Lord did for you and for Mary.
Loves not just something you say. (Love's)
her parent's told me the news. (parents)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thankyou for all.
Comment from MissMerri
It seems Mary and her whole family loved you very much and wanted you to be a part of them. Your writing always captures my attention and grabs my heart. I feel such sadness for Mary. You are a natural storyteller. This is great.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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It seems Mary and her whole family loved you very much and wanted you to be a part of them. Your writing always captures my attention and grabs my heart. I feel such sadness for Mary. You are a natural storyteller. This is great.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thanks for stopping by!
Comment from Alaskastory
"One Hot Summer Night in Texas" covers so many ventures in life. The relationship with Mary may have not turned out as Tom wished, but he did nothing to make it happen divergently. Good chapter.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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"One Hot Summer Night in Texas" covers so many ventures in life. The relationship with Mary may have not turned out as Tom wished, but he did nothing to make it happen divergently. Good chapter.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2023
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Thanks Marie!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a tragic story, but sometimes in life, we do make the mistake of not following your heart. I wish you the very best in all of your life and in your ministry. I enjoyed the story very much. Patricia
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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This is a tragic story, but sometimes in life, we do make the mistake of not following your heart. I wish you the very best in all of your life and in your ministry. I enjoyed the story very much. Patricia
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Thanks Pat!
Comment from royowen
No wonder a lot of girls have the theory that men or boys are only after one thing, and after they get it, they run for cover, but don't worry I did similar things to girls, but God still knows, and I know my actions somehow worked out, not just for me, but my descendants, beautifully written Stan, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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No wonder a lot of girls have the theory that men or boys are only after one thing, and after they get it, they run for cover, but don't worry I did similar things to girls, but God still knows, and I know my actions somehow worked out, not just for me, but my descendants, beautifully written Stan, blessings Roy
Typo : If (I) hadn't smashed...
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Thanks Roy!
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Most welcome
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
A powerful chapter, my friend,
I could feel the love between Mary and Tommy, and the powerful attraction that brought them together for one night of passion.
It was so sad to see them pull apart as Tommy returned to college without her.
Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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A powerful chapter, my friend,
I could feel the love between Mary and Tommy, and the powerful attraction that brought them together for one night of passion.
It was so sad to see them pull apart as Tommy returned to college without her.
Thanks for sharing,
Rhonda
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Thanks Rhonda. Appreciate your encouraging review.
Comment from BethShelby
Wow!, I'm sure there are many guys like you were afraid of commitment. You had been disappointed by family and other girls so there was no wonder, but I feel really bad for Mary and her family who loved you. I'm guessing she will be back in your life at some point.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Wow!, I'm sure there are many guys like you were afraid of commitment. You had been disappointed by family and other girls so there was no wonder, but I feel really bad for Mary and her family who loved you. I'm guessing she will be back in your life at some point.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Thanks Beth. Appreciate your continued reviews very much.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a very poignant write here. It's faultlessly written (bar para starting If only I had known - If (I) hadn't smashed...) There are some wonderful expressions at the beginning: 'I had her packed at hello' and the ambivalence of head and heart in a tug of war. Your story continues the theme of learning, self-criticism and heartache on this journey and engages the reader throughout. I wasn't sure though if the relationship with Mary was in fact consummated - I think it was. But that part seems to have been a bit too discretely passed over (we can take it you know:). All in all an excellent write drawing in the reader with interest for the next chapter. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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This is a very poignant write here. It's faultlessly written (bar para starting If only I had known - If (I) hadn't smashed...) There are some wonderful expressions at the beginning: 'I had her packed at hello' and the ambivalence of head and heart in a tug of war. Your story continues the theme of learning, self-criticism and heartache on this journey and engages the reader throughout. I wasn't sure though if the relationship with Mary was in fact consummated - I think it was. But that part seems to have been a bit too discretely passed over (we can take it you know:). All in all an excellent write drawing in the reader with interest for the next chapter. Thanks for sharing. Debbie
Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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I so appreciate your depth of review. And what you brought out that would be a bit confusing and how I need look at working it over.
Comment from JT traveller
"Shot first and prayed later." I love this line. It speaks volumes. A very well composed piece of prose which was a joy to read. Thanks for the author's notes. Jacqueline
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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"Shot first and prayed later." I love this line. It speaks volumes. A very well composed piece of prose which was a joy to read. Thanks for the author's notes. Jacqueline
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Comment Written 12-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Thanks Jacqueline for your encouraging words of review.