Haiku ('midst miners' relics)
Golden trees in the diggings.20 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, Midst Miners' Relics, has the proper formatting and finds that there's gold in them there trees, though the chances of the hard stuff anywhere else is more likely found in the past.
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This haiku, Midst Miners' Relics, has the proper formatting and finds that there's gold in them there trees, though the chances of the hard stuff anywhere else is more likely found in the past.
Comment Written 31-May-2023
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lisa,
There sure is gold in these hills. I like the pun of miners find gold
and the leaves turning gold.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good week.
Joan
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Hi Lisa,
There sure is gold in these hills. I like the pun of miners find gold
and the leaves turning gold.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a good week.
Joan
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from patcelaw
This is a good haiku for the contest. I wish you the best in the contest. I hope you have a wonderful week. May God bless you with all of your writing. Patricia
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This is a good haiku for the contest. I wish you the best in the contest. I hope you have a wonderful week. May God bless you with all of your writing. Patricia
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I like how this author led up to the last line. I pondered on
this line and feel anything is possible. The artwork is perfect and goes
well with the theme and words of this poem.
Hope you having a great day!....Maria
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last line
says it all! I like how this author led up to the last line. I pondered on
this line and feel anything is possible. The artwork is perfect and goes
well with the theme and words of this poem.
Hope you having a great day!....Maria
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from Mrs. KT
Good morning, Lisa!
Indeed, one can find "still gold in the hills."
Not too many poplars in northern Michigan, but where our son and daughter-in-law live in Colorado, they set the hills ablaze with gold in the autumn months.
Creative and filled with beautiful imagery!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
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Good morning, Lisa!
Indeed, one can find "still gold in the hills."
Not too many poplars in northern Michigan, but where our son and daughter-in-law live in Colorado, they set the hills ablaze with gold in the autumn months.
Creative and filled with beautiful imagery!
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from Debbie Pope
You have noted it before--our minds think alike. I saw that artwork and knew that you had to do something with gold in the hills. The photo simply begged for it, and you did not disappoint. It is not trite when you use the line for a new purpose. Despite how man is destroying the beauty of the land by mining, the beautiful of nature thrives.
Well done. Perfect image choice. Perfect use of the art.
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You have noted it before--our minds think alike. I saw that artwork and knew that you had to do something with gold in the hills. The photo simply begged for it, and you did not disappoint. It is not trite when you use the line for a new purpose. Despite how man is destroying the beauty of the land by mining, the beautiful of nature thrives.
Well done. Perfect image choice. Perfect use of the art.
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice photo and presentation, Lisa.
-You wrote a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-You create a vivid word picture of the scene.
-Nature has a way of beautifying many places,
even where there is an old relic.
-A good satori line, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
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-Nice photo and presentation, Lisa.
-You wrote a good haiku with a good topic.
-Effective nature and seasonal imagery.
-You create a vivid word picture of the scene.
-Nature has a way of beautifying many places,
even where there is an old relic.
-A good satori line, as well.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Lisa,
I really like this splendid Haiku which compares golden leaves to the gold that used to be mined there. Very clever.
Good luck in the contest, Lisa!
Blessings,
Cindy
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Lisa,
I really like this splendid Haiku which compares golden leaves to the gold that used to be mined there. Very clever.
Good luck in the contest, Lisa!
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from Pantygynt
Old machinery eventually blends with nature to form an artwork all of its own as is the case here. It works a bit like our ancient castles fallinto ruination and there is no reason why it shouldn't, after all, rust is only gold without the glittter and every relic tells a story.
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Old machinery eventually blends with nature to form an artwork all of its own as is the case here. It works a bit like our ancient castles fallinto ruination and there is no reason why it shouldn't, after all, rust is only gold without the glittter and every relic tells a story.
Comment Written 29-May-2023
Comment from Debra White
Hello LisaMay :)
I enjoyed reading your haiku.
Nice use of alliteration and great satori line.
Love the theme of gold here.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
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Hello LisaMay :)
I enjoyed reading your haiku.
Nice use of alliteration and great satori line.
Love the theme of gold here.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra
Comment Written 29-May-2023
