The Village Store
They formed the hub of many villages.18 total reviews
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are comforting, descriptive and creative. This poem
brought me back to the good old days when life was simple. The author
did and excellent job expressing and describing the village store! Thank
you for the author's notes - great memories! The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem. Hi Barry, have a great day!....Maria
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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The author's words are comforting, descriptive and creative. This poem
brought me back to the good old days when life was simple. The author
did and excellent job expressing and describing the village store! Thank
you for the author's notes - great memories! The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem. Hi Barry, have a great day!....Maria
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Maria,
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Great that you liked it . Yes, oh for those days when things were simpler. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nicely done nostalgic poem about a vanishing part of life, the old fashion country store that had everything one needed down the street in the old town center
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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nicely done nostalgic poem about a vanishing part of life, the old fashion country store that had everything one needed down the street in the old town center
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Jake,
Thanks for taking the time to read and review my poem. Yes, I have many fond memories of the village store. It is still there but has changed quite a bit. More a foodmart now. Take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent poem that is so very well written and well thought out and held my attention throughout the entire piece! The words flowed quite nicely from beginning to end!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family!
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Excellent poem that is so very well written and well thought out and held my attention throughout the entire piece! The words flowed quite nicely from beginning to end!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Melodie,
Thanks so much for your review of my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and I am happy you have joined FanStory. I am sure you will learn and have fun.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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I've been on FanStory for a couple three years!!!
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Well even better. Enjoy
Comment from Lisasview
I gave you a 4 star because of the amazing photo... which I love... I only just joined Fan Story so I am very new and therefore hesitate to comment...
But you did say you are exploring improving your writing skills ... so here it goes...
I love structure when I read a poem...
My only thoughts are that there is basically no punctuation and that every line starts with a capital letter... So the flow is tight..
I am no expert but going over your poem which I really like what I see is a long list of what one can buy at this lovely village store..
If there was more of a connection to the store I do believe it would read better...
Lisa
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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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I gave you a 4 star because of the amazing photo... which I love... I only just joined Fan Story so I am very new and therefore hesitate to comment...
But you did say you are exploring improving your writing skills ... so here it goes...
I love structure when I read a poem...
My only thoughts are that there is basically no punctuation and that every line starts with a capital letter... So the flow is tight..
I am no expert but going over your poem which I really like what I see is a long list of what one can buy at this lovely village store..
If there was more of a connection to the store I do believe it would read better...
Lisa
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Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2023
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Lisa,
Thanks for taking time to read and review my poem. Thanks for your constructive comments. The capital letter thing is a bit of a hangover from previous teachings but I get where you are coming from. Take care and have a wonderful day. Keep writing.
Regards
Barry Penfold
Comment from BermyBye50
Barry,
This is an exceptional rhyming poem about the one and only village store found in every small town and city. Your poem pays tribute to the history and necessity of a wonderful essential service and allows the reader to reminiscence about the magical presence of a cherished village store in one's childhood memory. Brilliantly done.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Barry,
This is an exceptional rhyming poem about the one and only village store found in every small town and city. Your poem pays tribute to the history and necessity of a wonderful essential service and allows the reader to reminiscence about the magical presence of a cherished village store in one's childhood memory. Brilliantly done.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Eugene,
Thanks so much for the six star review. Glad you enjoyed it and it certainly brings back memories of those days when I used to frequent the store. Keep safe and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold
Comment from Alina Clemens
What a fun and colorful poem! I like that you were so specific with your lists, it made it all more poignant and really invoked all the senses and the nostalgia and for that corner, mom 'n pop shop we've all wandered into. It also made me hungry lol. The subtle rhymes were also a nice touch lending a more whimsical tone to the piece. Great job!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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What a fun and colorful poem! I like that you were so specific with your lists, it made it all more poignant and really invoked all the senses and the nostalgia and for that corner, mom 'n pop shop we've all wandered into. It also made me hungry lol. The subtle rhymes were also a nice touch lending a more whimsical tone to the piece. Great job!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Alina,
Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem. Glad you enjoyed it. Yes, it was such a wonderful experience to go into the store and just marvel how much they had in the shop. You had better go and get some sweets or bacon to cure the hunger.
Take Care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love this inventive and well written poem and it is a joy to read. A skilful write with a good glow and fine rhymes, I just want to jump into your poem and explore this shop as it seems to sell everything, a fun post Barry, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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I love this inventive and well written poem and it is a joy to read. A skilful write with a good glow and fine rhymes, I just want to jump into your poem and explore this shop as it seems to sell everything, a fun post Barry, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Dolly,
Thanks again for reading and reviewing my poem. Glad you enjoyed it and it was a fun write. Yes the village store sure was full of great little items. Character plus. Take care and have a great day.
Cheeers
Barry Penfold
Comment from Paul McFarland
Ghat's a good one, Barry. The same is true of the old country store. I live in a small rural town that use to have a country store where you could buy almost anything. It was bought by someone "from away" and turned into a high priced specialty store where all the other people "from away" now shop. All the many farms that use to be here have all been abandoned.
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Ghat's a good one, Barry. The same is true of the old country store. I live in a small rural town that use to have a country store where you could buy almost anything. It was bought by someone "from away" and turned into a high priced specialty store where all the other people "from away" now shop. All the many farms that use to be here have all been abandoned.
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Comment Written 07-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thanks Paul,
Thanks for the great review and yes it is a shame that many of the village stores disappear through change or simply are no longer viable. You take care and have a great day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
