Comment from Jasmine Girl

Exceptional

Where did you find this crazy art where these animals are doing impossible things?

Your tongue twisters with alliteration are great. Children will like them.

Excellent and good luck.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023

Thanks very much for your 6-star review, Lisa. It's amazing what you can find on the internet these days. There's a picture for just about anything. I even found one with a monkey climbing on a prickly cactus, but didn't have room for it. The most surprising one to me was to find a panda in a kilt playing the bagpipe. I just put that into Google and it came up with several.

reply by Jasmine Girl on 14-Jun-2023

Yes. There is a lot of pictures to write poems about. But I like to use my own photos so when you publish these poems, you wouldn't have copy right problems.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

You did a great job, Jim, with your fun poem.
I enjoyed reading it and know youngsters of all
ages would enjoy it, too. Your words were fun to
read aloud, the rhymes worked well, and the imagery
created was awesome.
Thanks for sharing, Jan

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023

Thanks very much, Jan, for your wonderful review. I wish I could have found an image for each stanza, but ran out of room.

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

I really enjoyed this wonderful day at the circus! Thank you inviting us to join in your outing. The animals were most amusing. I hope you will find more interesting field trips for me and my friends!

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023

What a sweet review, June. Thank you very much.

Comment from pome lover

Excellent

holy mackanoly! as somebody said. That had me chuckling, thinking of your thinking all that up! I bet you had to be laughing, too.
What a tongue twister! Oh, I see, the skunk part was a funny friend, well the rest was pretty wonderful! Loved reading it out loud. It will surely be
enjoyed by oldsters as well as youngsters.
Congratulations on All Time Best!
Katharine

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023

Thank you so much, Katharine. I've known that tongue twister for a long time and thought it would fit into this poem very well.

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

This is precious and so fun, Jim. I'm sure every child and the young at heart love this. Silly was my nickname growing up. You pushed my silly button with this riotous contest entry.

Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023

Thank you very much, Silly!

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

I'm betting the picture inspired the poem. For sure, this would make a great children's book. I chucked at 'hoarse horse' and the panda that sounded as if he'd been pricked by a cactus. You're really good at these plays on words.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023

Thanks very much, Shari.

Actually, I wrote it first then (amazingly enough) I was able to find pictures to match. It's amazing what you can find if you put in the right search words. There were several of panda bears wearing kilts playing bagpipes, believe it or not.

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

I guess all this in your poem was nothing but a dream. It is good to dream. Excellent work! It's beautifully written. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2023

Thank you very much, Raul. I really appreciate it.

Comment from JSD

Good

Aww. This was so good. Such lovely imagery and such easy, clever and natural rhyme and rhythm. Absolutely loved it ... until the last line! I'm sorry but that cliche really spoilt it for me. Otherwise great. John

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 Comment Written 13-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023

Thank you for your nice review, John. Your criticism of the last line was a fair one. I can only hope a child with much less experience won't find it to be a cliche.

Comment from l.raven

Exceptional

Hi Jim, what an awesome children's poem...
and a great tongue twister...
made me smile...tried to pick out my favorite
character...but I love them all...
and I love your surprising last stanza...

very well written my sweet friend...
perrrrrfect picture...
I love your poem...love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023

Hey, Linda. What an awesome review! Thank you so much and for the 6 stars as well.

reply by l.raven on 13-Jun-2023

you are so very welcome sweet guy...love xxoo

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Exceptional

Love this. What a wonderfully written children's poem. Sure does bring a smile. It has a great flow and rhyme scheme. Great photos to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023

Thank you so much, Joanne, for your very kind review and for the 6 stars. It's amazing what you can find photos and images of on the internet.

reply by Joanne Gill-Maddick on 13-Jun-2023

Your welcome 🙂