Under the Oak
3-5-3 Haiku-like (neath the oak)15 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Yes! Yes, they do and you were perceptive and poetic enough to capture it! Congrats on winning this contest and sorry I'm so late reviewing. I am trying to offer return reviews for all who reviewed my latest post -- I saw this one needed one more review to achieve recognized status and thought I'd stop here. It's 97 degrees and sweltering here today...I could use some shade...some "dappling" of sun! This is excellent Mark...
Karenina
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
Yes! Yes, they do and you were perceptive and poetic enough to capture it! Congrats on winning this contest and sorry I'm so late reviewing. I am trying to offer return reviews for all who reviewed my latest post -- I saw this one needed one more review to achieve recognized status and thought I'd stop here. It's 97 degrees and sweltering here today...I could use some shade...some "dappling" of sun! This is excellent Mark...
Karenina
Comment Written 07-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2023
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K,
Yes, it is hot, but now it is threatening to storm. The thunder is in the air. We had plans to dine out, but we will postpone that happening because of the inclement weather possibility.
thanks for your review and your thoughtfulness.
M
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YOu're welcome. Possible showers hear tomorrow...and in the mid- eighties, or so they SAY!
Comment from Sally Law
Sorry to have missed this beautiful offering, Mark. I have been ill and behind in so many things. Congratulations on your blue ribbon. So well deserved!
Blessings,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
Sorry to have missed this beautiful offering, Mark. I have been ill and behind in so many things. Congratulations on your blue ribbon. So well deserved!
Blessings,
Sal :))
Comment Written 29-May-2023
reply by the author on 29-May-2023
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Thanks Sally!
Hope you are better now.
Mark
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you now have 12 votes!
I'm a tree hugger. My first ever poem was about trees.
Speaking of noble oaks always make me think of Burl Ives Green Green Grass of Home.
I have the LP :
Yes, they'll all come to see me
In the shade of that old oak tree
As they lay me
'Neath the green, green grass of home.
No need to review.
https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=904926
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
Ciao poet, you now have 12 votes!
I'm a tree hugger. My first ever poem was about trees.
Speaking of noble oaks always make me think of Burl Ives Green Green Grass of Home.
I have the LP :
Yes, they'll all come to see me
In the shade of that old oak tree
As they lay me
'Neath the green, green grass of home.
No need to review.
https://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?hd=1&id=904926
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Thanks Tempeste for your voting confidence. Let?s see if I hold the lead.
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Celebrations ! 🥳
A well deserved red ribbon win!
Comment from PoemsOfDD
This is a good entry for the 3-5-3 nature poem contest.
Even without the picture the words allow the reader to visualise the light and shade between the branches of an oak tree. Nicely done. Best of luck in the competition.
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
This is a good entry for the 3-5-3 nature poem contest.
Even without the picture the words allow the reader to visualise the light and shade between the branches of an oak tree. Nicely done. Best of luck in the competition.
Comment Written 27-May-2023
reply by the author on 27-May-2023
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Honestly, methinks the artwork actually helped my popularity in the contest voting. Pleased you liked my phrasing.
Comment from Mario PIERRE
This is a very beautiful poem. The words you chose are very appropriate and already makes the reader envision the landscape. Nicely done!! Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
This is a very beautiful poem. The words you chose are very appropriate and already makes the reader envision the landscape. Nicely done!! Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thanks Mario! Pleased my imagery worked for you.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-5-3, Under the Oak, has the proper formatting and pictures the painter's light penetrating the cloaking limbs of the mighty tree, and reaching the canvas lawn.
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
This 3-5-3, Under the Oak, has the proper formatting and pictures the painter's light penetrating the cloaking limbs of the mighty tree, and reaching the canvas lawn.
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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thanks Bill for your confidence for this contest entry
Comment from lyenochka
I like the haiku feel of this poem! The sunlight through the leaves of the oak tree create a picture on the ground below. The final line gives a fresh perspective like a good satori end. Hope this does well in the contest!
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
I like the haiku feel of this poem! The sunlight through the leaves of the oak tree create a picture on the ground below. The final line gives a fresh perspective like a good satori end. Hope this does well in the contest!
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thanks for your high praise for this contest entry. Pleased with your response to my last line.
Comment from Nicki Nance
This most precisely captures the spirit of the prompt. Dapples is an effective and unusual choice for imagery. The graphic is a perfect fit. A brilliant submission.
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
This most precisely captures the spirit of the prompt. Dapples is an effective and unusual choice for imagery. The graphic is a perfect fit. A brilliant submission.
Comment Written 26-May-2023
reply by the author on 26-May-2023
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Thanks Nicki for that high praise. My poetry wheelhouse only includes short poems, usually 5-7-5 syllable lines.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your 3/5/3 poem.
The imagery is lovely - I like the idea of the sunlight painting the ground through the gaps in the oak's branches.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your 3/5/3 poem.
The imagery is lovely - I like the idea of the sunlight painting the ground through the gaps in the oak's branches.
Good luck in the voting booth.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks for your kind words and voting wishes Debra! Pleased my phrasing gave you some joy.
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Debra,
Apparently the voters agreed with your prior assessment. So pleased with your applause and now my results.
Mark
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Congratulations! Well deserved :)
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent haiku entry for the
Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt contest.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize the tree.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
Excellent haiku entry for the
Nature 3-5-3 writing prompt contest.
I like the presentation too. Concrete images easy to visualize the tree.
Good syllables count and connection between lines.
Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 25-May-2023
reply by the author on 25-May-2023
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Thanks for your kind critique of this short poem Gypsy!