Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

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 Comment Written 13-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023

Thank you, Karen! Sal xoxo's

Comment from Father Flaps

Exceptional

Hi Sally,
Catching up! I've been busy with worship team music and an ailing wife these past few weeks.
"Detective... now why would I want to do that? I'm sure I can handle you on my own. What can I do for you today?" ... (I read this and said to myself, "Oh my, Mr. Elling, you are in for a huge surprise. You have no idea who you're dealing with!")
Love this!!!
"The detective stood and drew closer. "Know this, if you somehow manage to escape, I will find you. I have made it my life's mission to prosecute you for your many crimes. That's right. I'm staying here with Aspen Grove P. D. as a detective and criminal profiler. And it's not enough to put you away, Elling. My team will work tirelessly to expose every low life associated to you. We're already on to your crooked attorney."
Go, Sally!!! I can picture this so well. I know what the beautiful detective looks like. And I've put Vincent Price ("House of Usher"/1960) into the role of Fitzgerald Elling.
And a blazing finale,
"I thought you were blind, Detective."
"Another monumental oversight on your part, sir. I see you very clearly."
So really, Sally was just trying to antagonize Elling. Getting under his skin. She accomplished that!
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 20-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Jun-2023

Thank you so much, Kim. I'm sorry Judi is ailing and life is busy. I thought something had to be going on to keep you away. So good to see you, my friend. Thank you so much for the lovely review and generous compliments and stars.
Blessing to you always,
Sal XOs

reply by Father Flaps on 20-Jun-2023

I promise to catch up over the next few days! Almost bedtime right now. And I have a sore neck from all this housework! LOL.

Comment from Cindy Warren

Excellent

I'm sure he'll try to get away, and he has plans for Simon. He must be more than a little freaked out about them finding Victoria. But I'm also sure Sally and King will stop him.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023

Thank you so much for the kind review of my book chapter. So appreciated and needed. Sending along my very best to you all, Sally.XOs

Comment from eliz100

Excellent

This is an excellent chapter. You moved the story along nicely.I can feel the caring between the newlyweds and the urgency of their needing to move them.I do notm see any room for improvement.Have a blessed day.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023

Thank you so much for the wonderful review of my book chapter. So glad you?re enjoying it and staying with me. Blessings to you always, dear Elizabeth. Sal :))

Comment from Monica Chaddick

Excellent

This is the first installment of your story that I have read, but now I want to go back and read them all. Great job, and I wish you the best in everything. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2023

Thank you for the lovely review and compliments. Both are so appreciated. Sending you my best today as always.
Sal :))

Comment from Teri7

Excellent

Sally, I wish I had six stars to give you for this chapter. I am so looking forward to the next one now! Very good descriptive words and good imagery from your words. love and blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 09-Jun-2023

Teri dear,
Sorry to be so late but I have been in bed sick for three weeks. I?m just now catching up with all my reviews, especially my book. I appreciate you so much and it thrills me that you were coming along with my book. I am blessed my sweet friend.

Thank you again for catching up with me.

Blessings to you all,
Sal XOs

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Excellent chapter Sally with plenty of pace and story-telling. I enjoyed the tension over the telegram and the concern then about Simon's whereabouts being known. Your movement between scenes is cleverly done and brings the reader quickly up to speed. I particularly enjoyed the scene in the hospital with the Detective getting the better of Fee and leaving the latter distinctly bemused! Thanks for sharing. Debbie

 Comment Written 01-Jun-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023

Thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter, dear Debbie. It?s so appreciated. I?m so glad you?re enjoying the book. Sending along my very best to you and yours, Sally.xo

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Exceptional

it was more than sex; it was a union of body, soul, and spirit. - lovely line Sally, and also true if love is going to last. Great chapter. Romance, then the tension of the telegram, and finally Detetive Sally's visit to Fee's room. Loved Sally's last word to him - I see you very clearly."
Typo -how in (the) world did he know
Another great chapter Sally,
well done.
valda

 Comment Written 31-May-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023

Dear Valda, thank you so much for the lovely review of my book chapter and generous six star rating. It means so much to me. I?m so glad you enjoyed it all, and I appreciate the critique as well. That really helps me as you know I?m blind. I miss those little things sometimes.

Sending along my very best to you all and blessings to across the miles. Sally XOs

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

Are Betty and Beth the same person? I'm confused.

"I see you very clearly." Great line here - can't wait for Elling to go down!

A good chapter, Sal. How many words do you usually use per chapter? I'm writing a four-part series, but wonder what you novelists use for a word count that isn't so long that no one will read it.

Thanks for a great chapter, see you next week.

xxoo
Pam

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 30-May-2023

Thank you for the excellent review and generous stars, Pam dear. No, just Betty Jo only. A typo on my part that no one caught but you. Thank you!

My chapters probably look longer than they really are. I have a [previously in chapter thus and so], and an extensive character list. The main chapter is around 1000 words, as it is a book, not a short story.

Sending you my best today as always,
Sal XOs.

Comment from Jay Squires

Exceptional

This is such a great chapter, Sally!

Back at the county hospital, Fitzgerald Elling had a visitor. Well, two if you counted the German Shepherd. [I Like the way you alluded to who the PERSON was who entered, here.]

"I thought you were blind, Detective."

"Another monumental oversight on your part, sir. I see you very clearly." [What a delicious ending to the chapter!!]

 Comment Written 30-May-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2023

Dear Jay, thank you so much for the wonderful review and generous six star rating. I?m always so blown away. Yes my dog is a person in every way and sometimes I think that I am more like a dog every day. I?m glad you enjoyed my chapter and especially my delicious ending to the chapter. Sending along my very best to you as always, my friend, Sally XOs