Passion For Poetry
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Light The Rot"Book 3 of assorted poems
6 total reviews
Comment from thoughtgame2
once again SO MUCH VOLUME! you are definitely my go to person when I'm stuck mid-thought, and yes it happens more times than i care to mention. very rare do we find so much power in so few words. thank you for sharing that quality you alone possess. keep it coming.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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once again SO MUCH VOLUME! you are definitely my go to person when I'm stuck mid-thought, and yes it happens more times than i care to mention. very rare do we find so much power in so few words. thank you for sharing that quality you alone possess. keep it coming.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Wow, thank you, so nice to see you. And I'm always happy to have your review. It means a lot to me, so thank you very much! Hope your having an awesome day!
Comment from Paul Manton
Love the poem - maybe not the philosophy - well not all of it. Why do I say that? "Light shines in the darkness, and the darkness can neither understand it or overcome it . . " which is, admittedly a paraphrase of John's Gospel - in which Jesus declares Himself to be 'The Light of the World." In Austria, my 'second home', there is a major, government sponsored charity called 'Licht ins Dunkel' (Light into the Darkness) which amalgamates the work of hundreds of smaller charities - and in particular those caring for damaged children. There is a lot of light available for those in need, all over the world.
My response to your poem is to agree wholeheartedly that 'the rot has set in to our societies' - all your criticisms in the footnotes are true - but the light not only shows up the rot - it is a power in itself - aiding us to rip out the rot, pull down the useless structures and rebuild a better, cleaner, fairer world.
The line 'equine moon trotting' is very original, and worth a six - it's a lovely image - but I will demolish your rotten room, if you don't mind.
This is my last six. I knew it would find a worthy home some time today.
Love from Paul
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Love the poem - maybe not the philosophy - well not all of it. Why do I say that? "Light shines in the darkness, and the darkness can neither understand it or overcome it . . " which is, admittedly a paraphrase of John's Gospel - in which Jesus declares Himself to be 'The Light of the World." In Austria, my 'second home', there is a major, government sponsored charity called 'Licht ins Dunkel' (Light into the Darkness) which amalgamates the work of hundreds of smaller charities - and in particular those caring for damaged children. There is a lot of light available for those in need, all over the world.
My response to your poem is to agree wholeheartedly that 'the rot has set in to our societies' - all your criticisms in the footnotes are true - but the light not only shows up the rot - it is a power in itself - aiding us to rip out the rot, pull down the useless structures and rebuild a better, cleaner, fairer world.
The line 'equine moon trotting' is very original, and worth a six - it's a lovely image - but I will demolish your rotten room, if you don't mind.
This is my last six. I knew it would find a worthy home some time today.
Love from Paul
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much. I am honored and humbled as always by your reviews. And by your ratings encourages me to continue for this. I thank you very much!
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Love from Paul
Comment from JSD
A fascinating two lines Lea. I'm so impressed with how you have managed to say so much in such a little space. I like the imagistic link of 'equine' and 'trotting', although I'm not entirely sure why the moon is equine? Great picture too.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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A fascinating two lines Lea. I'm so impressed with how you have managed to say so much in such a little space. I like the imagistic link of 'equine' and 'trotting', although I'm not entirely sure why the moon is equine? Great picture too.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2023
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The spots on the moon remind me of a horse type called an appaloosa. It is the dark and light contrast of the moon, which is similar to the dark and light contrast of the appaloosa. Thank you again for your fine review. I'm so happy you like it. I'm always happy to receive your reviews. And your comments are always important to me. Thank you again and have a great day!
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I learn something every day!
Comment from Lobber
Hi Lea,
I read this in conjunction with your jisei poem.
A suitable, effective pairing. With brevity you've achieved a lot, my friend. Great choice of art. I always like the drama and tension that black and white offers.
- Jerry
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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Hi Lea,
I read this in conjunction with your jisei poem.
A suitable, effective pairing. With brevity you've achieved a lot, my friend. Great choice of art. I always like the drama and tension that black and white offers.
- Jerry
Comment Written 04-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2023
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Thanks Jerry I'm really glad you liked it. I appreciate your comments and your kind of review! I hope your day is magnificent Thanks again!!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Your metaphor of the moon trotting like horses made me smile Lea, not sure what the dripping room rotting means here, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023
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Your metaphor of the moon trotting like horses made me smile Lea, not sure what the dripping room rotting means here, I wish you luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 02-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023
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It basically means not even rot can hide from the light
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Thanks so much Dolly. I appreciate your reviews as always and your in siteful conversation. I hope your evening is amazing!
Comment from Richard Montfort Cary
We need more and more of these passionate words from author's of your strong character and care . The metaphor is painful to accept, yet it is so. Yes!
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023
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We need more and more of these passionate words from author's of your strong character and care . The metaphor is painful to accept, yet it is so. Yes!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2023
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2023
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Thank you again!