Crossed Paths
About what you did for me...3 total reviews
Comment from Andrea Kepple
I like how your poem is about the dad who made the choice to be a dad and create and instant family. Almost any man can father a child, not every man can be a child's dad.
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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I like how your poem is about the dad who made the choice to be a dad and create and instant family. Almost any man can father a child, not every man can be a child's dad.
Comment Written 20-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Andrea, for reading this poem and for the very nice review. It means a lot to me that you expressed his choice to be an instant dad. I learned much from him, but I have to admit I would not be the man I am without him in my life. It wasn't always easy, but I respect what he did for me.
Thanks again,
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Comment from Lisasview
Yes, Fathers can be special in our lives. I stumbled a bit reading your poem as I found that four lines in a row began with I...
Perhaps you could change the words around a bit to make your story smoother to read
Also, this really feels more like a story rather than a poem.
I did enjoy reading your words, but I felt in some way that I was reading a private diary.
Lisa, new to this site
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Yes, Fathers can be special in our lives. I stumbled a bit reading your poem as I found that four lines in a row began with I...
Perhaps you could change the words around a bit to make your story smoother to read
Also, this really feels more like a story rather than a poem.
I did enjoy reading your words, but I felt in some way that I was reading a private diary.
Lisa, new to this site
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you, Lisa, for reading this poem and for the review. I thought what I did write met the conditions - "Write a poem that honors your father, or the father figure in your life, living or dead. This poem can be any form you choose. Rhyming, free verse, acrostic, etc."
I do appreciate your feedback and will try to do better the next time.
Thanks again,
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Comment from darkmoonbaby
This is a beautiful piece inspired by the obvious love you have for your father-- the man who became someone he didn't "have to be". The only thing that I would say is that the font/background color combination is a bit hard on the eyes. This could potentially be improved by either changing one of the colors, or possibly making the words bold or larger. Either way, best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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This is a beautiful piece inspired by the obvious love you have for your father-- the man who became someone he didn't "have to be". The only thing that I would say is that the font/background color combination is a bit hard on the eyes. This could potentially be improved by either changing one of the colors, or possibly making the words bold or larger. Either way, best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2023
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Thank you, dark moon, for reading this poem and for the very nice review. I took your suggestion and bolded the text. Thanks for suggesting it needed attention.
I like your comment about "he didn't have to be." It's amazing how life is a series of things you don't actively control. None of us had anything to do with our being alive.
Thanks again,
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