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Next Time Tell the Truth

What was he thinking

35 total reviews 
Comment from w.j.debi
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Mistake after mistake... yes, not the brightest of choices.
The principal sounds like a nice guy, understanding that kids make wrong choices, but he can only stretch it so far. It still sounds like you got off easy. Now, about next time...
Excellent story. You have a great narrative voice. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
    Thank you, Debi on this great review and saying I have a great narrative voice.


    John
Comment from Sanku
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true,true. It would have been better if you had confessed about your firecracker escapade to your parents. I enjoyed reading this slice of your boyhood... Thanks for posting...I wish I had a six******

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
    Thank you so much for stopping by, Sanku and the virtual six.
    John
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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This boy really did have a few bad days. his teenage brain was doing bavkflips I reckon. An amusing tale about sometimes having to learn our lessons the hard way. I enjoyed it and was thankful he wasn't mine LOL.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 10-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
    I laughed at your brains doing backflips.
    Thank you.,. John
Comment from Michelle D. Carr
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I loved this. It not only gave me some good chuckles but I thought your use of voice for the 15 year old was great. It had a kind of Stephen King tone to it. Only not scary. The plot was amazing.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
    Michelle, what a great review. Thank you gif the six star glitter?
    John
Comment from Sally Law
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Wow, you were surrounded by folks that kept you on the straight and narrow. Fireworks were like Coca-Colas in my native Georgia. Everyone had them and they were legal. My brothers were pyromaniacs. The blew up my Barbie Corvette, for pity sake. Nobody arrested them, except for me. Robbie's still on probation.

A delightful read of the things we did that we wish we hadn't.

Sending you my best today as always.
Sal :))

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023
    Sally. Thanks for the great review. Sorry your bro is still on probation. Double secret probation (from one of my favorite movies, Animal House). Fireworks are illegal here in NJ.
    Enjoy your weekend?
    Cheers,
    John
Comment from royowen
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It's funny how poor decisions proliferate in the hope one "may get away with it" but somewhere, somehow, every sin we commit has its consequences, the problem is someone else pays for our wrongdoing. Beautifully written, John I once threw firecrackers at the girls while waiting for the school bus, when the principle warned there would "dire" consequences for anyone caught, there was a teacher standing where I couldn't see him...ouch! Well done my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023
    Roy, thank you for taking the time to read my post. I guess we all have some firecracker in us?.
    Cheers,
    John
Comment from jessizero
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I enjoyed reading your very interesting story. I know we all make bad choices when we are young, but this was a doozy. Thanks for sharing, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023
    Jessi,
    Thank you for the great review and 6 stars. Awesome!
    John
Comment from BethShelby
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This is prerry amusing since I was not you nor your parent. My youngest daughter did stuff like that. Were you the baby in th family? Connie left a trash can on fire and in the girl's bathroom, got suspended and didn't tell.

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023
    Yikes. Almost like my story.
    Thank you for reading.
Comment from Lisasview
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Making the right decision isn't always easy for a young person. The parents really need to help with the guidelines early on.
I did enjoy your story and thank you for sharing it.
Lisa, new to this site

 Comment Written 09-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023
    Thank you, Lisa for taking the time to read my post. I do appreciate it and your time.
    Question - where do you see room for improvement in my story? Or are there corrections needed that I can make to my post?

    These typically are required with three and four star rewards.

    Thank you in advance.
    John
reply by Lisasview on 09-Jun-2023
    Oh I did not realise that typically when reviewing one needs to leave more detailed advice... I will look at your work again now..
    Lisa
reply by Lisasview on 09-Jun-2023
    Gosh, as I am new to this site I really hate to say too much... but, here it goes.
    I feel that your story was good but it needed a moral ending.. It was just too light and easy for him with little consequence...The fact that he should have listened to his sister doesn't justify any of his actions.
    I read through you words several times...
    Lisa
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023
    Welcome to the site. I hope you enjoy your time here and I look forward to reading your posts.

    I thank you for your insight into my story and I understand and can get along side of what you?re saying.
    Thank you again?. John
reply by Lisasview on 09-Jun-2023
    Glad, you understood what I was saying...
    Lisa
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
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John,
I loved this well-written humorous story.
You sound like my brothers who used to get into trouble at school. (They turned out alright, though.)
Your writing is clear and concise, and your ending is great.
Good luck with this one, John!
Cindy

 Comment Written 08-Jun-2023


reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
    Thank you, Cindy.
    I?m glad you enjoyed it and it brought back some memories.

    Cheers,
    John