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He groaned ....7 total reviews
Comment from Andrea Kepple
I like how you told this story. You had me trying to figure out what was going on until close to the end when I figured out the alternative telling you gave. Best of luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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I like how you told this story. You had me trying to figure out what was going on until close to the end when I figured out the alternative telling you gave. Best of luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much Andrea for a very positive review. I am glad you enjoyed it. Thanks too for your good wishes.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
Great new perspective on a great biblical event. I like the way you developed the story slowly and steadily, letting the reader scratch their head and wonder. Then the final lines... perfectly constructed.
Good luck with the contest!!!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Great new perspective on a great biblical event. I like the way you developed the story slowly and steadily, letting the reader scratch their head and wonder. Then the final lines... perfectly constructed.
Good luck with the contest!!!
Comment Written 08-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much. I appreciate these most encouraging words and good wishes.
Comment from country ranch writer
A bit different for us to read but maybe if they had listened they too could have been spared upon the ark. I
People like to be judge and jury. they like to say zi told you so.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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A bit different for us to read but maybe if they had listened they too could have been spared upon the ark. I
People like to be judge and jury. they like to say zi told you so.
Comment Written 06-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much for reviewing. I appreciate it.
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Comment from RodG
What a great job you did of telling this story of Noah. I guessed who he was about half way through the story. I like how (1) you set the scene contrasting how his family is imprisoned while others are partying, (2) how you characterize "him" as someone ostracized by his neighbors, and (3) how you build toward your climax by using dialog.
This story should win! Rod
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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What a great job you did of telling this story of Noah. I guessed who he was about half way through the story. I like how (1) you set the scene contrasting how his family is imprisoned while others are partying, (2) how you characterize "him" as someone ostracized by his neighbors, and (3) how you build toward your climax by using dialog.
This story should win! Rod
Comment Written 05-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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Thank you very much Rod. You have understood! (others seem a bit perplexed!) I appreciate your review and encouragement a lot.
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Thank you too for the amazing six stars! I didn?t even realise at first. (Too early in the morning!) I greatly value the honour.
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Thank you too for the amazing six stars! I didn?t even realise at first. (Too early in the morning!) I greatly value the honour.
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My pleasure. A superb story.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
What? Did you just come from Sunday school when you wrote this epilogue that sure sounded like Noah in Genesis, chapters 6 through 9. Still, I enjoyed a different twist and can relate to the world going to h... in a handbasket.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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What? Did you just come from Sunday school when you wrote this epilogue that sure sounded like Noah in Genesis, chapters 6 through 9. Still, I enjoyed a different twist and can relate to the world going to h... in a handbasket.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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Thank you for the review!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
That's quite a horror tale for anyone suffering from claustrophobia! And I wondered where this was going which was skilful on the part of the writer. The story continues to evolve and we become aware of a wedding party and this appears to be quite an extreme way of avoiding this particular celebration! But by the end we realise that this has been prescient action to avoid inevitable disaster, warnings ignored by the victims of this flooding. An original story expanding from the prompt. Good luck in the contest! A very worthy contender! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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That's quite a horror tale for anyone suffering from claustrophobia! And I wondered where this was going which was skilful on the part of the writer. The story continues to evolve and we become aware of a wedding party and this appears to be quite an extreme way of avoiding this particular celebration! But by the end we realise that this has been prescient action to avoid inevitable disaster, warnings ignored by the victims of this flooding. An original story expanding from the prompt. Good luck in the contest! A very worthy contender! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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Thank you. Very perceptive! You understood.
Comment from royowen
It's almost like locking oneself in an unescapable dwelling and throwing away the keys, and hoping someone can break in when everyone else in the world has died, perhaps God will come to the rescue. This is beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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It's almost like locking oneself in an unescapable dwelling and throwing away the keys, and hoping someone can break in when everyone else in the world has died, perhaps God will come to the rescue. This is beautifully written my friend, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2023
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Lol. Thanks for the review.
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