Music
a nonet23 total reviews
Comment from rama devi
Nice work! I met BB King once, backstage at a show in New York at the Beacon Theatre in the 1980s. He flirted with me! (I was a teen)...and I didn't know it was him until the show started and he came on stage. I had no idea I had been hanging out with the KING!
Nonets are a musical form, so your theme is a perfect choice.
Personally, I would trim out the word CAN, at least from a few lines, and four in a row is a bit much, but then repetition is a device some readers may like. Not me.
I would recommend rewording this so there is more fluid enjambment between the lines. But the way you have it now does give a staccato beat. If your muse likes it that way, there's nothing wrong with it. Just my two cents.
Warm Regards,
rd
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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Nice work! I met BB King once, backstage at a show in New York at the Beacon Theatre in the 1980s. He flirted with me! (I was a teen)...and I didn't know it was him until the show started and he came on stage. I had no idea I had been hanging out with the KING!
Nonets are a musical form, so your theme is a perfect choice.
Personally, I would trim out the word CAN, at least from a few lines, and four in a row is a bit much, but then repetition is a device some readers may like. Not me.
I would recommend rewording this so there is more fluid enjambment between the lines. But the way you have it now does give a staccato beat. If your muse likes it that way, there's nothing wrong with it. Just my two cents.
Warm Regards,
rd
Comment Written 13-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2023
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rd great story, thanks for sharing. Your critique is well received.
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:-))
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
All true! Yes, Music is Art. My husband plays piano and I create art.Yes both forms of expressions Art. I would not want to know a world that had no music. I particularly love The Blues that certainly can heal Mind, Body, and Spiri. Best wishes!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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All true! Yes, Music is Art. My husband plays piano and I create art.Yes both forms of expressions Art. I would not want to know a world that had no music. I particularly love The Blues that certainly can heal Mind, Body, and Spiri. Best wishes!
Comment Written 11-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Alexandra thank you for your kind six star validation and congratulations to both of you for living out a life engaging your God giving talents to create beauty around your world.
Comment from Wendy G
A very well constructed Nonet. It flows very smoothly, and the form is a perfect Nonet shape, leading to an excellent one-word conclusion. Sending best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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A very well constructed Nonet. It flows very smoothly, and the form is a perfect Nonet shape, leading to an excellent one-word conclusion. Sending best wishes for the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Wendy, I apprecaite the validation, thank you.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Great nonet and a great message on a legend and an eternal music style! Your presentation of the poem is very fitting too. I think you selected the most powerful words that convey a meaningful message well. Great job!
I'm voting for this
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Great nonet and a great message on a legend and an eternal music style! Your presentation of the poem is very fitting too. I think you selected the most powerful words that convey a meaningful message well. Great job!
I'm voting for this
Comment Written 11-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Mario, I delight in your validation and positive words. Thank you, Sir!
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture.
You are right that music can make us feel happy, excited or sad.
It is definitely a piece of art
It is a music for people who love dancing.
So my e
People need music to help fall into sleep
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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I like the picture.
You are right that music can make us feel happy, excited or sad.
It is definitely a piece of art
It is a music for people who love dancing.
So my e
People need music to help fall into sleep
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you,Sir!
Comment from Ulla
This is such a wonderful nonet poem for the contest. I love it. As I read along it left me.with a profound sense of joy. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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This is such a wonderful nonet poem for the contest. I love it. As I read along it left me.with a profound sense of joy. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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uUlla, thank you very, very much!
Comment from karenina
Nonet is one of my favorite forms. The simplicity lends itself to many varied themes and when center aligned (in my opinion) it really "pops" on the page. Agreed as to music! It lifts, consoles, makes joyful, calms...
In short, the "key of life" would be "flat" indeed without it!
Karenina
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Nonet is one of my favorite forms. The simplicity lends itself to many varied themes and when center aligned (in my opinion) it really "pops" on the page. Agreed as to music! It lifts, consoles, makes joyful, calms...
In short, the "key of life" would be "flat" indeed without it!
Karenina
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Karenina, yes, that is so very true. be well...
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You, also!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The repetition of 'it can' to start successive lines of this nonet acts as a musical drumbeat, emphasizing the subject of the poem. Dropping the 'can' acts to add a staccato rhythm - very musical construction. kay
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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The repetition of 'it can' to start successive lines of this nonet acts as a musical drumbeat, emphasizing the subject of the poem. Dropping the 'can' acts to add a staccato rhythm - very musical construction. kay
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you Katherine.
Comment from Sarah Tummey
I like this nonet about the power of music, particularly your first line - music fill the air with harmony. You kept to the syllable count perfectly.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I like this nonet about the power of music, particularly your first line - music fill the air with harmony. You kept to the syllable count perfectly.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Sarah, thank you.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I agree with every word that you write. Music is one of life's blessings.
Your poem satisfies the syllable count of a nonet. For variety, I think that I would replace some of the "it" initial words and sprinkle some two or three syllables about.
Nice job though.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I agree with every word that you write. Music is one of life's blessings.
Your poem satisfies the syllable count of a nonet. For variety, I think that I would replace some of the "it" initial words and sprinkle some two or three syllables about.
Nice job though.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Debbie, thank you.